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He left behind everything he had and everything he had known for the pony of his dreams; but the course of true love never did run smooth.

(This is the third story in the TwiBrush series, which began with The Sparkle Chronicles and continued with Second Act.  Cover art by *Spectty.)

First Published
4th Sep 2012
Last Modified
22nd Sep 2012
#1 · 119w, 2d ago · · · Debut ·

D'awwwwwwwwwwww so cute:rainbowkiss:

#2 · 119w, 2d ago · · · Debut ·

Yay Dusty! Very heartfelt - excellent poetry too!

I love it. Crazy romantic foolery, all of it. It's adorable.

I'm sort of jealous, having only dreamed about feeling that kind of passionate love.

#3 · 119w, 2d ago · · · Debut ·

I claim no credit for the song.  (See the last chapter for who deserves it.)

This was basically motivated by "Buck it, I'm gonna write a romance."   I suspect not everypony will be delighted, but so goes life.

#4 · 119w, 1d ago · · · Debut ·

My body is ready.

#5 · 119w, 1d ago · · · Debut ·

>>1217481

I don't even dream about it anymore.  (And as Fran Lebowitz noted, if your fantasies were truly of interest to others, they would no longer be fantasies, so I have an excuse for closing off that area.)

#6 · 119w, 15h ago · · · Debut ·

I love the cattiness between the others. Just enough innuendo to realize that they are adults but not enough to be nasty or mean or raunchy. Looks to be a fun ride.

#7 · 119w, 14h ago · · · Debut ·

>>1226780

That ensemble stuff was fun.  (And let's face it, you always wanted Fluttershy to deliver The Zinger, right?)

I keep looking at Chapter 2, which winds it up, and I keep finding things to throw in (or, in a couple of cases, to throw out).  I was going to put it up tonight, but thought better of it.   :facehoof:

#8 · 119w, 13h ago · · · Debut ·

Speaking of Fluttershy delivering the zinger: http://www.fimfiction.net/story/29466/1/Twilight-finds-a-book-of-puns/Well-this-is-hawkward

It's one of those "wait for it..." moments.:pinkiehappy:

Take your time, we'll be here.

#9 · 119w, 12h ago · · · Debut ·

>>1227457

Holy Celestia, there's a bad pun near the very beginning of Chapter 2.  Maybe I need to rewrite some more.

#10 · 118w, 6d ago · · · Debut ·

And having rewritten some more, I'm thinking there's going to be a Chapter 3.  Once I get 2 cleaned up, anyway.

#11 · 117w, 6d ago · · · Delight ·

Any more sequels for this series? Because I'm totally digging it, and it would also be kind of nice to maybe see what happened in between this and "The Sparkle Chronicles". You obviously don't have to feel obligated just because one of your fans requested it, but it'd be nice. My only complaint with both of these stories is that, in my opinion, they were too short. After I finished each of these stories, I found myself wanting more, because I hadn't gotten my fill, but there wasn't any more to read. But again, I love the stories, and I really hope you do some more with them. Also, my idea of showing the events that happened between the two comes from the game "Halo 3: ODST", haha.

#12 · 117w, 6d ago · · · Delight ·

>>1273300

I honestly don't know.  I swore I wouldn't come back to this series -- and yet I came back to this series.  Brush seems a good match for Twi in at least one regard: they're never going to give each other the silent treatment.  Let's just say that I don't have anything planned Right This Minute.

#13 · 117w, 6d ago · · · Debacle ·

This is a damn fine story, Dusty. I really appreciate the dialog between Twilight and Brush. It's crisp and real - commendable.

I'm jealous and proud of you at the same time.

:pinkiehappy:

#14 · 117w, 6d ago · · · Delight ·

I do believe that the future is unwritten, and fandom clearly states that leaving readers wanton lends to bad karma!

I should know - I just made that up.

:raritywink:

#15 · 117w, 6d ago · · · Delight ·

>>1274015

It's not so obvious here, but in the previous story, it seemed pretty clear to me that these two would never have gotten together except for the fact that they can and will talk to each other, without a whole lot of worry about what is and what is not pertinent, and without dancing around inconvenient facts.  So many couples founder on "We never talk anymore."   These ponies, however, will evidently yak about anything.  If I may borrow a paragraph from bookplayer:

So to convince me that there's a real relationship here that I should root for, I need to see at least one conversation about: Sports, food, books, what somepony did that day (non-romantic), plans (non-romantic), other ponies (not related to the relationship), gardening, music, clothing, or pretty much anything other than feelings, romantic plans, romantic desires, or something that symbolizes The Relationship in the minds of the readers/characters.

I'd already written this story by the time she put that up, but I understand her point.  I think.

About a week after I finished the story, this one silly scene popped into my head.  I kicked it around for a while, decided it wasn't going anywhere and it wasn't growing into its own story, so it's here now as Chapter 4.  My apologies to anypony who might have thought Chapter 3 had the perfect ending.

That ending... pfffft.  Good show sir.

>>1319666

I really didn't think anypony thought that ending was perfect, but I felt it necessary to cover my flanks, so to speak.  :duck:

>>1273300

it would also be kind of nice to maybe see what happened in between this and "The Sparkle Chronicles"

I am actually starting to think about filling in that space.  (Who'd have thought this would have turned into a series?)  Of course, inevitably we'd end up with one of those dreaded HiE stories, at least until he who becomes Brush is packed off to the operating room, but such is life.

>>1273300

You obviously don't have to feel obligated just because one of your fans requested it, but it'd be nice.

More than just one, it turns out.  And the aforementioned dreaded HiE story is now on its way to the moderators.

Update, later: Passed with considerable speed -- thank you, mods -- and Chapter 1 is at hoof.

Having just read through this little trilogy in chronological story order, I'll say it transitions nicely.

Pretty decent overall, as well.:moustache:

>>1667499

It would have been easier if I had had enough sense to write it that way, but it's too late now.

Since this ends the trilogy, I may as well mention that I plan to use that word at least as carelessly as the late Douglas Adams.

Which means: yes, these two lovebirds will return.  I actually put out the first chapter once, was struck by the response -- nopony had so much as a kind word for it, let alone an upturned thumb -- so I pulled it back for some reworking.

For those on tenterhooks waiting for more TwiBrush, there's a couple of chapters of something called The Life That Late He Led, now playing somewhere on this very site.

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