After working one too many storms, Rainbow Dash comes down with the flu. Her sister, Applejack, knowing all too well that her sister will continue playing in the rain when she is sick, insists that she stay at Sweet Apple Acres until she is better. Apple Bloom wants to make her feel better so she makes her sister some vegetable soup
Short sisterly fluff that takes place before Friendship is Magic in the universe of the "Believe" series. Read "Give to Good Home" & "Sisters of Different Blood" if you want to get a better picture of how this story fits in but it is not necessary for enjoyment of story.
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I'm disliking the story at the start, AppleJack and Rainbow Dash are NOT sisters. (Unless Bic Mac and... Who ever Rainbow Dash's sister would marry, but you would have to in that in the description.) I might read later, but from here, I'm not.
Problem 1: AJ and RD aren't sisters. I don't care if it's another universe, that's just a cheating way to make more fics.
Problem 2: The fic is a bland concept where nothing happens.
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Adoptive sisters. Not blood sisters.
Anyway, I thought the story was rather sweet. A bit fast paced, but sweet nonetheless.
"DISCLAIMER: I do not own My Little Pony: Friendship is Magic (Hasbro), Rainbow Dash (Hasbro), Apple Jack (Hasbro), Apple Bloom (Hasbro), Rose (Cubette), ninty-five percent of the characters in this story (Hasbro unless otherwise stated at end of chapter) or Give To Good Home (Cubette). All I own is this story and the other things I have written."
You missed a D there. Also... the disclaimer is a bit unneeded.
Here is a hint: jump a line between paragraphs and talking. That makes it easier for the reader.
The history is sweet... but also pretty fast paced. You should slow it a bit.
Overall, I didn't see much to comment about.
Keep safe!
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>The fic is a bland concept where nothing happens.
That's Slice of Life for ya!
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I disagree. Slice of Life is a tag that people often side in to mean *everday thing*.
Slice of life is a tag meant to be used on stories that a relatable or that have life messages.
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Well, it's become my niche so too bad so sad! You won't get a refund on the time you wasted reading my pathetic excuse of a story!
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From your name, I had already assumed you were a troll trying to be like Emerald Flight.
Confirmed. Now go away.
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No, I'm not usually a troll. Just when ponies chastise me about the topics of my writing.
fuken saved :)
Heheheh.. my terrible story caused a bunch of awesome ones to be written
that... um...
nothing really happened
so i'm not going to vote up or down
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It’s set in an AU, so…
Aw, such a sweet story!