When She Sees Me

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Trixie The Great And Powerful is now Trixie The Great And Apologetic. She's been away from Ponyville for a whole year, and she's had time to ruminate on her past actions. With Starlight Glimmer's help, she's making apologies for all of the unkind things she said, including an offhoofed comment to Maud Pie in the wake of her breakup. To apologize, she gives her tickets to her next magic show. But when the magic show is preceded by a psychic musician who lays all of Maud's innermost thoughts bare, especially her innermost thoughts about a certain apologetic magician, what will Maud do?

This is a songfic, a classic throwback to a genre that fell out of favor, with the song heavily tied into the narrative. Words have been changed to fit the setting, and set the scene for a lovely MauXie romance! SFW Maud Pie Trixie shipping, written for the StarTrixMaud shipping contest!

Contest: https://www.fimfiction.net/blog/957718/startrixmaud-shipping-contest-24-july-31-august-2021

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I Stick With Real Things · 16th Sep 2021 · 2,096 words
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I'm Simply Being Cautious · 16th Sep 2021 · 1,500 words
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Starlight Nova

Starlight Nova #1 · Sep 17th, 2021 · · · I'm Simply Being Cautious ·

But when the magic show is preceded by a psychic musician who lays all of Maud's innermost thoughts bare,

I'm a little surprised she isn't in the cover art...

Apple Bottoms

Apple Bottoms #2 · Sep 17th, 2021 · · · I'm Simply Being Cautious ·

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Well, she's an original character! I would have had to commission something. But maybe she's hiding behind that tree with Pinkie!

Bicyclette

Bicyclette #3 · Oct 8th, 2021 · · · I Stick With Real Things ·

"Listen, Trixie - Trixie’s been on the road for awhile, but Trix - I’ve been trying to, uh, do better. By - other ponies.” “Okay.” Maud replied, as flat as ever.

great exchange

“It looks like - I don’t know if you recall this, but last year, in the spring, when you and Mudbriar broke up, I … well, I said something to the effect of ‘I’m glad he’s gone,’ which-” “‘That guy was a total stick in the mud, if you don’t mind Trixie saying so.’”

just a great way to weave this in, so very Trixie

“‘You don’t need a dud like him dragging you down; Trixie won’t pretend you aren’t a bit of a stick in the mud yourself, but compared to that loser, you’re a pageant pony. Mudbriar isn’t worthy to decorate the bottom of your hoof, because he is a turd on the road of life, and turds like him need to get squished flat. He is pedantic, annoying, condescending, obnoxious, unlikeable, and smells funny to boot, and Trixie would tell him that to his face if he stood here today.’” Maud finished the quote, then blinked at Trixie, slowly, before she spoke again. “Something like that, I think.”

i must admit i feel as if you are targeting me specifically with some of your entries. i will have to consciously contain my preferential bias in favor of this story now

“Hello, good shopkeep! I am here to buy your finest lenti- oh no. Trixie remembers you.” Behind her, Maud could hear Trixie starting up the routine all over again. “I haven’t been in Ponyville for almost a year now, so I don’t know if you recall our last meeting…”

and the perfect way to end this scene! fantastic!

“This is a song I hear wandering around the crowd’s thoughts! Surely, someone can tell me what song this is?”

cold reading, but with songs? interesting idea!

So, I'm just fine, inside my rock-shaped mind

i have to say, that is pretty Maud-specific for a Bridleway musical number!

Bicyclette

Bicyclette #4 · Oct 8th, 2021 · · · I'm Simply Being Cautious ·

Emotions were like that, for Maud; disruptive, upsetting, confusing, an annoyance that offered no benefit to her life and only confusion. No benefit at all! Not even Mudbriar. In the end, he had only made things worse, made her all the more certain that she didn’t want to muddle with anything to do with emotions.

oof! poor Maud

“Maud’s talking rock.”

fun oblique reference to Boulder!

ButI knew, when you changed ‘shell shaped’ to ‘rock shaped.’

ah, so that's what was going on!

“But it’s lonely. Trixie - I’ve been figuring that out, in the last year. While I - worked on things. Trixie things.”

great pronoun faltering, as well as the ambiguity of "Trixie things".

“You confused me, that day. Pinkie said it was rude, but it made me feel … warm. Like you were on my side. Your expression was - wrong.”

“The way you looked at me was not rude, or annoyed. It made me feel … seen. Good. I don’t know what it made me feel, but I felt something.”

i love this

Trixie’s ears were flat, and she couldn’t meet Maud’s gaze. “Trixie is a coward.” Trixie admitted, softly.

oof, really feel this, very Trixie

“I like daisy sandwiches.”

aww, me too! love it when they appear in a fic

Maud thought that the smile that Trixie offered her in reply was more dazzling than any rock she had ever seen.

and that tells us just how dazzling that smile must have been

just love the interplay between Maud and Trixie's respective personality issues. you really nail the two characters and why they connect and why they almost did not. wonderful MauXie. in one sense this is a very classic type of F/F shipfic: cracking open the inconvenient canon M/F ship and having the moment of vulnerability and connection between the two characters occur during the shower of emotional shrapnel that is the breakup. and i love it because i am absolutely a basic bitch about this. all of this is great and i am very happy it was written.

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