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Oh, Black Adam. This... This is going to end poorly for them.

What is this a crossover with?

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Shazam, specifically the Black Adam stories.

The Monk

Should turn on voting, would definitely get a thumbs up from me. Look forward to your next update

Not a bad story. Though when i saw the main 6 tag and after reading the story i know he is going to get stoned most likely.

There's a reason the Norsemen made a custom to always extend hospitality if a stranger came calling to your home at night: Regardless of their appearance, you could not be sure just who was at your door, and good luck to you if you insulted one of the Æsir.

These ponies have just invite a wrath greater than anything they could have imagined. They'd best hope that he is not beyond the reach of Zehuti.

well, that is an interesting start, i like it. i cant wait to see where you take this.

i do like seeing where these RGRE stories go, there almost no stories where human reincarnates as pony while being RGRE(im not a fan of 'anon' stories, which makes up 99% of the RGRE stories). so ill definitely be watching this story closely

What does RGRE stand for

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Reverse Gender Roles .... Equestria I think

Interesting premise, I like the idea that this take place in early Equestria's history which is a welcome change. I would have liked to have preferred to have scene him adapt to his new reality, and his growth as a pony, or seeing how he fell in love founded his family more in detail. looking forward to see more of the story in the near future and what we will be his contribution to that era. Best of luck

also here is some work of mine if you are ever looking to commission a cover art for your story.

Huh. Interesting time to put the story. I'm curious where you're going with this.

Well this story definitely has my attention.

I suggest that you give Adam a strong hatred for nobles and for him to also greatly mistrust unicorns. Since I'm assuming that he's going to be taking a thousand year "nap" not long after his vengeance fueled rampage. I'm really curious to see if he'd attack any of the nobles living in Canterlot that even remotely remind him of the mare responsible for his family's murder.

Speaking of his family's murderer. Maybe you could have either Twilight or Rarity be a descendant of her. That would definitely complicate any of the main 6's interactions with Adam when he learns about that.

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Bruh he finds some mysterious substances which he smokes. And wakes up 1000 years later

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Hahahahahahahahaha, my god that was the first time i actually got that joke told to me.

i was kinda fooled by the artwork first, cause it looks like a unicorn there, but he is an earth pony in the story

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i was kinda fooled by the artwork first, cause it looks like a unicorn there, but he is an earth pony in the story

It kind of does, doesn't it? It's definitely an earth pony. Black Adam is stocky, and the stockiest male earth pony that isn't Snowflake was Big Mac, and it's his image I chose to put into silhouette for the cover art. It's just a trick of the background and the placement of the back ear, that makes it confusing. If we ever fiddle with it again, I'll lighten that area.

All my book covers and gifted book covers are the work of my spouse.

The Monk

I like this so far, you have gained my attention. Fingers crossed the trend continues, when might the next chapter be published?

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I'll try for bi-weekly or under on Friday. I work for a hospital, so I don't have much downtime. I do intend to finish this, as I have the ending already written.

The Monk

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That's no worry at all!
Can't wait for the next chapter!
-TW

You all say he'll get turned into stone but at the same time forget that Black Adam and in extension Shazam are both ageless when transformed. Theres a chance he stayed transformed for all those time with the high risking of aging into dust if he ever transform back in the present time

Looking forward to more

Lost was so weird.... I still haven't finished it

Mom said for me to tell you to have dinner ready early as they're going to be ahead of things today.

Might be missing something here

Holy shit!!! This is good!!!!

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Come again nigga?

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Wow you are absolutely rude

To be honest, I never expected fic about Shazam!, so I'm quite intrigued! Besides some tiny typos I noticed, I feel this was a pretty good start. Good work! :pinkiehappy: :heart:


Just some little typos to fix (in order, of course)! :twilightsmile:

"Your You're John Locke?"

Paragraph Five

Locke stood with a puff of effort, "Well, I'm sorry to be the one to tell you, but you aren't going to the afterlife. Let's just say that I have other plans for you. I would like to send you to a parallel world. The people there could use a hand." He scratched an itch on his face with the knife. "The natives they're there need the help."

Paragraph Eleven

"I don't like the red one. Red ones one's a weenie."

Paragraph Twenty-Seven

He shakes his head mumbling, "Hero's. Heroes." and snaps his fingers "Granted!"

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(Honestly, this one is optional, and a little too picky to point out in my opinion, but might as well tell you, no? I suggest either remove the space between the word "Equestria" and the ellipsis (the three dots), or replace the ellipsis with a comma. Or you can just leave it, heh.:twilightsheepish:)

My hooves plowed through the underbrush. My keen eyes sweeping the ground for rotting logs. My large earth pony frame made getting through these tight confines a simple matter as I tanked my way through the forest. Here I was, hero of Equestria(-) , hunting for mushrooms with my wicker basket. I huffed as I thought about just how unheroic my life had been since I got here.

Paragraph Thirty-Six

"I love the look of a hard-working mare," I said as I swatted them with my tail as I passed. I looked over my shoulder and with a sultry look said, "If only I had some big strong mares to take me under hoof and teach me the ways of the world." I finished with a seductive lick of my teeth and a flick of my tail. I always loved watching their eyes widen as they get that split-second split (no dash) second look at my stallion bits. It's comical. Even after eight years, I can still make them stammer like teenagers.

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"Poppa, I just remembered they said, not to run in the house."

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"Mom said for me to tell you to have dinner ready early as they're going to be ahead of things today."

Paragraph Fifty-Five

Our family gathered and we passed around our meal. River Shine leads the customary prayer to Faust, and dinner began. Dinner was the highlight of the day. A time when the whole family could unwind and bond together. It was something I didn't like at first, but It it slowly grew on me.

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(Just the space this time lol) "Ah, filthy(-)... and these are the thieves?" She said looking at the closest guardsmare.

"Yes, your honor, that's what we got out of the general-store general (no dash) store owner. This lot has been avoiding taxes for years."

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River, our lead mare took charge of the situation and performed a slight bow. "Welcome,your honor. What brings you to our little homestead today?"

Paragraph Seventy-Seven

"This is unicorn script, You you know we can't read it!"

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The noble screamed. "She cut my face! She cut my face! Kill Her her!" then watched helplessly as my River was cut down.

Then I heard it, the screaming. My fillies are screaming! They were still in the house! I tried to rise, I tried to scream, but all I could manage was gagging sounds. The guards saw my movement and began kicking me back down. I could hear them laughing.

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"Bring(-)… him… here." The maniac purred. She actually purred. The guards dragged me to the mare, still laughing and joking among themselves.

"Oh, he looks upset(-)… tisk, tisk, tisk."

I glared at her and with blood covering my teeth I scowled. "Jus(-)... jus one," I slurred out after finally regaining my speech. I filled my lungs.

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Hope this helps! :rainbowkiss:

Well damn… that got depressing quick.

loving what you got so far. i hope you got more planned than the pilot chapter :)

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👍 am really excited for it:pinkiehappy:

"OK, I want the power of Cthulhu."

Ah your a man of culture as well I see

With his power he should be able to save his daughters. Enjoying the story so far.

Good, kick the hell out of those nobles! And if you’re in need of medival stuff I can provid knowledge for you.

Ok...I’m hooked....now reel me in with the next chapter~

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Chapters in Beta, release imminent.

Monk

so Adam's companion is a psychopathy in actuality, this will end well between them, can't wait to see what happens next.

Here hangs a tax collector: thief, arsonist, child murderer.

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They'll probably call Adam a psychopath too. He lost his entire family and killed some tax collectors

how the hell did Adam not realize Heart is lying when first he said his family sold him and then said they weren't even in equestria and then he said he was separated from his herd?

Ok so that murders are dead, what next?

Eh.. not what I'd expected

I'm almost afraid to see just what sort of terrible things Adam's new companion will do before he learns about Hearts's true nature.

So Adam is actually a psychopath or he is just a run away. Either way new character.

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Adam is actually a psychopath or he is just a run away.

I think you mean Hearts Obsession. 😎

Time will tell.

I liked the hanging part gonna be like an anti hero or something?

Clearly, they had never heard the Tale of Pony Taxes.

:moustache:

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