Yeah. After the chapter "Recovery Pt.2". the author has already written 4 chapters, and there is not a single comment under them, even a negative one. It's a pity, the story itself is very much nothing. And the author definitely does not write about another "36-year-old man with two children with ex-wives, two divorces, three bank loans and depression wakes up in the world of rainbow horses", but his own full-fledged universe, which I personally am still interested in watching.
11739543 NGL, i cant tell if this is a jab or a compliment but i think it leans towards being a compliment so ill say thank you! (I like to be positive)
I try to venture down a different path of creativity when it comes to writing for this story. I wanted to make sure to stay away from the norms like what you mentioned in your comment. That's why I'm using the universe from my personal book I plan to write and publish IRL as a baseline. Its also where I got the two main characters Romulus and Riley from. I will say my proudest part of it world building wise, which will show in the next chapter ;), is the magic system I made for it. Its by far my favorite system and the terminology I used for the meaning of being "Unbound" still makes me so freaking giddy you have no idea.
Love the story so far man. Got it bookmarked and everything.
But if I can lend a tip or three for whatever it's worth to ya;
The story is pretty solid. Mind the punctuation though. I did notice that there were a few comma's that needed to be placed in certain areas that weren't, and some where it didn't need to be.
Spelling needs to be watched as well. Like "there" when it's supposed to be "they're" and so on.
I wanna see this story thrive, so I don't say these things as a dig, please don't think that.
Other than that, keep it up, and I look forward to the next chapter with excited anticipation.
Punctuation and spelling is one of my focuses when writing so I do try to keep those comma and such in check as much as possible. If you saw how my writing looked 2 years ago and looked at it now. It is a DRASTIC change. I use Grammarly to auto correct for me as well, while also highlighting what I'm correcting so my brain can start recognizing where commas are need and such. Which its been working yet sometimes, at least in my eyes, Grammarly puts a comma Some where its not needed because it changes how I want the sentence to sound so I don't put it in.
Either way I thank you again for the support! I will say this, I have several arcs planned for this story and we've passed the intro arc and we're easing into the next one with these last two chapters. And lets just say... there is gonna be a lot of fire involved. (not the kind set onto buildings before you get that idea.)
Yeah. After the chapter "Recovery Pt.2". the author has already written 4 chapters, and there is not a single comment under them, even a negative one. It's a pity, the story itself is very much nothing. And the author definitely does not write about another "36-year-old man with two children with ex-wives, two divorces, three bank loans and depression wakes up in the world of rainbow horses", but his own full-fledged universe, which I personally am still interested in watching.
11739543
NGL, i cant tell if this is a jab or a compliment but i think it leans towards being a compliment so ill say thank you! (I like to be positive)
I try to venture down a different path of creativity when it comes to writing for this story. I wanted to make sure to stay away from the norms like what you mentioned in your comment. That's why I'm using the universe from my personal book I plan to write and publish IRL as a baseline. Its also where I got the two main characters Romulus and Riley from. I will say my proudest part of it world building wise, which will show in the next chapter ;), is the magic system I made for it. Its by far my favorite system and the terminology I used for the meaning of being "Unbound" still makes me so freaking giddy you have no idea.
Love the story so far man. Got it bookmarked and everything.
But if I can lend a tip or three for whatever it's worth to ya;
The story is pretty solid. Mind the punctuation though. I did notice that there were a few comma's that needed to be placed in certain areas that weren't, and some where it didn't need to be.
Spelling needs to be watched as well. Like "there" when it's supposed to be "they're" and so on.
I wanna see this story thrive, so I don't say these things as a dig, please don't think that.
Other than that, keep it up, and I look forward to the next chapter with excited anticipation.
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Thank you for this I appreciate it!
Punctuation and spelling is one of my focuses when writing so I do try to keep those comma and such in check as much as possible. If you saw how my writing looked 2 years ago and looked at it now. It is a DRASTIC change. I use Grammarly to auto correct for me as well, while also highlighting what I'm correcting so my brain can start recognizing where commas are need and such. Which its been working yet sometimes, at least in my eyes, Grammarly puts a comma Some where its not needed because it changes how I want the sentence to sound so I don't put it in.
Either way I thank you again for the support! I will say this, I have several arcs planned for this story and we've passed the intro arc and we're easing into the next one with these last two chapters. And lets just say... there is gonna be a lot of fire involved.
(not the kind set onto buildings before you get that idea.)
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Well, I'm a bit of a pyro so