This story is a sequel to My Little Pony Friendship is Magic What If?: Volume 12
Just in time for the debut of Gen 5, it's another look at Gen 4 and material that has yet to be touched! It's yet again time for that series which dares to ask and seeks to answer that fateful question "What if that episode had been written differently?"
Twelve episodes are being rewritten this time, at least one each from all nine seasons. This includes a bonus chapter, a replacement chapter and an expansion of one episode into two episodes. But which ones will be included? You'll have to read to find out.
The exact same disclaimer from all volumes prior applies, the episodes rewritten are based on my personal opinion so please respect it. Don't get offended if an episode you liked is on the list here, or an episode you didn't like isn't on this list. I'll gladly respect your opinions if you respect mine.
Of course it goes without saying by now but I obviously mean no disrespect of any sort to Hasbro, the DHX writing and editing staff, or anyone who likes the episodes that appear here. The intent of this fic, like all of its predecessors, is for entertainment purposes only.
As there are so many volumes of material, linking to each one would take forever. Simply go to my homepage and select the first volume to go from there. Or comb through the also liked and similar pages, and look for previous volumes to see if an episode has already been covered in an earlier installment.
Have you ever doing a what if of Equestria Girls?
10989211 Not yet.
Would you like to?
10989219 Maybe someday but not right now.
Thanks very much for the work that went into this chapter/episode. The exchange, characterizations, action and future chapter set-up are all well done in all the right places. Also appreciated the points you made in the author's notes. Fluttershy's awareness being explained by flashback is appreciated as well as actually providing an in-universe reason for Twilight and her friends handling it instead of the guards. In addition, Twilight's note about how Celestia and her own mother handled most of Spike's raising was another plus. Also really liked Rainbow being less hostile toward Fluttershy here (as per the later episodes) and Fluttershy explaining things to that dragon concerning the friends who were trying to be nice before.
On to the next chapter/episode.
Again, very good job on the exchanges, characterizations, action and general wrap-up in this chapter/episode. And, again, the points you made in the author's notes were great. Definitely appreciated how much more sense this made as a Whole Episode Flashback (with Spike admitting he got the parts he wasn't there to see off other sources). And, yeah, Spike admitting he wasn't thinking straight (but still trying to "play it cool") was another good detail.
On to the next chapter.
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Fair enough.
Not much I can say other than, once again, very good job on the exchanges, characterizations and general wrap-up in all the right places. And, as you pointed out in the author's notes, it DOES make more sense to make this a Scootaloo focused episode.
VERY much looking forward to the future re-writes in this Volume (as well as probably the next Volume, which will almost certainly be the last one for the main series).
Have you considered doing the Friendship Is Forever clip shows for a what if?
10989573 No, and I probably never will. Those clip shows were a disgrace to FiM's legacy.
Excellent work on this latest chapter/episode. Greatly appreciate the work that went into the exchanges, characterizations and future chapter set-up. Certainly liked the increased detail to the changes to Twilight's friends as well as including elements of the fourth season opener.
I'll definitely be looking forward to more of this.
Again, you did a wonderful job on the exchanges, characterizations, action and general wrap-up in this chapter/episode. Once more, really liked the increased detail of Twilight getting her friends back to normal as well as Celestia helping out not only by trying to keep the Everfree under control, but also giving Twilight the inspiration to fix the problem. Also liked the pre-coronation details (particularly the talk with Spike) as well as Rainbow's point out that Twilight is going to need to learn to fly at the end.
Most certainly going to look forward to more of this.
All I can say is very good job on the exchanges, characterizations and general wrap-up in this chapter/episode. Again, the points you made in the author's notes are quite valid. And, yeah, that snotty cab customer is lucky Twilight DIDN'T just decide to use her magic to put him in his place (she would have definitely been powerful enough to do that, but that wouldn't exactly be taking the moral high ground [plus, even future rulers aren't above the law]). But, I digress. Glad to see Spike get treated a bit better here as well as Suri getting a bit more karma from Coco ratting her out with evidence.
Very definitely looking forward to the rest of the episodes in this Volume as well as the next volume.
Hey there again. All I can say is, once again, really good job on the exchanges, characterizations and general chapter/episode wrap-up in all the right places. And, again, excellent points in the author's notes. Yeah, you did a really good job using this to start to address Discord's issues (and a great point in doing so at that) as well as the reason for using Mrs. Cake instead of Maud.
Really looking forward to the remaining five chapters/episodes in this volume as well as Volume Fourteen next year.
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You're story appeared up in Dragon Sitter Luna. Which chapter made it possible?
10996375 This chapter here.
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Thanks very much.
Hey there. Thanks immensely for getting this chapter up. Certainly well worth the effort. Excellent work on the exchanges, characterizations and future chapter/episode set-up in all the right places. And, again, really good points in the author's notes. Indeed, I DO like the extra detail that went into explaining Starlight's change of heart AND the reasons for Flurry to be born an alicorn. And, yeah, I could see the stuff about the Crystal Heart happening before Twilight and her friends even got there.
Whatever you come up with to replace the main stuff in the fourth season opener (as the Everfree gone out of control was already part of the Season 3 finale here), you could start out the fourth season opener (assuming you include that in the next volume or the volume after that) with a reference to "At least this time, the adventure is in our own universe." and direct nods to not just Equestria Girls but also the "Reflections" arc of the IDW Comics (both of which set after Twilight ascended, but before the fourth season opener).
Anyway, in to the next chapter.
Again, you did a very good job on the chapter/episode. Appreciate the work that went into the action, exchanges, characterizations and general wrap-up as well as future chapter/episode set-up. And, again, the points made in the author's notes are quite well taken. Really appreciated you adding more weight to both Starlight AND Sunburst's confessions as well as the reasoning for Flurry Heart's name and the greater detail in the more important stuff.
Anyway, very certainly looking forward to the final three chapters/episodes in this volume as well as the future Volumes.
A possible bit of dialogue for the "Growing Up is Hard To Do" rewrite (which is going to be the last rewrite for this Volume [this is assuming the rewrite is going to go how I think it will]):
Twilight: You all right, Spike?
Spike: Yeah, Twilight. Just working out and practicing my fighting. I mean, we've definitely got a pretty big battle coming up who knows when.
Twilight: Are you talking about Chrysalis, Sombra and the Storm King? Yeah, I admit I was surprised when I saw the three of them working together to steal a potentially quite dangerous book.
Spike: Plus whoever busted Chrysalis out of Tartarus and resurrected Sombra and the Storm King. Which means, at the minimum, four major villains. I want to make sure I'm as ready as I CAN BE when that battle happens.
Twilight: Spike, I appreciate you taking this seriously enough to want to be a bigger help. But, well, this is very likely to be quite dangerous and if you got yourself hurt, I would never forgive myself. So, I'm saying, go ahead and find ways to try to help if you really want to, but be extremely careful about it. A battle like this is something where brains are more likely to be helpful than brawn.
Spike: (after Twilight was no longer in earshot) Maybe if I were a couple decades older and had the increased strength and flame breath that came with it, I could be a bigger help still. At the minimum, I'd be powerful enough to take Chrysalis and the Storm King.
Of course, I can completely understand if you already have other/better ideas.
Really good job on the exchanges, characterizations and general wrap-up in this chapter/episode. And, yeah, I can see your points in the author's notes yet again. Yeah, I could see the reason for changing the focus character to Diamond Tiara as well as the point about how it is better to provide a good balance between trusting your own instincts and listening to those more experienced when they have good points and how experts should address things with their clients in an open and honest, but respectful manner.
Certainly looking forward to the last two chapters in this installment as well as more of your work in general.
Hello and I'm sorry for not answering but I just lost my phone last week and on the worst day of the week Monday! But anyway I just read Make Friends,But Keep Discord and I want to say thank you to SuperPinkBrony12 for using my ideas for this story, I just think it was necessary for Discord and Fluttershy to have a little more development to their friendship/relationship if the Tirek thing was mentioned during the Gala
sunset ditching her old manecut like she ditched her equality obsession is a really heartwarming detail. it kinda reminds me of sareena from pokemon xyz
Cool! what chapters are next after Break up Break down?
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For this volume? Only the VERY last one, which is "Growing Up Is Hard To Do". For the next volume (which won't be out until next year)? I would say say, most likely between ten to twelve more (but we're not going to know which ones until next year).
Hey there. Thanks very much for getting the second-to-last chapter/episode of this volume up. Again, the exchanges, characterizations and general wrap-up are quite well done. And the points you made in the author's notes are also very good. I could definitely see the logic in changing this to an Ocellus focused episode and I also liked the nods to the Ponyville Mysteries book series and comics. Ocellus helping the Crusaders out with their search as well as the dialogues between Ocellus and Smolder were great stuff.
VERY much looking forward to the final chapter of this Volume (as well as the next volume next year and more of your work in general).
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I think you mean "Starlight". Sunset is over in the Equestria Girls universe. :-D
Otherwise, you make some great points.
Excellent job on this last chapter/episode in the Volume. VERY much appreciated the work that went into the exchanges, characterizations, general wrap-up and future volume set-up in all the right places. I admit that you caught me by very pleasant surprise with this one. I mean, I expected this to be tied in with the upcoming final battle with the Legion, but not in this manner. I could certainly see Grogar trying to recruit Spoiled, and also Spoiled refusing out of Pragmatic Villainy (i.e. not being sure Grogar's forces were going to win and being JUST smart enough to avoid doing anything that would land her a high treason charge) along with the bits of Spoiled's backstory before Grogar de-aged her back to a filly. Also really liked the Crusaders sitting for the de-aged Spoiled and teaching her a few valuable lessons (most notably how bad behavior shouldn't be rewarded and better upbringing makes for better children) while Diamond was busy helping Twilight. And, yeah, Twilight's noting that meeting the de-aged Spoiled provided some explanation for Diamond's difficulty with her earliest lessons was pretty good too.
Definitely looking forward to the final volume(s) (which will probably be next year) as well as more of your work in general.
10997076 in the next What If can you put the CMC in To Where and Back Again to rescue his sister and scenes with The Mane 6, Spike, the Royal Sisters and the Royal Family beign capture and cooconed by the Changelings onscreen
Hey if you did a redoing of The Cutie Remark, what do you have planned for The Cutie Map in volume 14?
11144201 The Cutie Map isn't being rewritten in Volume 14.
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Oh, well what do you have planned for it anyway?
11144229 You'll see soon enough.
Don't you mean without her?
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What do you think Starlight might do if Spike or Discord arrived in her village? You know since they don't have cutie marks and Spike is a dragon and not a pony. Do you think she might that a non pony such as a dragon might be a threat to her beliefs?