It's 9:30 in the morning in Canterlot City. Sunset Shimmer is enjoying her summer vacation. She's in her apartment texting her friends to see who's available to go to the beach. Sunset notices a glow in the room.
"Twilight?" Sunset walks to the shelf to grab the journal. She opens it to read the message. "We need to talk?" Sunset hears her phone going off. She answers the call. "Hello?"
"Hey, Sunset. It's me, Twilight (Sci-Twi). My family is having a BBQ at the beach. Want to come with us?"
"Yea, uh, when are you going?"
"In five hours. Shining Armor reserved a spot for us at the beach."
"Alright, let me get back at you after I answer this other call."
"Alright, I'll wait for your call," Twilight (Sci-Twi) hangs up the call.
Sunset grabs a pen to reply to Twilight's message. "Alright, Princess. What do you need to talk about?" Sunset sees the message unfolding, which causes her heart to stop beating for a second.
Sunset Shimmer looks at the ceiling in disbelief for what seems like an hour now. She finds it hard to believe that Princess Celestia and Twilight want her to come back to Equestria. Sunset hears a knock on her door.
"That must be the Princess," Sunset walks to the front door and sees Princess Twilight Sparkle.
"It's time to go," Princess Twilight says.
"Not until you tell me what the hay is going on! Why am I'm needed in Equestria so drastically?" Sunset asks, sounding highly upset.
Princess Twilight enters Sunset's apartment. "I'll tell you why," Princess Twilight Sparkle grabs a chair and sits on it.
Sunset Shimmer sits on her couch facing Twilight. "Why is it important for me to come back to Equestria?"
"You remember Spike, right?"
"Yea, your number one assistant. The baby dragon. What about him?"
"He no longer resides in Equestria," Twilight said, going straight to the point.
"What do you mean he no longer resides in Equestria?" Sunset is confused.
"Discord teleported Spike into another world after granting a wish. A world Discord doesn't even know what it features."
"Why would Discord do that? That makes no sense whatsoever."
"Here's the kicker. My friends and I botched our friendship with Spike that he felt unhappy."
"Unhappy? How? What was the cause for Spike to become unhappy?"
Twilight sadly sighs. "It's a long story."
"Apparently, I have all day since you're here," Sunset crosses her arms. "Might as well tell me the whole story."
Twilight spent two hours explaining in full detail how she and her friends messed up their friendship with Spike. All the times' Spike was used, abused, abandoned, and neglected for many years. Twilight goes in full explanatory mode on what each of her friends has done to Spike. Then, Twilight explains the situation Equestria is in right now. Discord deceiving the masses in Equestria with his disguise as Spike and creating a whole new chain of events that made Equestria's life harder to endure. After that, Twilight explains a ruling for all creatures that originated in Equestria to remain, never to seek solace in a new world.
"So, let me get this straight. You want me to give up my happiness for your happiness?" Sunset is livid.
"It's not my fault that you were thrown into the fray like that, Sunset. It was Discord that brought it up. He's good at making ponies suffer from consequences."
"It doesn't matter whose fault it was. What you did is vile, unforgivable. How dare you, the Princess of Friendship, put a baby dragon through all that trauma while preaching what friendship is supposed to be. How dare you!?" Sunset yells at Twilight. "How dare you watch idly while your baby dragon was nearly drowning in a freezing lake!? How dare you make him clean an entire castle all by himself without any help!? HOW DARE YOU REDUCE SPIKE'S LIFE INTO SLAVERY!? WHAT THE HELL IS WRONG WITH YOU, PRINCESS OF FRIENDSHIP?!"
"I know. What my friends and I did is morbid. That's why we have a chance to fix everything. You are vital for Equestria."
"No! Screw you!" Sunset said. She covers her face in disgust.
"You don't belong here, Sunset. There's a Sunset Shimmer living in this world, and you are robbing her of her life. There's probably a lot of confusion, especially with her age. Have you considered thinking about that?"
"No! Don't do that! Don't guilt-trip me about someone else's life. I made my decision to live here."
"You decided to live someone else's life by coming here. Ruining that Sunset Shimmer on achieving her goals and dreams because someone here is exactly like her. The truth hurts, Sunset. It's time to come home."
Sunset grips her phone. The thought of impersonating someone's life never came across. Thanks to Twilight, a lot of guilty consciousness opened up, a lot of what-ifs pours into her mind. Her hand couldn't stop shaking while she listens to her guilty conscience. Sunset feels a tear come out of her right eye.
"Aaaaaaaaaaaaah!" Sunset angrily throws her phone against the wall. It shatters upon impact. She falls to her knees and cries a little.
Twilight gives Sunset space for her to cry everything out. Sunset's mind is flooded with a lot of guilt for robbing someone's life now that she thinks about it. She doesn't even know where the other Sunset Shimmer is doing or could be facing under a lot of surveillance. Like in the movies, a government interrogating or experimenting with the original while the copy gets to live freely. After an hour of crying, Sunset made her decision.
"Twilight," Sunset gets up.
"Yes, Sunset?" Twilight approaches Sunset.
Sunset has her eyes closed. "I'll return to Equestria. However, you are not my friend. Neither are those who used and abused Spike so severely."
"I understand. Thank you for making the right decision," Twilight formally says.
"However," Sunset noted.
"What do you mean, however?" Twilight doesn't understand.
"I'm not the only one that originated from Equestria. Three sirens originally came from Equestria that reside here. You need to gather Adagio Dazzle, Aria Blaze, and Sonata Dusk as well."
"Of course. That's the plan." "Then, when the time is right, I'll wipe everyone's memory and allow Sunset to live her life the way she intended. Right now, I gotta stick to the plan on bringing Spike back home by any means necessary."
"If you're wondering where the Sirens are at, they live in a van, traveling around town to sing and find a purpose."
"Where will they be right now?" Twilight asks.
"At a bar where people get drunk to forget their depression. Follow me," Sunset gathers her belongings and puts them in a duffle bag. She gets ready and takes Twilight to the bar.
10899980
Ok, then that's even better.🤷 How about a Coffin instead. anyway, that comment really me laugh.
Well, That Escalated Quickly, and yup Twilight went off the deep end and dragging Sunset and the Three sirens along with them. Oh, boy. Anyway two chapters in, and it came really good.🍺
10899987
No no no.
Lemme be perfectly clear. As much as I hate Twilight and co., I would never EVER wish any of them dead.
After all, I don't want them to die; I want them to suffer. They can't do that if they're dead now can they?
10900007
Ok ok, I'll back off the wasting Twilight with co, just ICU at minimum, just chill man ok, Sorry I didn't mean to go that far off the edge. Jeez.
10900009
I joke I joke. Sorry to put you off like that
10900012
No, problem my friend. jeez, man people don't get my dark humor from Rick and Morty references these days.
Damn you weren't kidding when you said your about to upload it
10900023
I worked on the two chapters yesterday.
10900035
Well nicely done both turned out well
10900037
Thanks
10900017
Yeah sorry again. I do love the show; Rick's hilarious cynicism keeps me coming back.
10900040
same here friend. It's all good no harm no foul. let be bygone, all right.🍺
There's a disturbance in the force
Hey guys I'm not the only one who's remembering Fairy Rage right? Is it really going to be helping protect Spike man from memory erasing Magic? I'm going to love it when Fairy Rage begin to rip Twilight apart figuratively and describing how Twilight try to rip everything that made Spike happy away from him just so she can have her personal slave back. Give me a series of evil laugh the likes that no one that has felt before.😈👹
10900064
I felt it too, Great Darkness is coming. Along with Great Sorrow.
Spike: 🤔 thinks then gets chills is it cold in here or is it just me
Wendy: spike is there something wrong
Spike: wendy I sense a great disturbance within the force and I feel something or rather someone is coming for me but I don't know when
I had something else but I lost my train of thought spike got that intuition or spider sense
To Twilight Sparkle:
https://m.youtube.com/watch?v=CIqRxBtNrFs
10900076
Here you go:
10900115
I Approve of this message. Let's relish it.😈
Double mad. Gonna be punching stuff all day. Good chapter though.
10900145
We all are my friend, we all are.
Any decency I had for Twilight is gone, kaput, buried, like Sunset said......SCREW HER!!!!
Glad that Spike has gone up in magic training & power since leaving this deceiver, I can't wait for her to get the rude awakening she deserves when she tries that memory erase spell on Spike, especially since he has an ace up his dragon sleeve!
Ok i'm done with this fic now. What was the point of bringing Sunset into this? Just to have someone else yell at Twilight? The fact that she wants nothing to do with Twilight means she likely won't be involve with the plot making it worthless to do this. But the worst offender is this.
Why would sunset care about these villains who weren't redeem? Why bring them to a world filled with magic making it easier for them to rise again? Why not leave them trap there where they are actually least likely to be a threat? There are warranted execptions to certain things and the Dazzlings are it. They shouldn't be brought back ever. Instead of secretly plotting to erase their memories Twilight should just bring that up.
At this point, I speculate that the only way Spike & his Friends are to stop both Twilight & Celestia from Dragging him back to Equestria Nonetheless using memory erasing is to cut off both their wings & horns. Hopefully by then they'll get the message.
10900286
And how.🍺
10900243
the Dazzlings arnt a threat anyway, their gems r broken, remember? they have no power at all...they just work those bars to pay the bills, not a lot of money in revenge...
I guess before I go and leave I will just give the full story on how my feelings for this fic changed. Just to get it off my chest. As someone who has read stories where the mane six get away with questionable actions it was nice to read one where they don't and are called out. One where they have to make up for it. Though here it's weird if they actually did make up for their actions earlier. What would Discord have done? find a way to contact Spike? Or simply reveal himself early, which likely would escalate everything to happen much earlier. Yeah his plan was flawed and I don't know what his full intentions was to have Twilight redeem herself, when he wouldn't have sent Spike back. Other than a little fun at their expense. Anyway, seeing them actually punished and called out was great, because they deserve it and they knew how much they screwed up and were trying to make up for it.
Sadly, it was easier said than done for them as they kept screwing things up with the fake spike. At first I was ok with it since I knew you intended this to be a long story and that it wouldn't be that easy for them to make up for their actions. You set up serious stakes for their actions by having the other kingdoms almost want nothing to do with Equestria with a chance of war. With stakes like those they really need to shape up. Then at Twilight's expense she ended having to lose her dream of starting a school of friendship and the kicker the one in charge was her own former student, who was stated multiple times to be the ideal one in charge. Her only hope to take part and have a chance with Spike was to be a student.
That's when the fic began going downhill for me. You had shorter and quickly paced chapters that tried to show Twilight and Rainbow as nuisances, but because of the shortness of the chapters it didn't come across that way to me. I was more baffled by how short the class period was. If classes are about an hour give or take, yeah there should have been more time. That was the first of only two instances of Twilight interrupting the class and guess what instead of speaking out of turn she raised her hand and was called on. Sure, she kept arguing a bit, but it wasn't that big of a deal and in reality shouldn't have taken up so much time, yet discord disguised as Spike gives her a warning, showing he is a bit trigger happy to punish her at the perfect opportunity. As for Rainbow he purposely made the lesson about not pulling mean spirted pranks and she raises a fuss. Only to claim he didn't mention her by name, which doesn't matter. It was still clear what he was up too. The other students knows about Twilight's and her friend's actions against Spike, so they would have picked up on what he was doing. Was Discord's actions justified. Sure I'll admit it, but he should have admitted that he was doing it at the time and not hide behind "Well I didn't say your name.". Then comes the last class of the first day where Starlight throws a fit over one misbehaving student (Twilight) and decides not to teach one whole class period, which like I point out a few times before is plain wrong and will have serious consequences for the teacher involve. Her rage was entirely unjustified since we only saw Twilight do it once before and it wasn't a big deal. If your attempt was to show how bad Twilight was on the first day, you failed and only proved Starlight shouldn't be a teacher or headmare, despite the praise she got in earlier chapters. Starlight scolds Twilight about how they almost went to war and she should listen and not interrupt the class, which is hypocritical since that didn't matter when she decided to not do that class period. If she was worried she would have calmed down and continued instead of letting one misbehaving student get to her.
After that whole mess things were fine. Twilight and the others were actually shaping up. Giving me hope they would redeem themselves. Twilight manages to find a way to teach about the subject she wanted, which I am happy for. Though in hindsight now the only reason she was able to was so Cozy could get into power, but it was still nice to see, since I consider Twilight the most sympathetic character in this fic. At least Spike's suffering ended early. She manages to get enough signatures, which makes it seem like others want to learn. This seems like the perfect opportunity for her improve her negative reputation with everyone. Nope. Despite getting enough signatures only Cozy likes the class.
Then you kind of skip around and instead spending time to develop characters and their relationships you just skip to Cozy's plan. In the end Discord is exposed and of course Twilight is angry. Discords refuses to help at first, but then agrees if she brings Sunset back, bringing in someone who wasn't involve making him a hypocrite like starlight was earlier. Twilight agrees and summons sunset, who ignores Discords involvement just to yell at Twilight. Every other time she was yelled at, it was because she did something new that was terrible. Here I don't want to see it happen for something she was already scolded for. For some stupid reason Sunset wants Twilight to also bring back the Dazzlings, despite not being officially reform and the risk that they could rise up in power. Nope they must come too because there can't be reasonable exceptions to things. You decide to have Twilight secretly plot to erase everyone's memories making her apparent new leaf meaningless. I'm done. If your attempt was to make me hate Twilight. Too bad you failed. I am still sympathetic towards her and am actually rooting for her, despite not planning on reading any more of this.
Well, I actually do wish you luck despite starting to hate this fic now and if you do work on another story in the future I will check it out. Sorry, I tried to stay despite of the things that annoyed me, but I just can't anymore. So long and thanks for a story I could ponder about and actually enjoy for quite a bit.
10900296
A world filled with magic. There could be countless other ways for them to gain power. Heck they can even find other villains to team up with, I rather not take the risk, but I guess that's just me. Not to mention a way to repair them.
you know by the end of this i'd be shocked if twilight even kept her wings because she is starting to prove she is not worthy of being an alicorn.
10900306
it would be like a Unicorn without their horn, the gems were their focus, and unlike with Tempest who retained a method of releasing that power given the inch or so of horn she had left, their focus was completely destroyed
10900328
And if they find a way to repair them? Not to mention countless magical items they could find. Again I rather not take the risk that is still there, despite how slim it might be.
10900330
as i understand it...the gems were chaos magic...cant be repaired and at best can only be replaced with something similar but totally different...
10900346
which would still make them a threat, exactly my point. Even if they weren't it's still contrived for Sunset to bring them up. Why would she want them to come back? Out of spite?
10900352
shes pushing...making Twi work harder...as well as setting her up for the inevitable fall.
yes the Dazzlings MIGHT become a threat in the future, might not...after all, the only place they could possibly replace their gems is with Discord as he is the ONLY source of Chaos Magic in Equestria and i dont see him as deliberately putting Fluttershy at risk from anything he does. at this point, the biggest threat to the Ponies is Twilight herself, even Tia isnt that bad yet... in any event, bringing the Dazzlings back is a risk, but its a minor one at best, and they may not want to go back either.
10900374
Better to prevent a minor threat from being a thing at all than to let them rise up. If that's her intentions than That's wrong of Sunset to do that no matter how much a minor threat they might be. That might be the out of story explanation, but there needs to be a solid in story one for it to make sense. Even if they decide not to, we don't know that and still shouldn't take the risk. At any rate I made my point, which you agreed to, so I think we're done. At this point we are talking in circles. I think it's best to get this fic out of my mind now.
10900381
really? ur going with the 'stop minor threats before they become major one' route? u do know that that attitude would leave any world a devastated and lifeless wasteland right? everything that lives could be considered a 'minor' threat in some way, shape or form, so the only way to keep them all in check is get rid of them right? nuke the entire planet from orbit since its the only way to be sure...im sorry if im mistaken, but thats the way ur coming across about the Dazzlings, when the risk is so minor that its not even worth talking about...might as well treat the Bar of Alliance member races the same way huh? Dragons and Yaks could be quite large threats...to say nothing of Changelings or even Hyppogryphs...thats the kind of attitude that got Ponies in this jam in the first place!
10900391
The problem is the Dazzlings have a history of being threats while others don't. It's that history that I feel is a reason to not let them come back or if you do keep an eye on them. If we prevent these group of people who have been threats in the past from being in the future, even if they might be minor ones, than we must prevent everyone else, since they could as well, despite most not having the same history. Yeah sorry it shouldn't work that way. We can prevent the Dazzlings from doing it while not doing the same to others. Just because we do it to one group doesn't automatically mean we do it to everyone else. That's my main issue with this whole bring Dazzlings back thing. Look up the slippery slope fallacy. It's what you are doing here.
10900409
they were a threat while they had their magic and their focus gems...theyve lost both...i am simply taking ur own arguments to their logical conclusion. preventing every possible threat, no matter how minor, is impossible...and again, Dragons have a history of raiding Pony villages, Yaks declare war at the drop of a hat...it never ends from there until u reach total paranoia...
10900459
No you are taking them to their most extreme, when you don't have to! The thing you aren't getting is that there are circumstances where you have to treat different groups of people differently. The dazzlings are villains who we haven't seen get redeem while everyone else has been shown to be willing to live in peace. When did I ever imply to get rid of all threats completely? I haven't. I was simply focusing on the Dazzlings. It's you who is taking my point to that extreme when you again don't have to! Just because you can't prevent all threats completely doesn't mean you can't prevent some of it. That's the kind of attitude that annoys me. I will never own a trillion dollars at a time so I shouldn't bother to make money. No, focus on what you can do, instead of trivializing it, by saying it won't matter since we can't get rid of 100% of it. Every little bit still helps and we should still do so what we can.
10900328
What is going on with superethan2 he’s having a rant here anyway? I’m just want to enjoy a good story for once.
10900483
You still can. Don't let me stop you from enjoying this story. We are just having a minor argument, which I think is about over. We are going in circles anyway and it's not really productive. Dependent on how Night_Moon60606 responds if he does, I might just stop and let it go.
10900150
Damn lol
10900243
The sirens originated from Equestria. With the ruling for all creatures to remain in the world, they are from, that would include heroes and villains.
10900467
i applogize if i upset u, but that is how u were coming across to me, the threat posed by the Dazzlings is negligible at best, so i didnt see the point in panicking about it when their threat level isnt even in the same range as a rampaging teenaged Dragon. Allegro might be a planner, but so is Twi and she tends to do it better when shes not off her rocker. Aria is strong, but so r a large number of Earth Ponies and they have the capacity to be much stronger. Sonata is even less of a threat, shes silly and likes tacos...it would take years for them to become a credible threat again...if they ever did in the first place. the Member Races of the Bar of Alliance would accept them, offer care, supplies, a home...would there be a transition? sure, it goes without saying...but the threat is manageable, and no more dangerous than a foal throwing a tantrum...
10900493
im male BTW...thanks for that...
10900502
Ruling? What are you talking about? Are you telling me there is some law or judicial order for every species to return. When was this? All Discord did was make it a condition for Sunset to return and she in turn brought up the Dazzlings. What ruling are you talking about? Even so I still stand by what I said. Giving them the chance to be threats in the future is just stupid. They were banished for a reason and even if they are powerless now, doesn't mean that will stay.
10900506
Sorry I typed that without thinking. Your username made me think you were female, when I shouldn't have assumed. As for your other response to me, Maybe they are maybe they aren't. I don't know I still rather not take the risk. I think it's best we just disagree and move on.
10900510
I'm going to explain the ruling in the next chapter I'm currently writing with a bit more detail. Right now, the Dazzlings are powerless so it's just minor when if or when they go to Equestria.
10900517
Fine, I guess if they will also be watched just in case I can let it slide. Also, if that is your attempt to get me to continue reading, nice try. I guess I will just let this go.
10900525
It's your choice. I'm not forcing you. That's the best part. You choose what you read. You don't like it, read another story. I'm going to continue with the direction I'm going with cause I'm having fun with it. So have fun reading another story. Your explanation will not discourage me. Have a good day, SuperEthan2. Hope you have a great week as well.