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Oh Rarity. How melancholy your life has become.
Please don't make this a sad fic Gardez. This is one of the only fics where I can actually feel sorrow for Rarity!
I feel silly for yelling at Rarity for clopping to Rainbow Dash.
Oh boy, here we go.
Damn! This is good stuff
And just like magic after reading the 2nd chapter and saying man i wish the 3rd one was out. There it was xD
good chapter man
Oh ho Rarity, perhaps your mind is trying to tell you something hmm?
Nicely done. The flow of this story is very good.
As I never read this from Gardez's other account, WHO THE BUCK DIED?! If it was Scootaloo I'm going to murder someone.
(If that was revealed in the first chapter I never noticed it. I know Granny Smith died, but she doesn't seem that important)
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Probably Soarin
1305309 I don't think so. Soarin was still mentioned in the blogpost with Gardez's little sneak-peek at the story, which I can only assume is later. Also, I don't think Rainbow would dream of clopping with him if he's dead. The emotional trauma would probably screw with her head and that would have to be put in the story, not just finding out "I just clopped in Granny Smiths bed"
Oh god, I hope it isn't who died! (And if it was, then that icon is strangely appropriate. )
Also, congrats on being one of that rare group of writers on FIMFiction who can write a story that has both sex AND substance!
Hmm well I am in a bit of a hurry so here's the Hat, (The Witches Hat) It goes in a line at first but then goes up for a few moments, when Rarity agreed to let RD to stay at her boutique the line began to rise but then fell as soon as she just left but as soon as...well you know what Rarity was doing it raised to it's climax of the story soon to ever fall in it's falling action~ Well author nicely done, please next time make the chapter a bit shorter next time. Well I must be off, I'm currently in a hurry. Ciao~
Little nitpick. Rarity and Twilight met for the first time in Ponyville Town Hall, not Rarity's boutique.
Considering that this was the first time I was broken out of the story, I am beyond impressed. Stories about people, indeed.
I'm a little confused. Twi says "it's been six months" (since the funeral, I assume). Elsewhere in this chapter and others, it's stated as a year ago. Did I miss something?
I'm hoping we'll get to learn who Sweetie Belle's been dating in this longer version of the story. I'd put equal money on Scootaloo or Spike, with a side bet on Snails just because.
WHO DIED!!!!!
"with a heavy repeating base that was perfect for grinding and bouncing alongside one's partner"
did you mean bass?
You're missing a quote mark at the end of this sentence.
This is an odd use of "elision." I'm not sure it's wrong, per se, but it's certainly not something I've encountered before, and it does make me uncertain whether it was what you meant to say. I could go either way.
That's not what I see going on here. More importantly, that's not what you see going on here. You took aim at a mountaintop, and whether or not you thought at the time you could make it, at this point you're just trying to convince yourself you're still in the air so you don't have to address how you can't even identify where you fell.
I assume you meant "urban"? Though I suppose if you did mean it (however that works), you'll probably be lifting your tail for it in no time (however that works).
Oh, wait, no, Ponyville is presumably still majority earth ponies, which of course is far more important than any charms it may have. So I expect you shan't be bedding a town (however that works) this week.
If you're involuntarily trying to picture my last comment, I'd just like to say: "You're welcome."
Silly Rarity. She's not you; she won't be joining you in the engulfing swamp you have created out of high ambitions and low self-esteem.
Snails. It's always Snails. Except when it isn't, but my gut says Snails.
That's the issue, isn't it? That last word? Well, not all of it, looking from the top (though possibly almost all if looking from the other side), but certainly an issue. You left all your friends in Ponyville, and all you've got in Fillydelphia is assistants, social contacts, and lovers, is that not so? Nopony to trust or confide in. Nopony to lean on. No shortage of companionship, and yet none at all.
Fillydelphia has been far crueler to you than you will allow yourself to admit.
So it was him. And so again, I ask: what happened, Dashie?
Sweetie literally just saw past your mask. To so brazenly act like she is still a filly and you are still her indestructible sister might come off as a bit condescending.
I thought iridium was rarer . . . not counting the elements that simply don't occur in nature, of course.
Wikipedia says you're wrong, and I similarly failed to meet the claim of superlativity I was careful not to make. Astatine is the element you're looking for.
Still, I think you beat me. Especially if by "world" you mean "universe", not "planet" (which obviously I didn't because everybody knows that iridium is much more common in asteroids than on Earth). Ponyfeathers.
Bon-Bon? I'm shocked! What would Lyra think?
Oh, wait, you didn't know she's--um, nothing. I have nothing of interest to say about your ex. Certainly she's not still stalking you, and certainly I'm not afraid of how she'd react if I gave her away. That would be ridiculous.
I feel the need to point out that "rude" does not mean "wrong." Not that the voices in your head speak only the truth, but you'd do well to pay attention for when they make a good point. It's not that rare.
May I just remind you that there are certain social protocols regarding things like couches and staying in somepony else's home (for it is no longer yours)? Protocols such as "it is uncouth to masturbate on somepony else's couch"? Are you familiar with that one?
There are things the voices have said that I do not want to agree with. Things where I disagree with the very principle underlying the assertion. Things I consider myself above saying to or about anypony. And yet, sometimes you seem determined to change my mind.
Fucking Rarity. I wouldn't normally indulge in such uncreative profanity, but it's just the only thing to say. Because, fucking Rarity, man. I don't know how long I can put up with her.
I swear I remember you saying you don't hate Rarity, but for somebody who doesn't hate Rarity you sure portray her unflatteringly at times.
Is every chapter of Salvation going to end with a sex scene?
1353486 The funeral was six months ago. The last time Dash was in Ponyville was a year ago. The funeral was not in Ponyville.
i am finding myself drawn back to this fic which is rare fore one with as short of an attention span. well done, a mustache for your troubles
One of the more interesting character dissections I've seen of Rarity. I'm liking this.
I smell Raridash. And I love it.
I can't help but feel this whole 'should have come back ages ago' gamut is getting repetitive... I do hope you drive home a good point, else they're making the story unnecessarily dry. Only time (and the next few chapters) can tell.
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Needs end " marks.
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I'm stopping here for now. I'll catch up more chapters later on.
"That should be Rainbow Dash shook her head, finally looking away from the lantern."
If I'm not mistaken.
Never, ever change, Twilight.
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That is correct, thank you for the catch.
Hope you enjoy the rest of the story as well!
I have never read clop before, and I still kind of don't like the clop in this. I'm really uncomfortably erect right now.
That Twilight Sparkle is just perfect, though!
I don't mean to be that guy but... does every chap have to end with sex? It's kind of tasteless.
I see you've updated this fic to match current canon. Good stuff so far.
I didn't realize I was reading a Skirts story.
I'm not sure I've ever laughed that hard at a fanfic before. I don't typically find outrageously nerdy Twilight funny, but this took it to just the right level. The idea that drunk Twilight does illegal yet completely nerdy things is just hilarious to me.
This story really is on a whole another level beyond most so far.
Btw, I find the concept of touching noses being a fashionable greeting both adorable and hilarious.