Man so much... Rarity's mom is a jerk, Luna in dreams being canon now makes that part all the more surreal and when the gem was used on Scootaloo, this was me When next we see Sweetie Belle, I expect the best we can hope for is but knowing this story... Yeah, so much worse.
Rarity is Sweetie's mom. I'd like to say I didn't see this one coming, but I don't like being completely full of crap. Still was a fun chapter to read.
God damn bro... I've never seen someone who can make scenarios like this besides you.
I thank you for this awesome chapter, Applejinx; Master of the shit storm.
Edit: You know... I find it kind of funny that this story is called Dashie's Foaling and yet its central focus seems to be on Rarity, Lyra, and the CMC.
I mean sure... You still have a lot of focus on the other characters, but they haven't gotten as much attention, though I do notice your look into Twilight's and Trixie's developing sex-life. And what of the previous parts?
Let's see... Trixie's Magic Bit seemed to focus mainly on Rainbow Dash, Applejack, and Twilight.
And Rarity's Worst Day ever seemed to focus mainly on Rainbow Dash, Applejack, and Trixie.
out of curiosity though, how long has the sweetie/rarity thing been planned? Enough hints have been dropped in this book to show that this was a major plot point all along, but I mean, did you have any inclination of this/an idea of this in an earlier book? And how far back? :o
1817288 "Mommy's a filthy pony". Rarity knew before I did, in Rarity's Worst Day Ever, a book ago. She's been acting out on this stuff for a very long time, was already a wild kinky thing in Trixie's Magic Bit. By the time Dashie's Foaling started, I knew why.
This is where ponies begin to get moments of pure awesome as they save and care for each other- it will start to happen by Xmas and there will be stuff to be joyous about. I reserve the right to scare the hell out of you getting there, though...
Wow. Rarity's family is messed UP! That explains her mother's attitude. Doesn't make it right, although she may be at least somewhat motivated to protect Sweetie Belle. As for her dad, What the HELL man?!
And then there are the Luna feels. Oh lord the Luna feels.
I suspected that was what had happened, and realized that that would be revealed when the gem was shown, but DAMN that was an unsettling plot twist. I've heard jokes about being 's mom, but in this context that is downright terrifying. dl.dropbox.com/u/69811530/mlfw8285-135034020612066.png
Rarity's father is one of the available playable characters in Gameloft's mobile game, which gives him the name Magnum.
I'm going by the show... while I can! Stands to reason that at some point my luck's gotta give out with having canon support Trixie's Magic Whip, I mean Bit.
The mobile game is not the show, though I guess if it filters into other stuff that gives me a name for RariDad- I can't call them RariDad and RariMom in the story, so they've been going unnamed (which works OK thematically- they are ponies it's uncomfortable to talk about). I kinda need him to be a unicorn... if that means it's a 'slip' from the good wholesome Equestria HUB version, maybe that's okay. Look at how much else is 'slipped', my Trixie uses a whip on other ponies! I.. oh ;)
You know, since RWDE, I've been using this as my unofficial theme song for this series. I even almost posted it once, but I don't think I got around to it. If I didn't, I think now is appropriate:
Fuck. I wasn't wrong. There's the reason for the "how much do you trust me?" warning.
This isn't totally relevant to THIS chapter, but...
You know how much I identified with Rainbow Dash when she was spiralling, trying to console herself in hedonism? I'm not feeling her as much this time. She's being her canon self, all refusing to do what's right and proper with her pregnancy, which is fine, but not as deeply human as some of the roles your ponies have been in.
Rarity this time around is incredibly, gut-wrenchingly visceral. The way you used her established traits, like the very deliberate self-control, is well-deployed and something that I expect from you by now, but it's more than that. She's going through pain, and she's doing it after you've given us a chance to get to know her as a character. I obviously don't have a lot of connection to Rarity, but that's not the kind of connection you're leveraging here. The readers have come to know her as a friend.
There are moments throughout this thing where I'm less than satisfied with your dialogue--that's been true since Best Ride Ever. It's specific moments where exchanges just don't go as perfectly as the overarching work, or the in-universe situation, demands. Your eye for pony-appropriate tone and your sense of humor usually forgive these moments in short order.
One last thing. Lyra's nymphomania reminds me of how I wrote Cloudchaser. This bothers me a little because I consider my Cloudchaser to be essentially moral and likeable.
And the truth is out! Called it from such a long time ago! I knew it was going to be revealed when they brought in that...parent-showing bit thingy. I'm a bit confused as to Flight Lightning's lover... Was it the earth pony that played with her wings and the pegasus that "watered the seed?" Or was it the other way around?
My whole attention and interest are yours. My mind is yours as well. I never saw that one coming, and I just loved it. Wow. Intense and rather unexpected in many ways.
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And here we go.
Saw this coming right after Scootaloo had the gem used on her.
Man so much... Rarity's mom is a jerk, Luna in dreams being canon now makes that part all the more surreal and when the gem was used on Scootaloo, this was me When next we see Sweetie Belle, I expect the best we can hope for is but knowing this story... Yeah, so much worse.
Rarity is Sweetie's mom. I'd like to say I didn't see this one coming, but I don't like being completely full of crap. Still was a fun chapter to read.
Commence read.
That gem sounds like it could make a handful of orphans a bit happier, but at the same time saddened.
That is all. I can't wait for the ensuing fallout...
I saw rarity being sweetie belle's mom coming... but still... Damn.
Aw shit, here it comes.
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God damn bro... I've never seen someone who can make scenarios
like this besides you.
I thank you for this awesome chapter, Applejinx; Master of the shit storm.
Edit:
You know... I find it kind of funny that this story is called Dashie's Foaling and yet
its central focus seems to be on Rarity, Lyra, and the CMC.
I mean sure... You still have a lot of focus on the other characters, but they haven't
gotten as much attention, though I do notice your look into Twilight's and Trixie's developing sex-life.
And what of the previous parts?
Let's see... Trixie's Magic Bit seemed to focus mainly on Rainbow Dash, Applejack, and Twilight.
And Rarity's Worst Day ever seemed to focus mainly on Rainbow Dash, Applejack, and Trixie.
My thoughts to finding out about Sweetie's true mother
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AWWWW shit!
Geez... poor Sweetie... I want to hug all three of the CMC to pieces though! Just... gut-wrenching, is what this is.
out of curiosity though, how long has the sweetie/rarity thing been planned? Enough hints have been dropped in this book to show that this was a major plot point all along, but I mean, did you have any inclination of this/an idea of this in an earlier book? And how far back? :o
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"Mommy's a filthy pony". Rarity knew before I did, in Rarity's Worst Day Ever, a book ago. She's been acting out on this stuff for a very long time, was already a wild kinky thing in Trixie's Magic Bit. By the time Dashie's Foaling started, I knew why.
This is where ponies begin to get moments of pure awesome as they save and care for each other- it will start to happen by Xmas and there will be stuff to be joyous about. I reserve the right to scare the hell out of you getting there, though...
Wow. Rarity's family is messed UP! That explains her mother's attitude. Doesn't make it right, although she may be at least somewhat motivated to protect Sweetie Belle. As for her dad, What the HELL man?!
And then there are the Luna feels. Oh lord the Luna feels.
I suspected that was what had happened, and realized that that would be revealed when the gem was shown, but DAMN that was an unsettling plot twist. I've heard jokes about being 's mom, but in this context that is downright terrifying.
dl.dropbox.com/u/69811530/mlfw8285-135034020612066.png
Saw it coming as soon as the gem was used on scootaloo.
i mean, i suspected for a while... this just confirmed it.
such a short little chapter though, MOAR!
Uh.. Anyone else checked the pony wiki? Magnum, rarity's dad? He's an earth pony.
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I'm going by the show... while I can! Stands to reason that at some point my luck's gotta give out with having canon support Trixie's Magic Whip, I mean Bit.
The mobile game is not the show, though I guess if it filters into other stuff that gives me a name for RariDad- I can't call them RariDad and RariMom in the story, so they've been going unnamed (which works OK thematically- they are ponies it's uncomfortable to talk about). I kinda need him to be a unicorn... if that means it's a 'slip' from the good wholesome Equestria HUB version, maybe that's okay. Look at how much else is 'slipped', my Trixie uses a whip on other ponies! I.. oh ;)
1820745i wasn't going just by the game, applejinx. i mean, the name yes. What i meant is on the pony wiki it says he's an earth pony.
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...from the mobile game. Hey, it'll break down eventually- I'm getting the most out of ponifiction while I can
You know, since RWDE, I've been using this as my unofficial theme song for this series. I even almost posted it once, but I don't think I got around to it. If I didn't, I think now is appropriate:
Fuck. I wasn't wrong. There's the reason for the "how much do you trust me?" warning.
This isn't totally relevant to THIS chapter, but...
You know how much I identified with Rainbow Dash when she was spiralling, trying to console herself in hedonism? I'm not feeling her as much this time. She's being her canon self, all refusing to do what's right and proper with her pregnancy, which is fine, but not as deeply human as some of the roles your ponies have been in.
Rarity this time around is incredibly, gut-wrenchingly visceral. The way you used her established traits, like the very deliberate self-control, is well-deployed and something that I expect from you by now, but it's more than that. She's going through pain, and she's doing it after you've given us a chance to get to know her as a character. I obviously don't have a lot of connection to Rarity, but that's not the kind of connection you're leveraging here. The readers have come to know her as a friend.
There are moments throughout this thing where I'm less than satisfied with your dialogue--that's been true since Best Ride Ever. It's specific moments where exchanges just don't go as perfectly as the overarching work, or the in-universe situation, demands. Your eye for pony-appropriate tone and your sense of humor usually forgive these moments in short order.
One last thing. Lyra's nymphomania reminds me of how I wrote Cloudchaser. This bothers me a little because I consider my Cloudchaser to be essentially moral and likeable.
[sitting upright gripping my tablet in a death-grip, currently headless]
[snaps fingers and head reforms]
I frikkin' KNEW it!!!!!!!
IS 's mother!!!!!!!
[head explodes again]
And the truth is out! Called it from such a long time ago! I knew it was going to be revealed when they brought in that...parent-showing bit thingy. I'm a bit confused as to Flight Lightning's lover... Was it the earth pony that played with her wings and the pegasus that "watered the seed?" Or was it the other way around?
My whole attention and interest are yours. My mind is yours as well. I never saw that one coming, and I just loved it. Wow. Intense and rather unexpected in many ways.
I think I'm falling in love with your writing
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Awww
I'm happy I've got plenty more books for you to read, then!
Sweet shits about to get good! This should be quite interesting.
My thought process:
“Interesting item; they used it on Scootaloo, now they’re going to use it on Apple Bloom, and then Swee-oh shit.”