Aaaaah it's a filly! d'aaw! Although scoots *can* handle clouds... she hung off one during the camping trip~ (though this is obviously not entirely canon, so we can ignore that )
But... uh oh. Fluttershy.
(and I can't wait until AJ hears that Braeburn is scoots' father. If that's accurate. Oughta be fun XD )
And granny was hilarious here. Especially with AJ. "When did you turn stallion?!" XD
And Spy is finally born. I was getting really sick of pregnant RD. And I know we haven't really seen anything of Spy yet, but she's already awesome. I can't wait to see more of her. Now we see what's going on with Fluttershy I guess. I just can't bring myself to care though, she's been really annoying for this whole fic.
Another... bucking... week! And on that cliffhanger!
I'll admit, I'd been thinking "but... wait... if Dash is having the foal now... wasn't Fluttershy impregnated at least a few weeks later?" And then the phrase "premature birth" came to mind.
On the other hand, my aunt was born very, very, VERY early, and she's turned out just fine... so there's hope? Maybe if they get Twi handy?
You had to mention that comic.. I'm kinda sad it's over. Now it's completely video game commentary, with player 1, player 2, player 3, and player 4.. I liked ethan, he was just crazy enough to be fun, and zeke, and lucas, and everyone else...
the "players" have no depth.. they just kill each other all the time. They're not characters, they're mindless comedy.
As far as the cloud in an episode goes, It would make sense if Scootaloo has been slowly gaining more pegasus magic somehow over her life, but after that first moment Flight never had any faith in her.
Which really is the crux of their relationship I think, up until now.
Badass subject matter. There are no creatures anywhere on this wonderful planet half as badass as female mammals birthing. Read up on it. Elephants are probably the most badass, though human women come close.
On that point, I was thinking "now that's a little fast, but a quick alt-tab and... 5 - 30 minutes from water-break to delivery? Holy shit.
I mean, yeah, life on the hoof and all, but that's just ridiculous. I have the oddest sense of curiosity now: has any Conversion Bureau story played with a war-of-the-sexes thing with "Pony Reproduction: It Doesn't Suck As Much."
Also, AJx, dude. Before I let myself get sidetracked anymore, this is the most consistently solid chapter you've written.
(Pretend this is that GIF from Citizen Kane, which I'm too lazy to find.)
Best moment of many. I love, love, love when a few words don't leave much more to say. > She fell right through.
Gah. Wow. I mean, I should have seen that coming, but I didn't and, just, wow.
The only thing I missed was a quick glance from Dash along Spy's back to see whether she has little Scootaloo wings or not. I can almost imagine Dash feeling guilty for looking but looking anyway 'cause she just hasta know...
Alright, nitpick time. One, granny says shit earlier in the chapter and then considers reprimanding others for the same offense. Two, Scootaloo CAN walk on clouds, and has treated clouds as a solid object twice now, at least. Three I can't remember because of how great this was.
1925930 Yeah, I did avoid bloody deflowerings- though in my defense, I have now watched MANY bloodless mare foalings on Youtube, and Dash's continuous activity had conditioned her through all those cramps to deliver Spy with very few issues. 1930566 Yep, Granny cussed. It takes a lot- and she had very high standards for Applejack staying cool and collected, unreasonably high. And yes, Scootaloo got better and can also fly a little now, but at birth she had zilch, you weren't seeing her at birth. 1921211 Actually hadn't seen that picture- the green there is a little darker than I'm thinking of and the blue WAY darker. Think Granny's body color and Dash's body color for the mane (much like other Apple family members share colors around) 1917371 Shrinky, I'm loving your commentary- I use all my words up in writing and get lonely when the folks I've gotten to know through comments, stop commenting. And yes, I am still going for happy endings via terrifying paths, and yes the reason this is 'dark' is the incest, more than anything. Though to be honest, I tagged it Dark before I realized what was up with Raridad- which means that he is still a distressing character who's done things he knew were wrong, but more relatable because now we know he's literally miswired and kept in check by Rarimom, who's made a distressing bargain and will never really forgive Rarity for what happened. And Rarity got even MORE complex when that past scene came to light- as an arrogant beautiful filly she did in fact think she could simply take Daddy and Mommy would just have to deal with being the inferior mare. What Rarity suffered as the consequences of that foalish selfishness- is what led her to become the bearer of the Element of Generosity, and why she works so hard to care for others, plus it's why she's so kinky and has such a shaming fetish. It's all tangled up in her mind, and she's knit that tangled mind into a fashionable garment. I love Rarara, she's rather an awesome person. And Applejack did come to rescue her, in the end, too.
One more thing... 1915613 "Your story got me into the pony fandom, and its a awesome story." How is this possible? I've written three books, all of which are paced and sequenced for big emotional climaxes (not just 300,000 words of stream of ramblingness) and not one has ever or will ever find EqD because they are flat-out explicit clopfiction. Not one has ever had a feature on FIMfiction, either, and now they are weighted down by some mechanism so they never ever will, no matter how successful any one chapter is. This is a problem, I can't keep going like this because it is just too discouraging. I'm not saying I won't find other stuff to do, or that I won't ever add to Trixieverse canon (hell, if I laid off the book-writing and just did a few isolated shorts with no major story arc, that's what FIM is for). But you're saying you got INTO the fandom through reading stuff out of the year of my life I've spent writing stuff that is totally obscure and buried within the depths of the fandom, never to be recognized? HOW?
(Flat What) You've just been witness to something so bizarre, so eye-crossingly stupid
Is it that stupid? It ain't quite 'War And Peace' but the collected Trixieverse is already more words than Dostoyevsky's 'Crime And Punishment', or 'Moby Dick'. It's more than the first three Harry Potter books. It's more than the entire Chronicles of Narnia. (but with dickfillies ;P ) I've worked hard. I'm tired.
I'm workin' frantically away at getting my own website up to par where all my other books (pre-pony) will become available- if you count all of those, the total is more like 800,000 words (the last 300K or so being ponies). I'm normally not a whiner. Can you trust me a little, like you did with 'Dashie's Foaling', that I am not proposing to kick over my sandcastle in a huff?
I just gotta figure out some way to take it to the next level, that's all...
I apologize if I alarmed anypony- I've got a lot goin' on which I cannot yet reveal. Soon come. I merely hope it will offer some amusement and engagement for jaded dickfilly fanatics, of whom I'm still one...
You gotta remember I'm still AJ at heart- and this site acts like the episode The Last Roundup, for me. I KNOW I am kickin' some butt, but week after week, month after month, year after YEAR it's no prizes and sittin' at #10,000 in the 'charts' while all sorts of stuff gets hyped to the heavens, and I can't always keep my own spirits up considering what high expectations I have of what I should be able to do.
Still would like to hear from that pony who got into the fandom through TMB. How is that even possible? Is he a furry connection from my furry-writin' days?
OH MY GOD. This fanfic is AMAZING! I got a little studdery about reading this when I found out Sky couldn't be a Pegasus ( I love Pegasi!) but this is AMAZING!
Holy hell! That was an amazing chapter in every sense of the word! I swear, Dash and Flight had some sort of history together. And D'AWWW, Dash's little filly is going to be so much like her parents. So incredible! And now shit is hitting the fan with Fluttershy. That's not good. Better run everyone!
Some movie ( Look Who's Talking?). the father asked the mother "How are you?". She replied "I just squeezed something the size of a watermelon through something the size of a lemon. How do you think I am?"
1st rule of survival. Baby is down for a nap, Mommy is down for a nap.
Name the kid Macbeth because Macbeth hath murdered sleep.
Oh, shit.
Aaaaah it's a filly! d'aaw!
Although scoots *can* handle clouds... she hung off one during the camping trip~ (though this is obviously not entirely canon, so we can ignore that )
But... uh oh. Fluttershy.
(and I can't wait until AJ hears that Braeburn is scoots' father. If that's accurate. Oughta be fun XD )
And granny was hilarious here. Especially with AJ. "When did you turn stallion?!" XD
And Spy is finally born. I was getting really sick of pregnant RD. And I know we haven't really seen anything of Spy yet, but she's already awesome. I can't wait to see more of her. Now we see what's going on with Fluttershy I guess. I just can't bring myself to care though, she's been really annoying for this whole fic.
Commence read.
Aw. It's a girl.
Granny with that foul language.
Now what might have happened with Fluttershy?
Goddamn cliffhangers! I'm going to flip all the tables!
Oh cliffhangers...
...my brain says miscarriage, and then I can't stop thinking of Ctrl-Alt-Del.
Also I'm still trying to figure out how you made that birthing scene so badass.
"GET OUT OF ME RIGHT NOW"
Idly, Applejinx... were you at all inspired by this, for Northern Spy's coloring?
http://arcticwaters.deviantart.com/art/Pony-family-bonding-321477155
can you say stillbirth?
Oh Applejack,
Fluttershy..Piinkie is panicking..."One hell of a shitstorm"...
Oh no....
1920617
It might not be a miscarriage, but complications are very likely.
So, next chapter in the next few minutes yes? DON'T LEAVE ME HANGING!!!!
She finally had the foal, welcome to the world Spy!
I hope Fluttershy is ok, and this is just normal Pinkie Pie overreacting... I don't do this often, but for the love of Celestia update soon!
FUCK NO FLUTTERSHY BE OK D:
Another... bucking... week! And on that cliffhanger!
I'll admit, I'd been thinking "but... wait... if Dash is having the foal now... wasn't Fluttershy impregnated at least a few weeks later?" And then the phrase "premature birth" came to mind.
On the other hand, my aunt was born very, very, VERY early, and she's turned out just fine... so there's hope? Maybe if they get Twi handy?
YAYYYYY Spy's here at last! So adorable... and it's nice that Flight showed up, too!
But Pinkie... oh dear...
1920617
You had to mention that comic.. I'm kinda sad it's over. Now it's completely video game commentary, with player 1, player 2, player 3, and player 4.. I liked ethan, he was just crazy enough to be fun, and zeke, and lucas, and everyone else...
the "players" have no depth.. they just kill each other all the time. They're not characters, they're mindless comedy.
also. Omigosh fluttershy! No no! Let it be okay!!
As far as the cloud in an episode goes, It would make sense if Scootaloo has been slowly gaining more pegasus magic somehow over her life, but after that first moment Flight never had any faith in her.
Which really is the crux of their relationship I think, up until now.
1920617
> badass
Badass subject matter. There are no creatures anywhere on this wonderful planet half as badass as female mammals birthing. Read up on it. Elephants are probably the most badass, though human women come close.
On that point, I was thinking "now that's a little fast, but a quick alt-tab and... 5 - 30 minutes from water-break to delivery? Holy shit.
I mean, yeah, life on the hoof and all, but that's just ridiculous. I have the oddest sense of curiosity now: has any Conversion Bureau story played with a war-of-the-sexes thing with "Pony Reproduction: It Doesn't Suck As Much."
Also, AJx, dude. Before I let myself get sidetracked anymore, this is the most consistently solid chapter you've written.
(Pretend this is that GIF from Citizen Kane, which I'm too lazy to find.)
Best moment of many. I love, love, love when a few words don't leave much more to say.
> She fell right through.
Gah. Wow. I mean, I should have seen that coming, but I didn't and, just, wow.
Another fine chapter:
The only thing I missed was a quick glance from Dash along Spy's back to see whether she has little Scootaloo wings or not. I can almost imagine Dash feeling guilty for looking but looking anyway 'cause she just hasta know...
Mike
That cliffhanger. Well, here's hoping I wasn't right this time too. Though you told me, way back when, that I wasn't...
1924537
Eustatian, you're the best ever.
No... No... No... No! Noooo! N00ooo!
Dear Goddesses, let Pinkie and 'Shy's foal be okay!
Still... Awesome chapter, yet again!
Alright, nitpick time. One, granny says shit earlier in the chapter and then considers reprimanding others for the same offense. Two, Scootaloo CAN walk on clouds, and has treated clouds as a solid object twice now, at least. Three I can't remember because of how great this was.
1925930
Yeah, I did avoid bloody deflowerings- though in my defense, I have now watched MANY bloodless mare foalings on Youtube, and Dash's continuous activity had conditioned her through all those cramps to deliver Spy with very few issues.
1930566
Yep, Granny cussed. It takes a lot- and she had very high standards for Applejack staying cool and collected, unreasonably high. And yes, Scootaloo got better and can also fly a little now, but at birth she had zilch, you weren't seeing her at birth.
1921211
Actually hadn't seen that picture- the green there is a little darker than I'm thinking of and the blue WAY darker. Think Granny's body color and Dash's body color for the mane (much like other Apple family members share colors around)
1917371
Shrinky, I'm loving your commentary- I use all my words up in writing and get lonely when the folks I've gotten to know through comments, stop commenting. And yes, I am still going for happy endings via terrifying paths, and yes the reason this is 'dark' is the incest, more than anything. Though to be honest, I tagged it Dark before I realized what was up with Raridad- which means that he is still a distressing character who's done things he knew were wrong, but more relatable because now we know he's literally miswired and kept in check by Rarimom, who's made a distressing bargain and will never really forgive Rarity for what happened.
And Rarity got even MORE complex when that past scene came to light- as an arrogant beautiful filly she did in fact think she could simply take Daddy and Mommy would just have to deal with being the inferior mare. What Rarity suffered as the consequences of that foalish selfishness- is what led her to become the bearer of the Element of Generosity, and why she works so hard to care for others, plus it's why she's so kinky and has such a shaming fetish. It's all tangled up in her mind, and she's knit that tangled mind into a fashionable garment. I love Rarara, she's rather an awesome person. And Applejack did come to rescue her, in the end, too.
One more thing...
1915613
"Your story got me into the pony fandom, and its a awesome story."
How is this possible? I've written three books, all of which are paced and sequenced for big emotional climaxes (not just 300,000 words of stream of ramblingness) and not one has ever or will ever find EqD because they are flat-out explicit clopfiction. Not one has ever had a feature on FIMfiction, either, and now they are weighted down by some mechanism so they never ever will, no matter how successful any one chapter is. This is a problem, I can't keep going like this because it is just too discouraging. I'm not saying I won't find other stuff to do, or that I won't ever add to Trixieverse canon (hell, if I laid off the book-writing and just did a few isolated shorts with no major story arc, that's what FIM is for).
But you're saying you got INTO the fandom through reading stuff out of the year of my life I've spent writing stuff that is totally obscure and buried within the depths of the fandom, never to be recognized?
HOW?
1931131
What.
1931564
Is it that stupid? It ain't quite 'War And Peace' but the collected Trixieverse is already more words than Dostoyevsky's 'Crime And Punishment', or 'Moby Dick'. It's more than the first three Harry Potter books. It's more than the entire Chronicles of Narnia. (but with dickfillies ;P )
I've worked hard. I'm tired.
I'm workin' frantically away at getting my own website up to par where all my other books (pre-pony) will become available- if you count all of those, the total is more like 800,000 words (the last 300K or so being ponies). I'm normally not a whiner. Can you trust me a little, like you did with 'Dashie's Foaling', that I am not proposing to kick over my sandcastle in a huff?
I just gotta figure out some way to take it to the next level, that's all...
I apologize if I alarmed anypony- I've got a lot goin' on which I cannot yet reveal. Soon come. I merely hope it will offer some amusement and engagement for jaded dickfilly fanatics, of whom I'm still one...
You gotta remember I'm still AJ at heart- and this site acts like the episode The Last Roundup, for me. I KNOW I am kickin' some butt, but week after week, month after month, year after YEAR it's no prizes and sittin' at #10,000 in the 'charts' while all sorts of stuff gets hyped to the heavens, and I can't always keep my own spirits up considering what high expectations I have of what I should be able to do.
Still would like to hear from that pony who got into the fandom through TMB. How is that even possible? Is he a furry connection from my furry-writin' days?
Yay! Dashie gave birth finally!
Congrats to the lucky mares, the honest and hardworking Apple Jack and the fastest and most loyal Rainbow Dash!
But now it Flutter Shy's turn!
So. Spy is an earth pony, isn't she? beside that. I love it. favorite chapter ever!!
OH MY GOD. This fanfic is AMAZING! I got a little studdery about reading this when I found out Sky couldn't be a Pegasus ( I love Pegasi!) but this is AMAZING!
Holy hell! That was an amazing chapter in every sense of the word! I swear, Dash and Flight had some sort of history together. And D'AWWW, Dash's little filly is going to be so much like her parents. So incredible! And now shit is hitting the fan with Fluttershy. That's not good. Better run everyone!
Some movie ( Look Who's Talking?). the father asked the mother "How are you?". She replied "I just squeezed something the size of a watermelon through something the size of a lemon. How do you think I am?"
1st rule of survival. Baby is down for a nap, Mommy is down for a nap.
Name the kid Macbeth because Macbeth hath murdered sleep.