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Rainbow Dash hasn't seen her friend from Flight Camp, Fluttershy, in years. She hasn't even thought about Fluttershy. However, upon discovering that Fluttershy is the author of her favorite book series, she rushes to hunt her old friend down, with some surprising results.
My entry in Nitro Indigo's Reunions: A Swapped Roles Contest. Cover image by Ninjamissendk on deviantart.
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A very interesting au
Fantastic twist on the Daring Do-is-real idea. đź‘Ť
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Thanks.
this seems familiar
Honestly, this portrayal of Daring Do is better managed than the canon one. Seriously, there were so many holes in the show's logic on that front, the whole matter might as well have been like a screendoor on a submarine.
This, while not correcting all of those same problems outright in favor of trying to avoid reinventing the wheel too much, it does at least acknowledge their existence and took some steps to address them, and I appreciate it for that much.
Hello, I am one of the judges for the Reunions Swapped Roles contest, and I'm going to share the scores that I gave this story along with the comments. Note that I was just one of three judges, so these comments do NOT reflect what the other judges thought of the story.
Quality 3 / 5
Not too many grammatical errors. Pacing felt rushed, partly because descriptions were lacking in imagery. For example, when Rainbow Dash got tied up by Cabelleron’s goons, I would have expected a few more sensations than “forcefully grounding her”—perhaps the feelings of chains digging into the skin would have been appropriate. It’s not too big of an issue, and the events are still explained with good clarity.Â
Roleswap originality/utilization 3 / 5Â
Fluttershy in the place of Daring Do is honestly interesting, especially since we’ve seen some of her interactions with Cabelleron in canon. Her special talents are well-utilized, and her characterization is accurate. But there wasn’t that much depth to her, since the traps are stereotypical and the way she talks is just standard Fluttershy. (However, the way she called on the animals of the forest to attack Caballeron was very imaginative, so props for that. More stuff like that would have added some depth.)Â
A sort of a backstory—or at least a hint of a backstory—might have worked here, especially since Rainbow used to know Fluttershy and would no doubt want to catch up on some details. It’s not necessary, but it could have been an opportunity to do some worldbuilding and characterization for Fluttershy.
Prompt utilization 2 / 3
It was their first meeting in a while, and it was interesting seeing how Rainbow had to reconcile her image of a nervous Fluttershy at flight camp with the adventurer Daring Do. It could have used some more depth and complicated emotions, but it was still interesting enough.