So far things are looking pretty interesting! Curious to see what happens.

I agree it's hard to come up with rhyming lines for Zecora, so good call. And I like how you incorporated Potion Nova into the mix. She may be good with potions, but if she's not careful they can have very strange consequences.

Okay, things are getting interesting. Hope that the next chapter will be even more interesting.

Just then, the two notice the horse creatures spreading their mighty wings and fly away, the flaps unleashing gusts of wind that shook the screen. The girls also get to see the full display of horse creatures' wings, the purple eyed one had wings like that of an owl, the yellow eyed one were akin to a swan's, and the most shocking of all, the blue eyed one's resembled a bat's.

I first misread this paragraph that the description of Luna's wings suddenly changed from owl to bat, then I realised that it was Twilight who had the owl wings. Aside from that, doesn't this technically make Luna part Thestral?

Also, will Cadence be an Alicorn in this story?

Now this is an interesting development!

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Aside from that, doesn't this technically make Luna part Thestral?

I thought It would be interesting to give her bat wings since some fan arts of her usually depicts her having bat wings.

Also, will Cadence be an Alicorn in this story?

Not as an alicorn, no.

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How so?

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Not as an alicorn, no.

Bummer.😑

This was a beyond fun and awesomely chill chapter with a beyond epic hype induceing end. I hope Nova jions the harem to.

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I just find it interesting that Lyra and Bon Bon were the ones to pick up the trail of Celestia and Luna before Spike did.

I mean it makes sense given their obsession with the supernatural, but I do find it interesting that they found the sister's trail before they met Spike and he had to worry about hiding them or something...

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Bare in mind, this is before Spike runs into the alicorns.

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That's what I'm saying: I just find it interesting that it wasn't the main character that first discovered proof of the other two main characters. You don't see a lot of that in most stories and I respect you doing something different.

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Thanks, but yeah I'm trying to take things nice and slow right now. I want to establish what life Spike has and the kind of world he lives in.

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Good choice, you should never rush a good story!

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And don't forget, Twilight is with Celestia and Luna as well.

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Oh, right!

Nice reference to the healing potion ingredients from harry potter wizards unite and the minecraft potion ingredients. Also understand the changes from dragon liver to stradodon liver for obvious reasons.

I know that Phoenix!!!!

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When the chapter eventually comes for the Alicorns to reveal themselves after rescuing Spike, wouldn't their appearance be instantly made public, and not just to him? They're the size of apartment buildings, according to your description.

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Don't worry, I have an idea for that.

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Can't wait to see it.

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Thanks, so what are your thoughts on the Alicorns being giants?

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Sounds neat. I always enjoy a good giantess scenario

Well this is interesting. Really good stuff and I want to see more.

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Also, is that Unicorn from the beginning supposed to be a romantic interest as well or something?

You'll see.

Final question, I promise, who is Gleaming supposed to be to Spike again?

Gleaming is a R63 Shining Armor. I'm thinking of making their relationship somewhat similar to Kazuya's and Kazumi's from Tsugumomo.

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Mmk. Also, I'm still confused on that, I can't find anything that properly explains it, what with my Wifi acting up still. Can you PM me an explanation maybe?

Update?

"Hey girls." Spike said as he finally showed up. On his plate was a bacon cheeseburger with seasoned curly fries on the side and a Mountain Dew for a drink.

My kind of meal. But I'd replace the curly fries for Chex Mix.

Moar plz?

Here’s you’re review: https://www.fimfiction.net/blog/962211/story-review-4

Please update 🙏

Dead?

is this story in "unofficial hiatus" mode while you're working on your other stories, or is it just slow to get ideas for it?

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A little bit of both if I'm being honest.

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Please sir, may I have some more?