Thank Chaos for the fourth wall!
Gretings Everypony/human/whatever you are, I am Discord, Spirit of Chaos and Disharmony. Now the reason why I've reached past the endless expanse of time, space and the dimension of jelly is to share with you a few thoughts, the ramblings of a draconequs.
It's very boring being trapped in stone, and when you're as bored as I am, your mind tends to wonder and explore some very (gag me already!) sane concepts.
Just Please for the love of all that is disharmonic DO NOT TELL CELESTIA! I'll never hear the end of it if she thinks I'm starting to go sane.
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Coverart done by Call-Me-Jack on Deviantarrt
This story is in desperate need of a good cover image....
This is the philosophical viewpoint of the author Dragonfire2lm put into the POV of Discord. the world is a noisy place, if only you knew why...Set just after the events of season 2 of MLP:FiM
Ha. Reading late at night to help me fall asleep. I just tell myself its not getting me anywhere and refuse to think about it.
I say it's good.
In some points I disagree with Discord's saneness in mind, but overall it's a neat story; not too disbelievable and with a message in it.
I liked it.
:D This was a really nice story
and I think you captured Discords character very good and also...he right I HATE silence , thats why I always have music running somewhere so it never gets completely silent.
Also the fact that I never saw him as evil not even in the show, he was just different than the rest and it would fit into canon too since its never explained WHY he is so chaotic and the reason from this story is actually believable :D
I wish you luck with that assignment
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There are a few missing words, some punction errors, and like one or two run-on sentence. Readers can easily miss or forgive the simple and forgivable mistakes, but if a teacher spot them. They might deduct points. Espiecally, if its a brutal Class A (-hole) teacher That is if your being grade for this fic at all. I suggest you reread your fic and try to fix them or have an editor help you fix them. I'll would have offer to help, but I'm no editor.
Also, there are some sentence that you could have used some puncation to hypen the feel or tone of the story. A well placed period could easily make a scene more dramatic, mystrious, or darker etc. Remeber; puncation is the key to good story.
I recommand you use Google Docs. I use it when I'm writing my fic's chapters. Google Docs, spots any mistake and will highlight it so you can go back and fix it. Usaully by left clicking on the error, Google Docs, will tell you what the problem is and will give an option to fix it automaticlly.
The story was great. I enjoyed reading it. It did make me pause a couple of time and ponder about life and its meaning. The message of the story was flawless and you kept true on Discord form of being random and dark at the same times. I espiecally loved this part.
Comedy gold.
Summing it all up. Great fic well done. Just fix those errors and will be good.
Signed --- Aruzo Night
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Thank you, I wasn't sure if I captured the feel of Discord as a character when I first wrote this, so I'm glad you like it.
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Thanks for the advice, Idid try to keep it true to Discord and throw in some random comedy that still made a bit of sense.
I could've sworn I got all the typos...Eh I'll just go over it again.