Why... Is this so... Interesting? There is no reason for me to like this enough to read it like, three times, but I did. Well, whatever. I liked the dynamic between Pinkie and Dash. And the daydream was good.
Oh dear... I have the *sneaking* suspicion that Pinkie's about to find out that Rainbow's not nearly as okay with things as she thinks she's gonna be....
I'm really expecting the big conflict to be when this is "all over."
1264748 Once again, I'd agree with you on your observation. Rainbow Dash did use a few words that would seem out of her vocabulary under normal circumstances, but it's perfectly forgivable, considering how wonderfully obscene this is
Also, I'd say that the three day sentence makes for a perfect length. Considering the material that's already been run down with Dash, it might have gotten old if it went for longer. Just my opinion, though
1264748 Another edit based on your suggestion, I replaced vulva with something a bit more common. As to the nature of the narrative, I must admit that I've thought about that myself. Last couple days, I've been reconsidering whether I should have written this in 1st person, or stuck with the 3rd person prose I used for Dream a Little Dream. I was trying to go for something a bit more personal, but perhaps it failed in other areas. While I don't think I feel like a complete re-write of the story, it is something to consider for future works.
Damn, we missed her late night cock sucking party.
On the bright side she seems to be coming along nicely, maybe she'll get it so bad that she'll do it right in public eh?
This is repulsive, animalistic, immoral, and debased.
My penis thanks you.
... wow how the fuck did this relationship last as long as it had???
Well, good to see things might not work out so bad and maybe Pinkie isn't so bad. Is what my brain part says.
The lower portion of my body is going "Woo! Guilt-free orgy! Cake made of cum! Kinky-sexy-fun!"
I think we all know which of those two is more interesting. I wonder if cake made with cum will taste worse than cake made with love?
I'm sorry the abusive breach of free will, in the form of Dash's punishment, is a far as I will go.
I'll neither like nor dislike this: have a good day.
Why... Is this so... Interesting? There is no reason for me to like this enough to read it like, three times, but I did. Well, whatever. I liked the dynamic between Pinkie and Dash. And the daydream was good.
Dash, get going.
Dash:
Oh dear... I have the *sneaking* suspicion that Pinkie's about to find out that Rainbow's not nearly as okay with things as she thinks she's gonna be....
I'm really expecting the big conflict to be when this is "all over."
In this episode, Dashie tries not to suck any dick on the way through the parking lot.
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Forgive me for doing this... but yeah. This is what i thought when i read your comment.
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Do I agree with you?
So far, it isn't bad. Just, for the love of Celestia, DON'T let it end like Twilight's Gradual Descent Into Sluttiness. PLEASE.
Sorry, this was all I could think of when I saw the title. That said, delightful perversion, looking forward to more.
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Gotta admit that I was bothered with this, too. Thanks for pointing this out, DirigibleQuixote.
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Once again, I'd agree with you on your observation. Rainbow Dash did use a few words that would seem out of her vocabulary under normal circumstances, but it's perfectly forgivable, considering how wonderfully obscene this is
Also, I'd say that the three day sentence makes for a perfect length. Considering the material that's already been run down with Dash, it might have gotten old if it went for longer. Just my opinion, though
1264748 Another edit based on your suggestion, I replaced vulva with something a bit more common. As to the nature of the narrative, I must admit that I've thought about that myself. Last couple days, I've been reconsidering whether I should have written this in 1st person, or stuck with the 3rd person prose I used for Dream a Little Dream. I was trying to go for something a bit more personal, but perhaps it failed in other areas. While I don't think I feel like a complete re-write of the story, it is something to consider for future works.
that really puts a new spin on this emote
This is such vile filth.
I love it
This works so good.
20 bits says when the spell wears off, she still has it just as bad and we learn it was within her all along!
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Question: weren't most of the names Pinkie listed off then names of Wonderbolt members?