Flurry Heart gives her grandfather a grand Father's Day.
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Just waiting for it to come out that the vitality spell also reversed his vasectomy~
Random thought: parents in general are less common in fiction than they probably should be, so grandparents are even moreso. Like, as far as canon grand-incest we basically just had Flurry Heart and the Apples until literally the last episode.
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I don't think this ship has been done before.EDIT: I stand corrected.
Oh, Shakespearicles uploaded. Is it Father's Day already?
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The time has come and so have I!
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Fun lil’ ship. Happy (grand) daddy day~!
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So if I nixed that whole 'who's fucking who' monologue?
[EDIT] To be clear, it was never my intention to delete it. I just wanted to be very specific about why something is not liked and how it theoretically could be fixed. Your feedback is a lot more useful that the drive-by down-voters who saw the Flurry Heart tag.
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BTW, this one does have a lovey-dovey ending. Even more so than my usual fare.
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Uh, well... y-yeah, that would go a long way towards me specifically enjoying it more. But for God's sake, don't do that. You have yourself a loyal audience who eagerly devours what you put out. They probably dig that kind of stuff, that complex "Game of Thrones meets House of Cards but with more fucking" scenario. They are your target audience, not me.
Let me put it like this: I'm the type of nerd who likes my brutal, hardcore fucking to be bookended by Lovey-Dovey-Smoochy Land romance. This is why whenever I commission a story it ends up being expensive as shit because I want a lot of romantic build up and cool down. Whereas you—and your 2,721 followers, I might add—are more down with the "casual sex because casual sex/if it feels good do it" shtick. And that's great! Just not my cup of
jizztea.TL:DR, write the story however you damn well please. As I have often said, I'm just some random asshole in a brown hat on the internet.
Anticip....
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Ation.
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I see you. I see what you did there....
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It's rare, but it exists.
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Ponies on a train did this ship already.
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uhhhhhhhhhhhhh yeah it has... just a few weeks ago https://www.fimfiction.net/story/466194/ponies-on-a-train
not that i'm complaining or anything like that lol
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Nice.
The last three digits on that word count, tho...
Well, that was hot. Kinda depressing though.
Soon it's gonna be happy great grandfather's day.
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The Number of the Beast!
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Loved it Shake!
I would have preferred for Flurry to be a bit overwhelmed by her grandpop's endowment (you know me), but I realised that actually didn't fit in the canon of your incest-verse, where inevitably all mares are drawn to the irresistible prowess of Shining Armor's gargantuan genetic lottery trophy.
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Yes, that is an inflexible fact.
Although part of the purpose of this fic was meant as a penance piece to deconstruct a lot of the SparkleCest clopfic tropes, (many of which are mine), where in of all the pairings, Night Light is often getting routinely cucked as the odd one out. Hence the chapter title. So the whole "who's fucking who" dialogue is meant to break that down from the point of view of the pony from the outside. And also to serve as moral leverage to justify the ensuing debauchery, so as an audience, we can root for Night Light finally getting one over on his son and wife.
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Well, yeah, but that's kind of the point. Night Light keeps on getting screwed every which way and ends up... not embittered, but I think unhappy. Velvet is a self centered bitch, Twilight moved on, Cadence was raised by Celestia into a state of vapidness so all encompassing that it threatens to manifest itself like a particularly cake scented Silent Hill, and Shining Armor is a himbo.
Night Light has every reason to be miserable here. The only reason he sticks around is because of the off chance a random close relative needs a cock thrown into them thus giving him another petty victory. In short, he is the same shit different direction of an Incel, IE japanese humor at work
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I root for no such thing
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I wanna be there when Flurry is inevitably added to the harem!
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As always, your writing always manages to be enjoyable, even when it isn't entirely my cup of tea. I enjoyed the tender moments and can'take quit giggling to myself because all that's coming to mind after Night Light's recap is "revengincest." Excellent work.
so the next part when both night and shiny are doing flurry comes out when????
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"In like... a year."
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a grand story Sir thank you.
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Surely you saw that comment coming?
Oh, man, I loved this. So much tasty backstory and casual cheating, and the sex was hot. But my favorite part was how rough and dominant Night Light was with Flurry. I don't know how to write dominant. I can do mean, sure. But this was way better.
Bravo! A fantastic read, good story.
I was unprepared for The gentleness of this story.
I could have used a bit more flurry bitching or inquiry into the cluster fuck that is the sparkle household.
But now I must delve into more nightlight stories.
Interesting little chapter. I wonder how Flurry will feel learning her aunt's her half-sister.
Also, there's some typos you may want to fix.
"inside"
"such"
Delete that.
There should probably be a comma after "you".
"anticlimactic".
And lastly, "he".
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Fixed! Thank you.
Great story. I wish we had a extra chapter. Maybe one that was a hard rutting chapter.
Considering what a whore his wife is, I don't think she'd have a leg on in getting mad at Night for fucking Flurry.
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Yes, that is true.
Just finished it and, even when you mentioned that it's tropes, I felt it's almost an alternate continuation of B.B.F.F.F. trilogy, probably obvious but I'll still point the elephant in the room, whereas this one isn't a happy ending gang-bang-boom-bam, I kind of love this scenario in which everyone knocked everyone up of sheer spite and create more in the process who, by how things go, repeat the family cycle, or dare I say, tradition.
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What can I say? I can't help but write clop with a plot.
Damn nice story clop. Well done
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I think you forgot to add 18 for Twilight, who must've been at least 18 in S6E1.
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Yeah, but Twilight is Night Light's grandfoal.
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Unless you meant to imply Night Light lied when he told Flurry Heart that Twilight is Shining's daughter.
Time to finish this off.
That line is a real bummer since it suggests he really does feel bad about getting cucked.
You got a typo there.
You have another typo.
This simile is a bit of a stretch. Maybe go with "like it was his only source of sustenance"? It's just easier to picture a horn as food than a breathing apparatus, ya feel me?
I can only imagine actually having my eyes roll into the back of my head would be terrifying.
I think Flurry is straying off course! Nah, it's just a typo.
Spoken like the Father of Ponyville's 5th place marathon finisher.
Good thing he didn't have to run upstairs or he might have jammed his dick into the staircase and sustained a potentially life-threatening injury.
And that's going to work? What about his core body temperature? He's running up his electric bill like a MOTHERFUCKER.
Typo. You meant to say 'only'. Another mistake is the missing gap between 'each' and 'other'.
Don't females have different trigger points? Eh, it's not that important. I'm just nitpicking.
Lewdie boop!
Feels like one sentence split in two. I think this is a stylistic choice, like slowing down the narration to one deliberate action at a time but I can't be sure. Probably just me nitpicking again.
Time violation. Change tense.
Excellent simile!
Like, really hard.
Them's good eatin'!
Not the sexiest thing to add to your sex scene but points for realism. There's no way in hell a filly is going to be able to handle a blowjob for a fully-grown and presumably above-average-lengthed stallion.
This right here is a Shakespearacles line. This is what people come to this account to read. Nicely done!
He really is a gangsta if he can make her one!
Gotta love how supportive this guy is. Nice guy foalcon is best foalcon!
I wouldn't know anything about writing something like that.
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Shakes is giving me nothing and loving it. At least there was an ear nibble earlier on...
Typo.
Good story. I'm intrigued by your ability to write easily comprehensible dialogue and perspective with just the bare minimum of narration. It's very much the opposite of how I trained myself to write. I have no issues at all simply filling in the blanks with my own imagination and rarely have to read a single line twice so the chopped-down style flows well, too. The themes aren't entirely to my taste but I knew that going in. The fact I still managed to enjoy it speaks to the quality of the work.
While I did get a good laugh at Jake The Army Guy's normie-tier freakout post, I have to acknowledge the merits of the cucking themes; at the very least it creates a conflict for Night Light so he isn't simply there just to solve Flurry's problems -- that would make him worth no more than the cooler she was messing with earlier. Both had something the other wanted and got what they came for, literally. You earned my upvote, sir.
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> TFW AJ finishes proofreading your story:
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All typos fixed. Thank you for your keen eyes.
I'm pleased that you enjoyed it.
A verility spell too... I hope.