Some Traditions Are Holy

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Pumpkin Cake is waiting for Pound Cake to get home on Jinglemas morning. While waiting, Pumpkin reflects on some of their past Jinglemas'.

Breezie written for Shakespearicles for Jinglemas 2022

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Shakespearicles

Shakespearicles #1 · Dec 25th, 2022 · 3 · ·

"no time! Presents time!"

There's no time like the present.

Thank you so much for this!
Merry Jinglemas!

Jhoira

Jhoira #2 · Dec 25th, 2022 · 3 · ·

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Hehe, every single thing you listed in your request. :D

TheOneAJ

TheOneAJ #3 · Jan 17th, 2023 · 2 · ·

Kikio3000

Kikio3000 #4 · Feb 3rd, 2023 · 1 · ·

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POP, noice!

Kikio3000

Kikio3000 #5 · Feb 3rd, 2023 · 1 · ·

"The barbarian preferred to let his coffee cool." LOL, for me, hot beverages need to be warm, not hot or cold.

"Pumpkin rolled her eyes good-naturedly" Aw.

"Jinglemas morning" Haha, "Jinglemas," not "Hearth's Warming" or "Christmas." This is definitely for Shakespearicles.

"The two children didn't really understand the concept of "presents" but they did understand big shiny boxes that made very fun "rrrrrrppppppppccchhhhh" sounds when they were pulled on." Hee-hee, cute troublemakers and good reason for babies to want presents. Cadance and Shining Armour have their work cut out for them with Flurry Heart.

"But they had made an agreement on when presents were to be open and they were a pair of ponies that kept their word, no matter how hard it was." They have nice resilience and this sounds canon, LOL.
"The exercise was certainly good for them, especially Mrs. Cake, who might have enjoyed her own profession a little more than was strictly healthy for her." HAHA, how to tell the truth and not offend anyone. Good way of explaining it.

"Launching himself through the air Mr. Cake made a leap that would have been the envy of a stallion ten years his junior." Impressive, sir.
"Mr. Cake had to focused on keeping his son trapped in his legs now." Funny and definitely a normal image for such a rambunctious boy.

"The battle continued for another fifteen minutes" BRUH.
"Mr. and Mrs. Cake collapsed as their two children descended on the fund paper sounds that the pretty boxes made." Fun, not "fund," and just in time! They need to change when present time it, LOL.
"Baleful eye," nice phrase. "to the corner of the room. An indignant Mrs. Cake admonishing the source of their ire." Mayve before the "an," have a comma or semi-colon?
"You could have helped, Pinkie." HAHA, she was there the whole time!
"She had to disagree with her mother, she was very glad Pinkie was filming instead of helping." Hee-hee.

"The kitchen was a flurry of activity." You almost got my hopes up since I thought of Flurry Heart, LOL.

"Mr. and Mrs. Cake, and Pumpkin and Pound all ran around as they tried to get all the holiday orders in order," sounds better.
"But ponies who had left their plans until the last minute weren't the most understanding bunch. There were disgruntled "mares" (not mare's) and stallions who just didn't seem to understand baking a cake took time, and them being in a hurry didn't change the fundamental laws of reality." AWESOME way to describe it, LOL.

"The two were excellent bakers." Good job you two!
"Though Pumpkin had the advantage over her brother in the baking, getting her recipes that tiny bit, indescribably more perfect than her brother, he got her back in the decoration department." Oooh, headcanon time! May I use this info for my fics?
"Flour fight!" Don't waste too much of the precious powder!

Pumpkin shot to her feet as the door slammed not "clammed" open.
"no time! Presents time!" OOF, no love lol. Also, capitalize the N in "no."
"Pumpkin rolled her eyes good-naturedly," again, haha.
"For a nice, hopefully calm, Jinglemas morning." What? THAT'S IT?! Aw, I wanted more info on the present opening...:'(

Great story apart from a few grammatical errors. Who made the nice cover art? It is very cute, family-oriented, and about the Cake Family. I LOVE stories about the Cake Twins and/or Flurry Heart!