Fiery Passions

Rainbow Dash can't help but notice how hard the Leader of the Wonderbolts works, and decides to force the issue of her getting some time away from paperwork, and duties, and just relax. Spitfire of course is against this, but goes along to see just exactly what this "Appleloosa" place has to offer.

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Chapter 1: Vacation · 21st Jul 2020 · 2,324 words
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Chapter 2: Horse Feathers! · 22nd Dec 2020 · 3,172 words
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Chapter 3: A Wild Goose chase · 19th May 2021 · 2,079 words
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Wonderboltfan10

Wonderboltfan10 #1 · Jul 22nd, 2020 · · · Chapter 1: Vacation ·

nice job! It is a great story

Halira

Halira #2 · Jul 22nd, 2020 · · · Chapter 1: Vacation ·

“Alright. Five minutes. Make it quick.” She groaned. Spitfire muttered under her breath. This had better be important. She felt the sweat dripping down her face. Ponies don’t realize how hard my job is. Rainbow Dash needs to learn.

Might want to italicize the last two sentences here to indicate they are a thought. Otherwise looks like you slipped from third to first person at random.

“Come on PLEASE. I’ll never ask for anything ever again.” spoke Rainbow Dash, attempting to make her best pout face. Her lips curled downwards, eyes widening, batting her eyelashes at her, going so far as to kneel in front of her.

Okay, that's an adorable image.

InfinityShark96

InfinityShark96 #3 · Jul 22nd, 2020 · · · Chapter 1: Vacation ·

“Aww, come on Rainbow don’t be such a stick in the mud.” Applejack smiled, nuzzling her affectionately.

Well that confirms weather there was going to be any Appledash in this fic.

Anywho, my first Spitfire focused story, and so far I like where this going. An original pairing with some Appledash in the background? I’ll be watching this one. 😁

CobaltLegion

CobaltLegion #4 · Aug 6th, 2020 · · · Chapter 1: Vacation ·

Good job so far. looking forward to further updates. ^^

InfinityShark96

InfinityShark96 #5 · Aug 22nd, 2020 · 1 · · Chapter 1: Vacation ·

Any chance of an update for this soon? Have been patiently waiting...

InfinityShark96

InfinityShark96 #6 · Dec 22nd, 2020 · 3 · · Chapter 2: Horse Feathers! ·

Well, better an eventual update then none at all!

ExaltedFiction

ExaltedFiction #7 · Dec 23rd, 2020 · · · Chapter 2: Horse Feathers! ·

Top stuff mate!

Halira

Halira #8 · May 19th, 2021 · · · Chapter 3: A Wild Goose chase ·

Been a while since last update.

Greatazuredragon

Greatazuredragon #9 · May 20th, 2021 · · · Chapter 1: Vacation ·

And everyone wears hats for some reason. I hope we won’t need any hats. I didn’t bring any.”
“Not going to wear a pie hat?” questioned Spitfire, in a clearly sarcastic tone.
“Hey! That’s actually a really good idea. But where on earth do you find a pie hat?” questioned Soarin, as he seemed to ponder on that thought.

That one friend that doesn't understand sarcasm.