Coco's life hasn't changed much since leaving Suri, she's now working at the local theater, helping make costumes for the upcoming play. But, there's a lot more behind the curtain.
Pre-read by: Snow Quill,Undome Tinwe, Decaf, AshleyNoble, and others
Edited by: Azure Notion (He's my new editor, give him love everyone.)
Art by: https://www.deviantart.com/drawntildawn/art/Coco-Pommel-671178976
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Very nice job. Especially with developing Coco. I liked how she still has some issues caused by her previous situation, but is working on them and improving.
The trauma of being controlled and manipulated is real, and you have aptly conveyed that in the development of Coco. Nice work.
What a lovely story. I really liked the structure and pacing, with the retelling of the episode followed by two distinctly different scenes and some great dialogue - and I think this will resonate with anypony who's had to get out from under a manipulative and selfish person, in work or personal life, and had trouble adjusting. Nice work
Recounting the events of Rarity Takes Manehattan at the start felt unnecessary, but the rest of the story was quite nice. I hadn't considered that Coco would be unused to talking breaks. Makes me think of a game developer AU for her, lol.
Hello, a review to your story has been posted. I hope you find it helpful.
Hello there!
I do appreciate this work very much but I am here to say sorry that I have already do a translastion without your permission.I am here to express my sincere apology for not having access to a Fimfiction account.
You can check the translated version here: https://fimtale.com/t/23239
And if you claim,I will delete the translated version immediately.
But sorry to say that I will not have access to your message in two weeks.
Apologize again.