Alright! Just finished reading even if I should well be asleep by now...
...and I'm kinda lost. Is the apparent lust every mare that lays eyes on Arhip simply because of Estrus, or is this guy just that fucking hot? It just seems weird that every female mentioned in this chapter has the hots for him (in varying degrees, Luna swung her flanks around for the guy about 20 minutes into meeting the guy while Twilight seems on the usual experimentation route).
I also looked over Minuettes part like 3 times before realizing she's supposed to be a nurse or some sort of medical official for the prisoner (Who was arrested on sight for being...an immigrant?)
Maybe I missed a few things since I'm tired as hell, but just curious. Other than those things the read was pretty good and funny.
The lustful, or still playful mood of these mares is quite justified, but all these details will be written in the next chapter. And besides, at the beginning of the plot it is mentioned that three months have passed, but then the main character has to tell what happened to him from the very beginning. Of course, I will not describe 90 days of his life over hundreds of chapters. I will only describe the more important points. And it is quite logical that these mares can behave in this way.
As for Minuette, she is not a medical professional. She's just temporarily working as a maid in the palace. In addition, I plan to describe the history of this mare in great detail in order to reveal this character. Anyway, what I've written about Octavia at the moment, it looks very interesting. But this chapter is not yet finished.
Security near the club called the main character "emigrant". I also intend to explain in detail why such a status was applied. But first of all, this is due to the fact that this same security officer did not know what kind of main character belongs to. But emigrants, these are all those who decided to move to Equestria to spend their working time, and then get the status of "citizen of Equestria".
I hope that the reader will still be able to understand such details. Otherwise, this chapter could have been much bigger. Approximately 30,000 words.
Yes, and thank you for taking the time to read and leave a comment.
I'm liking so far where this is going. The playfulness of all these princesses is quite refreshing. Not that it doesn't happen in other stories, but all at the same time is a rare read. Trust me I have searched! Well except Twilight which is still her bookworm self as usual and is last to get any subtle hints ... even as princess.
I have questions tho. Why does he see the only medicine for hangover to be more booze? There are far better ways to get over it. Also there were princesses when he first came. Don't they have any spell to fix someone else's hang over? The last question was never even touched in the show. But logically they should know something!?!?
Why is Minuette shy/embarrassed to see him naked? Aren't everyone around her, including herself naked too? She said half of the days she is outside the castle around others. There is no chance she hasn't seen at least one stallion outside .... with erection or not. Is it just that she has never seen it in such intimate settings?
Which brings me to the most important question. How has Arhip.not gotten erection yet ... being alone with a sentient naked mare ... in a bathroom? I know you say things will get more heated next chapter, but why is he not hard in his bathroom story? I know he is used to working with horses, but she isn't one. Just look at her!!! :P Is it his drunken state?
I underestimated how long it would take me to get through the first chapter, turns out 9k words is quite a lot, especially when using the text to speech to help keep me focused
Although I have only read the first chapter so far, this story has impressed me. I don't usually like this kind of HiE story, but the way you've written it really does intrigue me. I look forward to seeing what will become of Arhip as he gets accustomed to equestrian life. The standout scene to me was the bathroom, where the differences in culture really shine.
The fact that the bathtub was made of wood immediately stood out to me, as I could never imagine using something like that in real life, although that may just be because I default to assuming it's some old, makeshift thing. If it's in Canterlot, let alone the royal castle, it's probably very well kept. The fact that it is large enough to contain five ponies is also interesting to me, as it makes me think that ponies tend to bathe in groups, or at least, more than one at a time. Though, I suppose the exceptional size could also be justified by it being in the royal castle. One of my favorite things in a story like this is worldbuilding, and seeing how the life of ponies differs from our own. Using the bathroom scene as an example again, the machines made with the pedals, levers, and crystals all come together nicely to make a really interesting system. I hope to see more of little things like this in future chapters.
As for the characters, I'm compelled to compare them to one of my guilty pleasures, an anime called Monster Musume. On the surface, all of the princesses and Arhip seem to be driven very heavily by sexual desires, but I can absolutely feel real character in their behavior. For example, Luna and Minuette's kindness toward the human, even through his rather unpleasant introduction, show that they're selflessly caring as well. Twilight and Celestia also show a bit of this depth, as they don't seem to be quite as attracted as the others, allowing their personalities to shine through a little more with the inclusion of Twilight's note taking and Celestia going through three cups of tea as the story progresses. Once again, I do hope to see some more of this as things continue, giving the characters more time to show their personalities and a little less being horny for the protagonist.
I can't promise that my next comment will be as long as this, but I will be leaving a new one with every chapter I read!
Will this story have villain songs in it?
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No.
Alright! Just finished reading even if I should well be asleep by now...
...and I'm kinda lost. Is the apparent lust every mare that lays eyes on Arhip simply because of Estrus, or is this guy just that fucking hot? It just seems weird that every female mentioned in this chapter has the hots for him (in varying degrees, Luna swung her flanks around for the guy about 20 minutes into meeting the guy while Twilight seems on the usual experimentation route).
I also looked over Minuettes part like 3 times before realizing she's supposed to be a nurse or some sort of medical official for the prisoner (Who was arrested on sight for being...an immigrant?)
Maybe I missed a few things since I'm tired as hell, but just curious. Other than those things the read was pretty good and funny.
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The lustful, or still playful mood of these mares is quite justified, but all these details will be written in the next chapter. And besides, at the beginning of the plot it is mentioned that three months have passed, but then the main character has to tell what happened to him from the very beginning. Of course, I will not describe 90 days of his life over hundreds of chapters. I will only describe the more important points. And it is quite logical that these mares can behave in this way.
As for Minuette, she is not a medical professional. She's just temporarily working as a maid in the palace. In addition, I plan to describe the history of this mare in great detail in order to reveal this character. Anyway, what I've written about Octavia at the moment, it looks very interesting. But this chapter is not yet finished.
Security near the club called the main character "emigrant". I also intend to explain in detail why such a status was applied. But first of all, this is due to the fact that this same security officer did not know what kind of main character belongs to. But emigrants, these are all those who decided to move to Equestria to spend their working time, and then get the status of "citizen of Equestria".
I hope that the reader will still be able to understand such details. Otherwise, this chapter could have been much bigger. Approximately 30,000 words.
Yes, and thank you for taking the time to read and leave a comment.
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ahhhh. OK! See now it makes more sense. (Also, I'm more awake now too as well)
I'm liking so far where this is going. The playfulness of all these princesses is quite refreshing. Not that it doesn't happen in other stories, but all at the same time is a rare read. Trust me I have searched! Well except Twilight which is still her bookworm self as usual and is last to get any subtle hints ... even as princess.
I have questions tho. Why does he see the only medicine for hangover to be more booze? There are far better ways to get over it. Also there were princesses when he first came. Don't they have any spell to fix someone else's hang over? The last question was never even touched in the show. But logically they should know something!?!?
Why is Minuette shy/embarrassed to see him naked? Aren't everyone around her, including herself naked too? She said half of the days she is outside the castle around others. There is no chance she hasn't seen at least one stallion outside .... with erection or not. Is it just that she has never seen it in such intimate settings?
Which brings me to the most important question. How has Arhip.not gotten erection yet ... being alone with a sentient naked mare ... in a bathroom? I know you say things will get more heated next chapter, but why is he not hard in his bathroom story? I know he is used to working with horses, but she isn't one. Just look at her!!! :P Is it his drunken state?
Кейденс - Не забудь рассказать нам о своем первом опыте с кобылкой.
Архип - Я вырос на лошадиной ферме...
С козырей зашел, ничего не скажешь
Кстати, поздравлю с попаданием в избранное!
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Да! В этом и есть прикол, про имя перса, и то где он вырос, и потом где оказался.
Но, я не долго пробыл в "Горячке". Меня уже скинули.
I underestimated how long it would take me to get through the first chapter, turns out 9k words is quite a lot, especially when using the text to speech to help keep me focused
Although I have only read the first chapter so far, this story has impressed me. I don't usually like this kind of HiE story, but the way you've written it really does intrigue me. I look forward to seeing what will become of Arhip as he gets accustomed to equestrian life. The standout scene to me was the bathroom, where the differences in culture really shine.
The fact that the bathtub was made of wood immediately stood out to me, as I could never imagine using something like that in real life, although that may just be because I default to assuming it's some old, makeshift thing. If it's in Canterlot, let alone the royal castle, it's probably very well kept. The fact that it is large enough to contain five ponies is also interesting to me, as it makes me think that ponies tend to bathe in groups, or at least, more than one at a time. Though, I suppose the exceptional size could also be justified by it being in the royal castle. One of my favorite things in a story like this is worldbuilding, and seeing how the life of ponies differs from our own. Using the bathroom scene as an example again, the machines made with the pedals, levers, and crystals all come together nicely to make a really interesting system. I hope to see more of little things like this in future chapters.
As for the characters, I'm compelled to compare them to one of my guilty pleasures, an anime called Monster Musume. On the surface, all of the princesses and Arhip seem to be driven very heavily by sexual desires, but I can absolutely feel real character in their behavior. For example, Luna and Minuette's kindness toward the human, even through his rather unpleasant introduction, show that they're selflessly caring as well. Twilight and Celestia also show a bit of this depth, as they don't seem to be quite as attracted as the others, allowing their personalities to shine through a little more with the inclusion of Twilight's note taking and Celestia going through three cups of tea as the story progresses. Once again, I do hope to see some more of this as things continue, giving the characters more time to show their personalities and a little less being horny for the protagonist.
I can't promise that my next comment will be as long as this, but I will be leaving a new one with every chapter I read!
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