This is based on the movie Fury.
Applejack as Wardaddy (But in the story I'll call her Warmommy, since AJ is a mare.)
Sandbar as Norman
Smolder as Grady Travis
Ocellus as "Bible"
Spike as Gordo
6 years after World War II broke out, the Allies (Hippogriffs, Ponies, Changelings, Yaks, Dragons) are making their final push in the Griffonian theater. A battle-hardened Army sergeant named Applejack "Warmommy" , leading a Sherman tank and a five-creatures crew, undertakes a deadly mission behind enemy lines. Hopelessly outnumbered, outgunned and saddled with an inexperienced soldier in their midst, Warmommy and her crew face overwhelming odds as they move to strike at the heart of Nazi Griffonia.
Chapters (3)
This is amazing, my favourite movie and my favourite series mixed together perfectly, i hope you enjoy writing this as much as im going to enjoy reading it
Thank you for supporting my new story! I'll make sure to update it often. But since I got classes sometimes story will have to wait.
awesome story cant wait for the next chapter
Probably should up the rating to teen at minimum. Seeing as the source material wasn't exactly a "family picture" to begin with.
Crossover with the Fury Movie heh? I like the idea. To be honest, I was planning on making the story about this too but I had no idea what the story will tell. But you did it! And if you need some help, don't hesitate to PM me brother! I'll always got your back!
Thank you bud!
war make men mad keep it up
Think it might be a good idea if you fixed these and run it through a Google docs spell check.
Ps not sure if you specified the tank as a normal Sherman with a 75 mm or a firefly like in the movie
If it's a firefly well you could be historically accurate and have it kill a tiger easily even from the front, or change the gun to a 75 which would i believe act similar in the movie.
Or get a bigger enemy tank like maybe a king tiger.
This critic is purely for informational purposes
Late war Germany had less heavy anti tank guns thus they used panzerfausts, which I'm glad you know the name
A panzerfaust has a penetration of about 200 millimeters.
A sherman has up to 170 millimeter depending on variant
In comparison a tiger one has 120 millimeters of frontal armour
So saying german guns punch through them is kinda wrong rather german panzerfaust cut through them like butter because the panzerfaust was super effective at causing a fire from a ammo fire.
But now you know.
Like the story so far
The Sherman in the story is a M4A3E8
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Ah nice, so they're the one with the 76 and the wet ammo storage system
They're one of the cooler variants
Wow you sure know a lot about ww2, are you an expert?
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I would even dare to say that tank is one of my favorites, along with the Sherman Firefly, T-34 and Stug-III.
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Stug-III is cool and all but my favorite has got to be
The BOB SEMPLE
Is the dialogue C&P'd from somewhere else? Not only is the dialogue word for word identical to the film at points, there are several instances where the character names are wrong (there are quite a few cases where you put Norman when you presumably meant Sandbar).
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Hmm, I guessed I kinda rushed in my writing, and yes I copied some of the phrases from the movie Fury, cuz it sounds more cool and realistic. Well Fury is a great movie, so why not use some words from it?
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I totally understand, but it does lead to some OOC moments. Part of the difficulty of adapting a film is ensuring it makes sense in the new setting, and some bits of Ocellus' dialogue sound more like something Smoulder or Gallus would say.
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Yeah, but war can change a person's heart and personality. At first Ocellus is scared as hell,but as time goes by, bloody battles changed her.
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I was more thinking of this line, which doesn't make sense when spoken by a female character. ln the original film, this line works given that Swan (I think it's Swan) is male-but Ocellus isn't. This is what I was referring to when adapting a story from one setting to another.
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So what do you want me to do?
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Write your own dialogue? I've adapted two films in my stories, and in both cases wrote my own dialogue that fitted the scenario but at the same time was in character.
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Ok sure
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No worries.
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Thanks bud
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Good luck.
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How bout "break an arm" ? Ya know, break a leg.
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Are we in a theatre now?
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Nvm
By the way you sound experienced, any tips on writing a good story?
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PM me.
awesome new chapter my friend keep it up cant wait for the next chapter
By the way I rewrote Chapter two. Check it out, I added a short story in it.
awesome rewrite keep it up
I'm loving this story and when I saw that they will be fighting other tanks I was so happy.