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There's something strange and unnatural living in Bon-Bon's house.

Something other than Lyra.

First Published
4th Oct 2012
Last Modified
31st Oct 2012
#1 · 121w, 12h ago · 4 · 2 · Ponygeist ·

I was hoping Anthropology sequel.

#2 · 121w, 12h ago · · · Ponygeist ·

Inb4 featured.

CBE
#3 · 121w, 12h ago · 2 · · Ponygeist ·

It's a Lyra and Bon-Bon story. I'm happy with that.

#4 · 121w, 12h ago · · · Ponygeist ·

Holy buck a new story by JasonTheHuman!

*drops everything, reads immediately*

#5 · 121w, 12h ago · · · Ponygeist ·

>JasonTheHuman posts a new story.

>Instant Fave after reading.

#6 · 121w, 12h ago · · · Ponygeist ·

A new a JasonTheHuman Lyra fic? I'm in!

EDIT: Well, Bon-Bon fic. But still!

#7 · 121w, 12h ago · · · Ponygeist ·

Oh, goody! Just in time for Halloween! Nightmare Night! :pinkiehappy:

#8 · 121w, 12h ago · · · Ponygeist ·

I love your description :yay:

#9 · 121w, 12h ago · · · Ponygeist ·

Something other than Lyra.

LOL

#10 · 121w, 12h ago · · · Ponygeist ·

Looks fun so far!

#11 · 121w, 12h ago · · · Ponygeist ·

Lyra's reaction... it is the same as mine to this story!  And new episodes of Red Dwarf as well? Could this day get any better!?! No, I think not. It has achieved maximum amounts of awesome possible! :pinkiehappy: :rainbowdetermined2: :raritystarry:

#12 · 121w, 12h ago · · 1 · Ponygeist ·

Well Jason,  Its pretty good, I like how you still kept lyra's personality from anthropology. Since this is a darkish fic I will be paying close attention. Do not let me down.

>>1387591 no first?

Azu
#13 · 121w, 12h ago · · · Ponygeist ·

Whats this?! Something new by JasonTheHuman? With Lyra and Bon Bon?

Instant like and fav! :rainbowdetermined2:

#14 · 121w, 12h ago · · · Ponygeist ·

Oh Lyra

#15 · 121w, 12h ago · · · Ponygeist ·

>Haunted by a ghost.

>Best Nightmare Night ever.

LOGIC!!!

#16 · 121w, 12h ago · · · Ponygeist ·

One of my hands [img]//dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Lyra.png[/img] is covered in butter so I can' accurately praise this, I am sorry.  [img]//dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Lyra_cry.png[/img] But don't fret for I will follow this! [img]//dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/misc_Lyra_dealwithit.png[/img]

#17 · 121w, 12h ago · · · Ponygeist ·

>>1387676 I disagree. I just got Jin-Roh: The Wolf Brigade on DVD. I've surpassed your awesome levels by approximately 41.9347 percent.

#18 · 121w, 12h ago · · · Ponygeist ·

>>1387722

I have no idea what that is, therefore it doesn't count. My point stands. Good day sir! :trollestia:

#19 · 121w, 12h ago · · · Ponygeist ·

>>1387749 Anime. And I think I still win, because I'm currently listening to The Eagles, and nothing is better than them ever.

#20 · 121w, 12h ago · · · Ponygeist ·

Suspenseful. I like it  

#21 · 121w, 12h ago · · · Ponygeist ·

Halloween enters JasonTheHuman makes horror fic with Lyra and Bon bon

(its because of Halloween right?)

THIS HALLOWEEN WILL BE GLORIOUS!:yay:

#22 · 121w, 12h ago · · · Ponygeist ·

>>1387682 I'm not that kind of guy.

#23 · 121w, 11h ago · · · Ponygeist ·

Looks pretty promising! :twilightsmile:

#24 · 121w, 11h ago · · · Ponygeist ·

I favourited this as soon as I saw the description.

#25 · 121w, 11h ago · · · Ponygeist ·

>>1387591 same here  but any story with lyra and bon bon is a good story

#26 · 121w, 11h ago · · · Ponygeist ·

Faved and liked before i even read it, because i know that dis gon be gud. :pinkiehappy:

#27 · 121w, 11h ago · · · Ponygeist ·

I don't really have much to add here... I mostly just feel compelled to do an 'inb4 featured' comment.

I'll have to give the first chapter another look later, when I've got the time to read it... well, properly, I guess. For now I'll just stick with the standard "I like the story, keep doing what you're doing" thing. Oh, and just pretend that I threw in some generic MOAR picture.

Good work, etc... and this reminds me that I still need to drag myself around to reading the second half of Anthropology. :ajbemused:

#28 · 121w, 11h ago · · · Ponygeist ·

Anthropology's author puts out a story. Insta-fav without even reading it, like a boss.

#29 · 121w, 11h ago · · · Ponygeist ·

Alright!  I'm glad to be seeing more of your work Jason, you were inactive for a while and I was getting worried that Anthropology had been your one hit wonder.  

So far, this fic is pretty damn good!  I like how Bon-Bon is ripped from her comfort zone, and into Lyra's!  I've also noticed that you have added a lot more detail in your descriptions of settings and actions than in your previous fics.  I hope you can keep this one alive and fed, and a word of advice, don't set chapter dates.  Don't rush yourself in getting the chapters out, take your time, and give love to the chapters you do complete.  

Try to use some more complex sentence structures, and show us the emotions of the characters when they're talking.  I noticed a lit in your

past fics, that a lot of the time, the it would be:

"That would be great!" Lyra said.  

Try doing this: "That would be great!"  Lyra said, her posture relaxing with relief.  

One example from the story is when Lyra says she heard something:

Lyra's ears perked up. "Wait. Did you hear that?" She glanced behind her into Bon-Bon's room.

"Hear what?" Bon-Bon said.

"Listen."

This could be changed by adding details like:

Lyra's ears perked up, and her head cocked slightly.  "Wait.  Did you hear that?"  She glanced behind her into Bon-Bon's room.

"Hear what?" Bon-Bon asked, her annoyance towards her tennant showing.

Lyra put a hoof to her lips. "Listen."  She whispered, her head lowering slightly in an effort to hear the unknown sound.

It really fleshes the characters out more, and gives us a clear picture of what the they're doing.  I hope this fic turns out as good and as well recieved as Anthropology, I know you got a like and a fave from me!

#30 · 121w, 11h ago · · · Ponygeist ·

Oh Lyra... didn't you learn anything from Paranormal Activity?

The one who thinks the haunting is cool and makes light of it *always* gets it in the end.  :pinkiesad2:

#31 · 121w, 11h ago · · · Ponygeist ·

Great to have you back :pinkiehappy: :twilightsmile:

#32 · 121w, 11h ago · · · Ponygeist ·

The Haunting - Testament

#33 · 121w, 11h ago · · · Ponygeist ·

>>1387964 Well buck, I guess that means I would die then. I can never keep a straight face in serious situations like this.

#34 · 121w, 10h ago · · · Ponygeist ·

There's something strange and unnatural living in Bon-Bon's house.

Something other than Lyra.

For that opening alone you get a favorite and a thumbs up.  :)  The story being good will just be gravy beyond that.  :rainbowkiss:

#35 · 121w, 10h ago · · · Ponygeist ·

seems kind of like 'a ghost story,' but from Lyra and Bon-Bon's point of view.

#36 · 121w, 10h ago · · · Ponygeist ·

>>1387682

No. No first. "First!" comments are for attention whores.

Anyways, like it so far.

#37 · 121w, 10h ago · · · Ponygeist ·

Separate rooms?  Disappointing...:applejackunsure:

Otherwise, I'm looking forward to more.

#38 · 121w, 10h ago · · · Ponygeist ·

This reminds me of A Ghost Story I once read...

But I can't wait to see what happens! *kicks feet in excitement* Jason, it's good to see ya back.

#39 · 121w, 10h ago · · · Ponygeist ·

>>1387964

Should it be ponynormal activity...…:rainbowlaugh:

#40 · 121w, 10h ago · · · Ponygeist ·

Oh Lyra you silly filly  :facehoof:

#42 · 121w, 9h ago · · · Ponygeist ·

I want some more, so I'll Fav and Watch You

#43 · 121w, 9h ago · · · Ponygeist ·

>>1388237

Damnit, someone beat me to referencing it.

Mine was going to be "Is it Spooky? o.o"

#44 · 121w, 9h ago · · · Ponygeist ·

For some reason I was listening to the dead space theme while reading th:pinkiecrazy:is. Need MOAR.

#45 · 121w, 8h ago · · · Ponygeist ·

>>1388359

Nah, it feels more like the old poltergeist movie, because so far nothing overtly aggressive has happened, just mischievous.

For some reason, I get the feeling that's going to change.

#46 · 121w, 8h ago · · · Ponygeist ·

Getting a poltergeist feel just like most everyone here. All that's needed now are chairs stacked on the table and it'll be complete. Only THEN would I want to see their house implore on itself! But I'm getting ahead of myself. It's good to have you writing again Jason. Anthropology was and still is one of my favorite fics. Looking forward to what's in store for this one.

#47 · 121w, 7h ago · · · Ponygeist ·

i read this purely based on zee description. i cant say im disappointed.

#49 · 121w, 7h ago · · · Ponygeist ·

Intriguing! I like this! More...

#50 · 121w, 6h ago · · · Ponygeist ·

A perfect ghost story to get into the Halloween spirit! This is great! :pinkiehappy:

Silver out!

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