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underrated Drake


Just a regular guy who has very little knowledge on MLP but a lot of creativity.

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Definitely interesting, can't wait to see where this goes!

You actually inspired me to write something similar. Good story my bro, i can't wait to see where this goes.

Nice beginning would like to see more from this

Is the plot set in stone or is it open to the readers on good or evil choices

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It's open, I need as many ideas as I can get

Pretty good, liking the mystery so far

I'm definitely going to follow this.

Ok now this is amazing you have good talent in writing a story with spike you actually motivated me to return to my writes you legit are an amazing writer and i hope this story continues

Great story definitely a follow. I can't wait for the next chapter.

you should add facesitting

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Then one vote he sucker punches garble though a wall

I like this story and how it's progressing so far. Consider me a fan and your story in my favorites.

“DUDE!!! WHAT DID YOU DO?” said one of the lackeys as they went over to the edge to see Spike free fall

1) Even Garble's lackeys think he went too far.

2) Spike seems to have been born at the shallow end of the magic gene pool, in a society that treats the weak as expendables, no less. Troubleshoes wasn't this unlucky in Canon!

3) It honestly worries me how jaded Spike is with his position, to the point that he simply stands there, takes whatever beating comes for him, refuses to let his friends stand up for him because he thinks he's not worth their time and effort, before rinsing and repeating. Is he really that broken to not care that there are at least some people in his life who don't treat him like trash?

Above points aside, I say keep writing this story. I'd like to see how this turns out in future chapters.

I must know where this goes!! It is very, very interesting....Please continue writing this, simply divine story.

Comment posted by Cjpcool deleted Feb 6th, 2021

I like this already keep it up 👍🏾

it realy good keep up the good woke

So he punted garble through a bunch of buildings his sister wants to sleep with him smolder has a crush on him saved cadence shiny and twilght and is about to enter magic school and killed a bunch of barbarians ressercted the dead fully alive hes soooo grounded for that lol

Now Spike is finally getting the respect he's been wanting, and the payback as well. He's met Twilight and her family now, and now he's face to face with one of the strongest magical users ever. I look forward to seeing what she plans to offer him.

Now son I don't mind throwing down these hands but first I need to go see this Caravan.

Really liking the MHA vibes in this story, like how he started off as a loser and is now suddenly on everyone's radar!

Music unavailable on both.

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Music [Cold - Beautiful Life] [Cold - We all love]

One hand he could close the door, jump out the window and roll out like a jailbird's metal ball.
On the other hand, he could not screw up/tower in the tent and take it like a man.

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I like where this is going, continue the great work.

This is like Overlord, One Punch Man, and MHA all rolled into one!

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All thats missing now is a 3yr skip lol

Silvio has met the girls he will no doubt be wooing without even trying. I can't wait to see how he handles his first day

Will Spike have a adorable pet companion as well?

“Ok, sure… I’ll try it with her…” said Spike as he used discerning eye on Twilight

“You’ve got to be kidding me…”

Hopefully, it's nothing negative he's seen in Twilight's background.

I tempted fate, didn't I?

Here is a squad name Dragon Knights, or Dragon Defenders?

I have one "phoenix edge" because bon bon and spike suffered in the past and grew strong from it and edge because they seem to always get out of dodge before the hit just my thoughts try it

Awesome job. Sounds like Twilight and the other six aren't exactly all on friendly terms with each other. And Bonbon was one of those man-hating tsundere types like Motoko Aoyama. Well hopefully after her experience with Spike she'll be extra nicer and possibly romantically attracted.

Ghost because spec ops teams are ment to be ghosts unseen unknown and feared

Absolutely loved the chapter, man. Keep it up!

Oh! Almost forgot...for the team name, how about "Spec Ops: Leviathan"? Kinda sounds cool.

Hmmm, squad name.
How about "Hydra"?

it was your raze

race

What do the characters look like, how old are they? I'm not referring to Spike and the rest of FiM cast, I'm talking about the rest.

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Barbara is 13... all of Spike's classmates are between the edges of 14 and 18... this would be explained later in the fic

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