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Shoeblock

Joined September 2012
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Stories (2)

  • Mi Amore
    My wedding. My marriage. My love. It was all a lie. I can't hide my true feelings any longer.

    3,435 words · 2,589 views · 94 likes · 13 dislikes
  • Aquaphobia
    One's fears can cause them to do irrational things. Things they never would have done before.
    3,386 words · 597 views · 25 likes · 8 dislikes

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They all say that love conquers all. I've seen it for myself. And for the longest time, it was my rock; my foundation. Love was the cadence that filled my life with music. But what do you do when love becomes nothing more than empty lies and shadows? What do you do when the things you thought you could trust fade? What do you do when everything falls apart?

First Published
17th Sep 2012
Last Modified
17th Sep 2012

Comments ( 33 )

#1 · 82w, 2d ago · · ·

Holy crap, what a twist! Are you going to continue this?

#2 · 82w, 2d ago · · ·

I kinda saw this coming, and yet I kinda didn't.

#3 · 82w, 2d ago · · ·

The "Months before the wedding" he was under her spells (or whatever) influence and he knows it, so the real question is for me if the spell she had on him was ever broken. :facehoof:

#4 · 82w, 2d ago · · ·

Was not expecting that ending. :pinkiegasp:

Bravo to you, good writer! :moustache:

#5 · 82w, 1d ago · · ·

>>1290430

It's up to you to interpret and find an answer.:rainbowkiss:

#6 · 82w, 1d ago · · ·

>>1291256

*shrugs* Ill believe my theory since i i'm not sure he would so easily just give all up to serve someone he knows wants to harm every single being he cares about (besides her, if he really loves her) so its either give all you care about up for love (literally not just abandoning them but hurting them heh)

or protect the ones you love from the one you love... :rainbowhuh: :facehoof:

:rainbowlaugh:

And this would have been the first Shining Armor x Celestia fic i bet you,

It's so obvious (her hoof picked captain of the guard after all  :trollestia:) i wonder why nobody did one yet unlike SA x Chrysalis

#7 · 81w, 4d ago · · ·

Well, this was... interesting. Like >>1290388 mentioned, I almost expected this to be Shining Armor and Princess Celestia, given the writing of it and the tags, but was blown away, you bad author!

Well, it was interesting take on their marriage after the wedding fiasco, and while I am a big Shining Armor/Cadence (I think the show's naming is weird) fan; I do support pairings that ship other ponies, even if they should be kept off-limits if already with somepony based after canon facts. By the end, kinda made me tear up, even though didn't find it sad or what have you, maybe cause I originally read it while tired; first story in a long time to do so, either way. :twilightsheepish:

Meh, anyway. Not much else think I can say, other than one glaring error: near the end, spelled changeling "channeling".

“Very well then,” she said seriously, “a new heir to the channeling throne must be conceived.”
I would be interested to see some sort of follow-up with like, how Twilight would handle the news if and after she found out, but it's probably not necessary. :twilightsheepish: Good job for your first story! I'll watch to see if you come out with any more of interest!

#8 · 81w, 4d ago · · ·

>>1313691

All this talk about Shining Armor and Celestia has given me a decent one-shot idea to write about, so you can look forward to that after I find some free time to write.

Good catch on the ending, however it's going to be tweaked a bit so that it won't be so direct (as commented from EQD).  The end result will be a lot more ambiguous.  A follow-up does sound like a real good idea, but the story is all about you building your own interpretations and thinking about what will happen now.

Thanks for dropping me the comment.  I really appreciate it. :twilightsmile:

#9 · 81w, 4d ago · · ·

>>1315874

:pinkiegasp: Oh, awesome! Well, definitely will look forward to that, even if might feature more Cadence heart-breaking, I imagine. :raritydespair:

Ah, I see. Well, if that's what you wish, though not sure how can do that short of just cutting out the ending, probably. But not asking you to spill the beans, I shall try to remember to check back, if won't bump this up when you upload updated version.

And hey, no problem! I enjoyed this one and even if Armor/Cadence fan as I said, I've gotten into giving any sort of shipping a fair chance, if sounds interesting or may work for me, even if not a picky fan of when ponies are paired together.

Though I do have my own preferences as far as certain ponies paired together, at least with Mane 6. :pinkiesmile:

PS: Also edited my original reply, meant to say I originally read this night it came out while tired, NOT while writing. :twilightblush: Didn't review right away, cause had something been trying to sort out and take care of on computer, and only recently got sort of resolved.

#10 · 78w, 1d ago · · ·

Hm. An interesting choice for one-shots, and well crafted to boot. I had to check it out after E's recommendation, you see. The only qualm I have is the use of the Chrysalis tag, but it's not something I have my whole heart behind. It's a tossup on whether you think the twist would feel genuine or not based on what you lead up to it with. I personally think it'd be better without it, so that we're led to believe it's Celestia that SA is pining after—and indeed, as he was running through the forest, I still thought he was in that state of mind and only running from her wrath—but it's just a suggestion.

#11 · 78w, 8h ago · · ·

Perhaps, the Tragedy tag would be appropriate?

#12 · 78w, 6h ago · · ·

You know, I don't like this story yet I also like it. So I guess that would mean i'm neutral. :twilightoops:

Anyway, onward with my opinion. Don't get me wrong, this story is quite well written, I was curious at first at where it was going (SA & Celestia). Though... that's when the ending turned it off for me.

I seriously can't see Shining Armor give up everything he had (Cadance, Royal Guard, possibly Twilight) just to be with Chrysalis. I mean its interesting, but since this is a one shot it ends on a bitter note. It also sounds more so Tragedy then Sad, but that's just me.

Anyway, its not a bad story, don't get me wrong. I just didn't like the way it ended since there's going to be no resolution. You've earned a watch, but sadly neither a thumbs up or down, I hope you can understand. :twilightblush:

Keep up the good work though!

#13 · 78w, 1h ago · · ·

this is very well written. its reasonable and backed by well thought out phrasing and over all just talented writing. 9/10.

#14 · 77w, 6d ago · · ·

Alot better than my Shining Armor and Cadence break up stories. Thought I wondered if anyone else would write something like this. I try to like SA and Cadence but the problem is that they come off so dull from the episode is that some people want to fill in the gaps  with their own fanon.

But something left me thinking as it was mentioned before. I thought he was wanting Celestia but something just flipped to Chrysalis. Almost like that part between him going to her office and him running left us wondering. That maybe that Celestia did not take the news that well and ordered the guards to go after him as he ran which is where we are lead up to the running through the forest part. I  mean... I'd pissed too if my niece's husband didn't exactly love her and made me spend alot of money on a wedding that looked like it wasn't going to last because of this..

Good story, definitely will fav it.

#15 · 77w, 6d ago · · ·

Wow. Here and for a brief moment in time I was expecting him to proclaim his undying love of Celestia. Now that would have been awkward.

>>1456406

Looks we had the same notion, which I mentioned above. I have to wonder whether he ran away under compulsion, or just to avoid the inevitable conversation after Celestia's lower jaw probably did a rapid descent to the floor, or at least the surface of her desk. She probably did/would send the guards after him, but I suspect more because of concern for his well-being than to punish him somehow. Kind of feel bad for Shining Armor, I wouldn't be surprised if he really was a little irritated with Cadence's perfect self and not being able to at least have a argument. I'd say the things keeping them together might have been a little thin. Then again, maybe Chrysalis has been messing with him subtly the whole time...

#16 · 77w, 6d ago · · ·

Oh, wow. This could could serve as a wonderful first chapter of a much longer story, but it works well as a one-shot as well. I really enjoyed this, though my response is not so much "sadness" as "fascination". There is the perfect amount of untold story here, allowing the mind to come up with explanations and interpretations. I love it.

Solid writing; no problems that I could see.

#17 · 77w, 6d ago · · ·

>>1291366

Actually, 'Adventures of a Teenaged Foalsitter' has ChrysalisxShining Armor, but that fanfic will rape your soul.:coolphoto:

#18 · 77w, 6d ago · · ·

>>1457254 As state in the story Shin considers Cadence too perfect and sure having a wife with no flaws seems great at first but it gets boring. Plus since she's an alicorn, probably means she's going to outlive him anyway so what's the fun, romance and beauty of growing old yourself but yet your spouse doesn't? Will they still find you attractive in the future? Still love you?

But back to the story. Celestia, yes might be surprised, more mad than surprised but still your niece's husband comes up to you and tells you he loves you instead of her. What is going to go through your head? Well, at first I can't see anyone taking this as a compliment nor anything good. Literally you took advantage of a niece of the most powerful pony in all of Equestria, well seems like it so far and yet you expect everything to go all sunshine and rainbows after that bombshell?

#19 · 77w, 6d ago · · ·

Anyway, this needs more story! :trixieshiftleft:

#20 · 77w, 6d ago · · ·

>>1460933

In a story a lot can be told and a lot doesn't have to be told.  The beauty of the one-shot is that I can leave as much as I want to the reader which allows them to fill in the holes themselves.  I really enjoy seeing all of your interpretations though.  I'm glad you liked it. :pinkiehappy:

#21 · 77w, 6d ago · · ·

>>1459911

I mean why nobody did a Shining armor x Celestia, compared to a million Shining x Chyrsalis fics.

And yeah i know that one, stopped reading around chapter 3 or so, to dark for my poor soul to handle. :rainbowlaugh:

#22 · 77w, 5d ago · · ·

Took the idea right out of my head!

I jest, but this intriguing pairing concept was actually in my head for quite some time now, though in different capacities. I thought I was the only one!

This was a good story, though. I was only a bit confused because I though his focus was on Celestia the whole time. Otherwise, it was quite interesting.

I may write something with a roughly similar concept someday, but with a few intriguing twists to it for sure. That's if I ever get around to writing, period.

#23 · 77w, 5d ago · · ·

Words cannot describe how much I love this! This is SOOOOOOO amazing! Please make more!

:rainbowkiss:

I am now absolutely hooked. You got to make more!!

:ajsmug:

#24 · 77w, 4d ago · · ·

>>1459917  Yes, having a loving, perfect wife or husband does get boring... if you never actually loved her to begin with.  That is a sign of lust or mere physical attraction, not love.  it is a sign the mate only sees he or she has gained a prize, not someone to cherish.

I have seen love.  I have seen a pair who loved for 60 years without fail.  

I cannot see any way Shining would be 'in love' with Chrysalis, who had no love for him and merely used him as a tool and food source for her attempt at conquest, other than her spell on his mind grew like a tumor until it seized control of him.  It seems more like a case of magically-induced Stockholm Syndrome.

Tsk, the Princesses should have ordered a complete telepathic examination to search for any traces of residual changeling magic in his mind.  That's standard protocol for victims of magical mind control!  

Errr.. or it would be... if it were real!  Which it's not!  Real magic.. how silly!  *nervous laugh*  :twilightblush:

#25 · 77w, 4d ago · · ·

The problem for me is that I can't find it in me to care about a rendition of Shining Armour that frames him in a way that I find completely unrealistic. I have absolutely no way to view the plot as anything other than contrived to serve an oversimplified purpose. The other issue for me is that the story feels like it is structured around a 'twist', yet doesn't do much to lure the reader into one train of thought to give that twist any power. Getting to the end and simply waiting to see who it was held no emotional investment for me whatsoever.

Technically competent, but it's a thumbs down from me.

-Scott

#26 · 77w, 4d ago · · ·

Aww poor Cadance :fluttercry: a very well written short, well done! I hope that the next time I read a fic with Cadance in it, there is some serious happiness in there!

#27 · 77w, 1d ago · · ·

Oh, I can see so many ways to spin off and continue this, and anyone who gets my authors mind whirling deserves a thumbs up.

Well done.

#28 · 77w, 14h ago · · ·

Wow, this was an absolute blast to read! There was so much drama and emotion. Who would've thought to twist the cannon wedding scenario like this. It's so interesting...

More interesting though is the fact that, unlike Aquaphobia, there weren't really an bad instances of SDT. You had plenty of show, where necessary, but you paced things beautifully by being brief for the most part. In other words you used 'Tell' in the best ways possible, splashing it at the right places and showing just enough. I'm going to refer to this when someone argues SDT like it's Show NEVER Tell.

It was odd that this story had such a good balance in comparison, but the words "One Week Deadline" come to mind. With enough time, you really show your skill. :twilightsmile:

#29 · 77w, 9h ago · · ·

>>1494147

Omg, reading this made my day. I'm so glad you enjoyed it as much as you did. :pinkiehappy:

#30 · 74w, 6d ago · · ·

are you going to continue this?:rainbowkiss:

#31 · 65w, 2d ago · · ·

*Cue soap opera music*

#32 · 54w, 2d ago · · ·

>>1315874i like your avatar:pinkiehappy:

#33 · 54w, 2d ago · · ·

And I liked how this story turned out:scootangel:

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