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So she is clingy, emotional, impulsive, insecure, and that is all. Am i biased or is everything that doesn't conform treated as a disease?
Have society become so insane? And why is adherence to madness the baseline for a supposed "scientific field"?
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I understand why you are frustrated with the medical industry and conformist nature of society. I don't like it anymore than you do. But science is real and psychiatry is a science and it should not be disregarded just because you dislike its findings.
And things like Borderline Personality Disorder are not personality traits. They are chemical imbalances which destroy lives and prevent people from being able to be happy. And people affected by them deserve our love and understanding. But that doesn't mean normalizing illnesses which lead to self harm.
ooh disquieting formatting
oh no that does sound accurate
nonononononononononononono indeed
oof, this level of anxiety and self-blame also showcases Twilight’s possibly diagnosable mental traits… poor Twi!
augh, this hurts the heart!
just want to give Twi a hug now
oh this is excellent Pinkie stream-of-consciousness. so easy to overdo it or underdo it but this is perfect
do love this showcase of Pinkie being able to read ponies really well sometimes (perhaps balancing out the other times when she is unusually bad at it?)
oof…
and a beautiful thought to end on
expressing two very different internal voices in a way that lets the reader pick out what the events here would look like from the outside and having those perspectives stitch together into a beautiful depiction of a relationship between two broken mares is a very impressive feat, indeed. i really felt for these two, and absolutely loved this story. thank you so much for writing!
I do love the stark contrast between the two thought processes on display. My only complaint is that Pinkie’s chapter feels more like the summary of a larger, more emotionally fulfilling story. Yes, you needed to stay in the word limit and the entire point is the whitewater stream of consciousness to contrast Twilight’s checklist of reasons why she sucks, but it still ends of feeling like Cliffs Notes.
To be clear, I do like what you did here. It just feels more like a compressed version of the full story than one that stands on its own merits. Still, thank you for the entry and congrats on the honorable mention.
Hello! I read all the stories in this contest that won recognition, so here's a review. As I said there, I can't speak from personal experience regarding Pinkie's condition. Nevertheless, the unusual POV(s) worked for me, as did the crossings-out. I do think this could have been even better without the word limit, but frighteningly fascinating all the same. Liked!