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For as long as anypony can remember, the known world has been divided into three great nations, each keeping the other in check. But at the centre of them all lies the peaceful Everfree Glades, where ponies have only ever lived in harmony in spite of the larger domains that surround them. In the quiet village of Ponyville, a young mare named Twilight Sparkle dreams of a day when all peoples can be as one.
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Curious.
Whoa sunny that means like G4 and G5 coexist in the same era
It's awesome to see a setting where both the Mane Six and G5 Mane Five exist in the same timeframe.
Although, I do like to see how and why Celestia, Luna, and Cadence despised eachother so much?
Oh wow so this is like when G4 and G5 coexist with each other that's pretty cool but it looks like things have been rough lately especially with the three tribes and the other side of Equestria are having problems Twilight and Spike try to figure out what to do with this kind of situation but it looks like sunny thinks that there's always going to be another way hopefully they don't have to do this alone I wonder what they have in mind I guess we'll find out next time by the way just a little heads up you know sunny and her friends have their own hashtag name and they have the official name called the Mane five so if you want to put like Izzy zipp pipp and hitch together just call them the Main five
Yo this is a pretty interesting story having to generation exist with each other. I would like to see how this will go and yeah you can put sunny and her friends as the main five there’s a name tag of the group just to give you a little heads up so you can fit her friends in
11543525 Thanks for letting me know
Whoa. This DOES look to be an intriguing start to this AU series. A hybrid of G4 and G5 huh? The big question is what could have gotten the big three rulers so against each other. I mean, yes, in Celestia and Luna's case, it could be a case of sibling rivalry gone WAY too far, but it would have to be something REALLY severe to get the ALICORN OF LOVE hating the other two that much.
All the same, I DID appreciate the sibling banter between Twilight and Spike as well as the dialogues with Sunny, AJ and Moondancer. Especially with Sunny's references to Hitch, the Cakes and the Mayor. And now I'm really curious as to the rest of the Mane Eleven (Pinkie, Rainbow, Rarity, Fluttershy, Zipp, Pipp and Izzy) as well as the dragons besides Spike and the other species. But then, that's what the other chapters are for.
But, anyway, the exchanges, characterizations and future chapter set-up are all well done (ESPECIALLY with Twilight's welcome degree of Adaptational Nice Guy for this part of her life).
Very much looking forward to more of this.
This has some good vibes.
It would be very interesting if in the eventual confrontation/ party thing? Aftermath? Epilogue? Tone?
What-have-you? That there would be some lingering "problems" aka things dont just resolve themselves and their would be some (narrative) consquences of a thousands +++ years of distant? Like what are the cultures like? What are the alicorns like? (Because one thing that made me want to write horse words is woefully lacking differing reprentations of life (aka...long lived life...i.e if you have two or more long lived creatures? Who are there friends? Do they have differing modes of thought on life itself? Society? Can you explore some this? What are those consquences? Moon republic vs Celestia...thing? Capitalism? Socialism? Or others...(I dont have any others off the top of my head) Do they shun friendship or whatever?
Moreover, Imparting there history upon what they talk about? What they remember? Friends? You could name them? Giving a hint of something distant yet, close at hand for these creatures seemingly lost in time?)
Surely, after a thousands years apart there...group of ponies (north,west,east?) is just as influenced by their choices as they (The Alicorns) are could/should be? Anyway, I just thought it would be interesting to share some of my thoughts about this cool story!
Peace.
This is very good. I'm giving you six stars for doing a good job. ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️
i really like this premise, and the character writing is on point for this chapter!
Can't wait to read more of your chapters and remember: Believe in yourself, take on your challenges, dig deep within yourself to conquer fears. Never let anyone bring you down. You got to keep going.
curious
While I've seen cross-overs between G4 and G5 before, I don't think I've quite seen one like this. I'm keeping an eye on this one.
Oh boy Here Comes Trouble
Oh I was not expecting Zephyr Breeze to be in the Royal Guards to be honest with you I kind of saw it back in season 9 but still wow
I mean she does have a little bit of Pinkie Pie's personality
Ok wow this is pretty interesting situation so Fluttershy is helping with the animals and feeding them then pipp came along and talked with her about inviting her to the get together which Fluttershy still feels a little awkward but Blue Blood showed up and to be honest I thought he was going to give us some trouble but it turns out he's actually okay to talk with and even talking about how annoying it can be when it comes to politics he even introduced a hippogriff name silverstream to the others which she was pretty ecstatic to meet with other ponies and it looks like she will be hanging out with the two ponies for a while which neither of them don't mind it this was a pretty interesting interaction with each other I wonder what else could happen guess we'll find out next time
Wonderful work on this latest chapter. REALLY appreciate the effort that went into the exchanges, characterizations and future chapter set-up. Absolutely loved that chat between Pipp and Fluttershy as the latter was looking over the Royal Garden animals before Blueblood stepped in.
So, they have a unicorn looking into the bandits? Let's see, they said it was a "'she'", so it's not Shining Armor. We know it's not Twilight because she was front and center in the immediately previous chapter. I rather doubt it's Rarity or Izzy - both of whom would much prefer to save the rough stuff as an absolute last resort (though I will admit that it's not impossible). The three most likely suspects as far as dealing with the bandits are Sunset Shimmer, Starlight Glimmer and Tempest Shadow. Though I'll admit that I could be wrong. Also got a decent laugh out of Blueblood's commentary on Zephyr and Fluttershy's ironic reflection on that.
But, anyway, great use of Silverstream coming in that way, especially with the stuff about Celestia still maintaining some degree of semi-close contact with Novo. Definitely makes me look forward to seeing how this universe addresses the rest of the Young Six (Sandbar, Yona, Gallus, Smolder and Ocellus).
Most assuredly looking forward to more of this (especially this universe's spins on Rarity, Pinkie Pie, Rainbow Dash, Zipp, Izzy and the other major characters).
Now, the most obvious route when writing a cross over is to have each character meet their counterpart from the other generation. Which isn't a bad thing, of course, but really like how you not doing that here and instead focusing on dynamics that haven't been explored yet (i.e, Pipp and Fluttershy).
This story seems interesting, I like it quite a bit so far.
Keep up the good work! I'll be sure to keep up.
Hey Gallus and Smolder awesome to see them here
Ok wow this was a interesting turn of event here so it looks like Rainbow Dash is a sergeant and training the two Cadets smolder and Gallus which awesome to see these kids and it looks like Zipp was checking out how they doing and everything and even having conversation with each other but then Rarity showed up and told them about Senate are down and Princess Luna will take over and Rainbow Dash was pretty surprised but somehow they said that she will make a good candidate to lead boy I wonder how will this will work out guess we'll find out next time
The Lunar Republic has fallen, long live the Lunar Empire! Hail victorious Dictator!
Fascinating setting. I'm curious, if Celestia's reign is like a medieval monarchy, and Luna's is like the Ancient Roman Empire, what would Cadence's reign be like? Anarchy? Democracy? Theocracy? Personally, I would be very interested to see the Crystal Union with Comrade Cadence at the head of the government. I also like the coherence of the story, the last chapter mentioned bandits and a particular "unicorn" who deals with them.
It is also interesting whether the historically large numbers of bandits in the Lunar Republic may be the reason for the high militarization in society, which may have led to closer cooperation with more aggressive species(dragons and etc)
Also, I wonder if Luna and Celestia are sisters in this alternate universe. And do alicorns exist in this world? Amazing world-building so far)))
This is like the 3 kingdoms, isn't it?
Another well done chapter. REALLY good look at Luna's end of things. I suppose it makes sense that Pipp and Zipp would be living in separate kingdoms despite being sisters (after all, Celestia and Luna are also sisters and they live separately in this universe) Loved the dialogues Rainbow had with Gallus, Smolder and Zipp before Rarity shared the news about Luna forcibly demoting MOST of the Senators (Rarity herself being one of the few exceptions - and most likely Haven as well since she also struck me as one of the better-intentioned ones that was actually good at her job) - obviously Luna remembered enough about what happened to Julius Caesar to not want the untrustworthy Senators close enough to stab her in the back (either figuratively or literally). Appreciated it being mentioned that the ponies on Luna's end have had good ties with the Griffons and Dragons as well as Rainbow mentioning that she is going to enjoy putting those recently demoted ex-senators through especially rough training.
I'm guessing the next chapter is going to be those under Cadance's rule (which would probably be Pinkie, Izzy, Yona and Ocellus with the chapter after that checking back in on Ponyville with Hitch and Sandbar making their first full appearances in this story. Though, I'll admit that I could be wrong.
Anyway, the exchanges, characterizations and future chapter set-ups were all well done and I'm definitely looking forward to more of this.
Zipp: It's not like I've got a long lost sister.
Later
Zipp: Holy moly, I've got a long lost sister?!
But how will the Dictator maintain control without the bureaucracy?!
So I guess instead of going down her Nightmare Moon arch Luna's pulling a Julius Caesar?
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Yeah. But hopefully with better luck in spotting and steering clear of traitors.
This is a very cool choice I don't think I've read something quite like this before and I'm stoked. So my guess for the love kingdom is Fluttershy,Izzy and Ocellus still no idea if the rulers are alicorns yet but it's not a huge deal the writing is very good.
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Actually, that would be PINKIE, Izzy and Ocellus (PLUS you left out Yona) - Fluttershy was over in the SUN Kingdom.
Hey Yona and Ocellus
Wait they don't know who Luna is
The
And hey it's Pinkie Pie and Izzy Moonbow two crazy ponies lighten up the party awesome
Okay this is a pretty interesting turn of event here again so somewhere in the Crystal Empire a familiar ponies and creatures Cadence just watching her daughter flurry heart just playing then the other two Ocellus and Yona are in charge of keeping an eye on the little one until Shining Armor showed up and talk with cadence about the news about Luna taking over and apparently it worries him but Cadence wants to reassure him that things will work out but before they continue on it looks like they have two visitors and a very aesthetic ones in a very interesting to make them as sisters Pinkie Pie and Izzy Moonbow just entertaining the little ones and everything but so far this is getting another interesting I wonder who else is going to show up they are the one who's left is sandbar I wonder how's he going to fit into the story I guess we'll find out next time
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But what about sandbar
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Well, we'll probably find out next week, but I have a hunch that he's back in Ponyville and is most likely that "new deputy" for Hitch that Sunny mentioned in the first chapter.
Hey there. Wonderful job, once again, on the exchanges, characterizations and future chapter set-up. Definitely appreciated the dialogue between Shining and (Pegasus) Cadance as they were watching Flurry Heart at play concerning the change of leadership in the East as well as the strong ties with the Yaks and Changelings (good appearance by Yona and Ocellus, by the way), the mentions of Flash and Cadance's mother before Pinkie and Izzy arrived, adding even more entertainment.
As for Sandbar, well, I have a hunch that we'll be checking up on him (as well as Hitch; in both of their first full appearances in this story) when we check back in on Ponyville.
And I wonder if Twilight knows she has a brother up north who's married to the Northern High Priestess's daughter.
And I wouldn't be surprised if Grogar was setting up something in the South that would get the three nations fighting mad at each other - aided by Chrysalis, Tirek, the Storm King, Sombra, Opaline and a few others (with Misty, Bray, the Dazzlings and a few other lower ranked minions led by Cozy Glow doing the bulk of the dirty work).
Anyway, definitely looking forward to more of this.
Looks like trouble's a brewing... but at least they'll have the Bard Sisters to keep them entertained.
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Actually that is a pretty interesting idea for sandbar being with hitch as the young deputy that'd be cool idea
Hmm, so who is Cadance's mother, I wonder?
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Amore, possibly?
Spike is an excellent storyteller. Still, in this universe, it's interesting how he ended up with Twilight and her gang since she didn't hatch him as a project for Celestia's school. Will his origin story be revealed in a later chapter?
Well then very interesting for Spike to teach the class about Dragon histories and everything even though the kids were expecting excitement or something like that but it's so kind of interesting but still I think we're still we're missing one more character where Sandbar we almost saw everybody except for him I wonder if we're going to see him I guess we'll find out next time
Hey there. Thanks immensely for getting the next chapter up. Really appreciate the effort that went into the exchanges, characterizations and future chapter set-up. Certainly liked Spike trying to educate Cheerilee's class on dragons and trying to separate the facts from the stories. And, yeah, makes sense that there would be different types of dragons (earth, sky and sea) just as there are four different types of ponies (Unicorn, Pegasus, Earth Pony and Sea Pony). So, it sounds like the dragons in this universe have a bit of Adaptational Wimp since they don't have "Greed Growth" and can't breathe fire (despite the stories the ponies have heard to the contrary). Also liked the Mythology Gag with the mention of "Generation One" as well as Spike finally conceding on sharing that story concerning the first dragon and the first three sons. And experience with genres like this tell me that the similarities between the stories of Tiamat and Harmony ARE more than just coincidence and are quite likely to become significant sooner rather than later. Though I admit that I COULD be wrong on that. Of course, I'm still curious as to Hitch and Sandbar, but that's very likely going to be in a chapter coming soon.
Definitely looking forward to more of this.
I'm curious are you going to have Sunset Shimmer, Trixie Lulamoon and Starlight Glimmer show up which territory do you think each would fit best in the same I think applies to the dazzlings or the sirens oh I hope you don't plan on leaving these six great characters out.
I was wondering if Pipp and Zipp's sisterhood was going to be a factor. Seems like it is.
Well I will say this was a pretty casual conversation between Celestia and Fluttershy and even praising how she did with the guarding and the animals and thanks to pipp calming down Fluttershy she actually enjoyed herself with the queen but it looks like something is up and pipp was very worried about the situation and I wonder what could that be guess we'll find out next time
Hey there. Thanks very much for getting this next chapter up. Really loved the work going into the exchanges, characterizations and future chapter set-up. Really liked Pipp making the effort to put Fluttershy at ease when they went to meet Queen Celestia, as well as the description of Earth pony Celestia and how she also tried to put Fluttershy at ease by mentioning the critters Flutters takes such good care of. And, yes, it DOES appear that Celestia wants to talk to Pipp about - certain family issues.
Really looking forward to more of this.