You spelled lose wrong in the description.

Hmm. *Reads checklist for great stories*

1. Dark tag. Check.

2. Romance tag. Check.

3. Luna. Check.

4 Rainbow Dash. Check.

5. Badass Twilight. Hmm only one way to find out!

DEAR GOD THIS WILL BE AWESOME

Huh? What?

In confused... I want chapter 2! :p

Dun dun duuuuuunnnn!

That's the only way I can describe this whole chapter.

welp, another story to keep an eye on, thumbs up for now but I won't fav until really like it and I need more to decide if I do. Chapter 2?

>>11685881168588

Very soon. It's almost done

Can't wait for the next chapter

Much needed explanation coming up next chapter, hooray! Liking the OC's so far, it's good to see some who are kind of "informal" for a change.

>>11694021169402 Second that motion.

>>11698981169898

Thanks I do hope I'm doing well with the various characters, it's always a difficult thing

need.

moar.

ponyfic!

“Does Fluttershy and the others know you ran away?”

-typo

All I can really think of right now is, "Double Rainbow".

That clears up a lot though, I was just a bit confused with her random passing out and stuff. Also, Zecora.

Double rainbow across the sky yea so intense lol>>12140821214082

Aww I was hoping you'd go soardash u know

>>12191751219175

It's mainly a TwiDash story, or will be. There'll be some other romancing, but TwiDash is where the focus will be, at least.

>>12196911219691 actually I don't like any story in which RD is shipped with one of her friends  but I guess I can bear through this for one story just because the plot of the story is extremely interesting

>>12196911219691 Not that kind of plot I'm no clopper

>>12197101219710

Glad to hear it

Want more.

BTW, I'm watching you.

Hmmm

AWESOME!!!!!    

Can't wait for next update

First

Holy Shit!

Wait ... I see a refrence, A manga called Time Guardian, Where people go to a secret time shop and borrow time by giving them something they treasure or something. and they are able to do what they want within that time. Then they go back to reality. and Etc. It made me think that Rainbow is kinda in that same situation here, where if she reunites with her double she'll die 2 months later, it kinda makes me think of the aspect that her death would be paying for the time she borrowed.

Kinda cool right??

Also. DAMN! i have respect for that Eden lady, Making Rbd ( Well a part of her) Breakdown into tears like that!

>>11687841168784 I can't resisit saying this but.... I F*yay*G LOVE YOUR AVATAR PIC! It's so adorable!

>>12757631275763

I'm not familiar with it, but sounds interesting. And thanks

This is getting real interesting. I like the concept Eden brings up, of the "most probable" future, not set in stone or anything. When you posted that cover image first, I thought Eden would be the Big Bad, and maybe she is because I don't know, but she's pretty neutral right now. That's cool to read.

Sooo.....Rainbow is 9 years old and Twi and AJ are 10?

>>12850921285092

Yes. I like to assume they age like real horses do

Wow! First Story i have seen that there is two sets of elements! That are the exact same as the ones in the show! This is really getting intresting.

Lol two sets of elements one for big battles against evil the other pair. Great fashion accessory

Oh god, giant spider crabs? The horror, the horror!

>>13251421325142

Can't tell if you're being sarcastic

>>13254921325492

Nope, not sarcasm. I'm just not fond of spiders, especially not giant ones, hairy ones. Ever played LIMBO?

>>13255821325582

Can't say I have, but I know the feeling

Hello!  Love your story Ad.  It is Synisster from Giant.    Keep it up.  So any good dark stories I am eating them up.  Btw I dunno if I said before but awesome using the Shadowbolts.  So much headcanon with what I am reading on this site.

>>13535161353516

Thanks

*bows*  Welcome M'Lady.

Wow.  That a twist.  I didn't expect to see that coming.  I hope Blaze isn't a Changling.  RD deserves to be happy and..somehow this two felt right for her.  Ohhh I am loving this story.  Ty so very much.

Oh shit rainbow you woke up a dragon

>>13598961359896

Heh, we'll see And you're welcome

Hmm...Not Twidash? can't complain though, still a good read even if it doesn't have my favorite pairing.

>>13641761364176

It is intended to be a TwiDash story, that relationship is just taking its time to develop properly

AWESOME!! As always

Keep it up

FIRST!!!!    Seriously why do I do that?

*claps*  Nice.  Wonderful spin on everything.  Me Gusta

ow... good, very good

>>14185631418563

Thank you

I heartily approve.  Dash is torn in two on what to do.  Could it be she can be free?  Tune in next time and I can stop this rhyme.

Hhmmmm Rainbiw Dash fucked a Changling

One question. Was it good??

>>14204691420469

Hehe

>>14233761423376

What a thing to ask

Of course it was good.  I am sure of it.  Keep them coming Deadly.  I have a ticket for the emotional roller coaster called fan fics.  

>>14235921423592 just wandering

Oooh, interesting premise. At first I was kinda like, eh, Flutterdash, Rainbow running off and getting hurt in the Everfree, pretty run of the mill, if quite well written... and then, bam! crazy undead-y shadowbolty multiple-realities/clone-y shenanigans! Needless to say, I'm hooked. Well, only one thing to do now, onward!

Ooh, cool explanation. That explains a bunch. And this is Twidash? Awesome! I was hoping it would be. Onward to the next chapter!

How does this not have more likes and views? I'm really liking this - it can be hard to find a good adventure story that portrays the characters so well and gets me this interested. And RD really needs to avert that crap-tastic probable future, or I predict womanly tears will be shed in great abundance. Keep up the great work

Well the crap's definably hitting the fan now, isn't it? Two sets of Elements? The hell did you do, Rainbow? And possible changeling presence? Hmm... On an unrelated note, I dunno if you've ever heard of the character, but your Frostfell reminds me a bit of Deryn Sharp from Scott Westerfeld's Leviathan trilogy. Anywho, I'm off to finish the rest of the released chapters before bed, if I can manage it. Onward!

Well holy crap on a cracker, RD can't seem to catch a break, can she? And ew, she totally banged a changeling. I figured when it happened so quickly, and when Blaze skipped to the "love me" line that something was a little off, but dang. And what's this, a dragon encounter perhaps? Changeling dragon? I have no idea. Anywho, onward!

I really like the world building you do in this chapter, its a cool take on the whole Elements/Nightmare Moon/Discord thing. And Luna used the moon as her Horcrux? Take that Voldy, even with seven of them you ain't got nothing on her It seems like every time one side or character gets established as either good or evil, even more happens to throw everything on its head and disrupt the balance. Oh, and incoming Twidash! The tail-twirling was pretty adorable. Anywho, looks like I've got one more chapter left before I'm all caught up: Onward!

Oh, haha! Now I get the joke Frosty made at the beginning of the fic "...keep your doodle in your pants." Pfft, clearly I'm easily amused. On a serious note though, Dash is in for some trouble. Her Loyalty is gonna be cracked right down the middle. And I can't help but be intrigued as to what's gonna happen to the separate ships once Rainbow reconnects with herself. If it ends up happening at all, of course. Well, I suppose I'm caught up now. Keep up the awesome work - can't wait for the next chapter

>>14369141436914

I wish it had more views too It can be hard to draw attention to a story, and sadly it has been rejected twice so far by EqD  for silly comma errors I'm still trying to decide if I'm going to resubmit it

>>14369831436983

I'm not familiar with the Leviathan trilogy, but maybe I'll look it up. The Wee Free Men by Pratchett gave me some good material for her accent, though.

>>14372361437236

Thanks! I'm glad you like the story, and your comments were fun to read. I love comments

Dammit Deadly why are you so good.  Enjoying the slow burn in romance between Dash and Twi.  It is fitting.  I do want to know more about Eden and I want that Dash to be with her.  Man this is going to be wild.  I now have things to think about.  A lot of things.

>>14502761450276

Yup, I'm just that good

Indeed you are.  *bows*

Haha Twilights coughing up blood

Well crap. The shenanigans never ceases, does it? Hope Twilight gets better, and I'm interested to see what's up with these duplicate Elements of Harmony. And now Dash knows Twilight's available Another great chapter, can't wait for more

Okai my first reaction was :

<put the volume on max>

BOUHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHA TAKE THAT CHANGELING, RAINBOW DASH DON'T GO OUT WITH TRAITOR

<put the volume on normal>

hum, hum,  I feel better now, I just hope that RD will not give another chance to a OC changeling( or even a changeling), I'm not again OC just hating

when they romance the Mane Six.( make stop reading a fics 90% of the time)

I waiting for more TwiDash moment

But when was a time I didn't.

So long

Cédric

I differ fform Cedric.  I hope Dash hooks up with the 'ling.  It is very different and they seem to care for Dash.  The swerve with Cafe was nice.  All in all super chapter!

>>15400761540076

Plenty more TwiDash to come, no worries there

>>15403591540359

Glad to hear it. We'll see what comes of this whole thing

>>15400761540076 I second this motion! We demand more Twidash!

>>15403591540359 I agree with you I hope Dash hooks up with the Changling too.  It's something that hasn't been done before

Well I like Twi/Dash   But i aslo like Dash/ling  

But which ones better?

There's only one way to find out

FIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIGGGGGGHHHHHTTTTTT!!!!!

>>11360271136027

Note: "Baddass Rainbow Dash" is not a requirement of a great story because Department of Redundancy Department.

.....should i read? i want to but..i have been burned to many times..please somone give me a synopsis i really want to know if i should read this

blue skies: hmmmmm hmmmmmm twidash huh? hmmmm but i like that cat god thingy a lot...  blue skies is intrueged but will this story make me burn alive again? it took my body hours to regenerate last time i read a fic

me:blue skies just read the damn fic

blue skies: naw id rather get a leathal injection of hydrocloric acid in your story than risk reading another one

Me: blue skies you die in my story why the hell are you scared of reading another one

blue skies: I COME BACK!....don't I?

me: yes.....but still

blue skies :*runs away YOU SHALL NEVER TAKE ME ALIVE....OR DEAD FOR THAT MATTER

Er...how do you pronounce the title?  Two?  ill? Aye-Aye?

Hm, you have my attention.

Into the stack of stories I should probably eventually read it goes!

I really like Doodle as a character so far, but...

That name is one of the worst of all time. Seriously, it's one of those words that sounds awful, even in my head. It's up there with 'gonorrhea.'

Eh, that's my trivial bitching anyway. Love the story so far!

>>15522191552219

Two is the way to say it

>>15542711554271

It is an awful name. Understandable that he himself hates is, right? Personally I think Doodlebug is better than just Doodle, at least a little. I cringe every time I write "Doodle" in the story, which is why you may notice I try to avoid writing his name

Is there a previous story to this one? I couldn't help but notice that the title is 'II'

>>15553201555320

No, the title is due to how lots of things come in pairs in this story (that's also why it's not "2" or "two" but a pair of Is). It's a story about pairs, even pairs of pairs in the case of the romances. There isn't an "I" and wont' be a "III" either

I think I missed it somewhere... I only saw Celestia and Luna get two wishes each...

>>15699841569984

They got three but Luna only mentioned what two of them were. Either they still have one left each, or Luna didn't say what they spent their last wish on.

Hmmm... interesting. That little twist at the end totally got me. I was like, why would she kill a pony? And then bam, changeling. I kinda like Dash and Doodle () together, so long as they get more development as a couple (if it were to happen). I just don't know how it would work if both Dashes got shipped and then they have to come together again. Hoping the whole war/disaster/mane 6 death thing can be averted, but I don't like the idea of them giving up the Elements of Harmony. I don't know why, it just feels wrong somehow. Anywho, another excellent chapter - Keep up the awesome work

Yeah a bit late for that Tia

Have a Telegram

Sounds like to deal with Eden you should follow the same rules as dealing with Fae!

Never say thank you, for that implies debt. Never agree to any deals. Never break the rules of hospitality. If they offer you a wish, run as fast as you can.

Good chapter!

I think they will eventually give Eden the "fake" real elements and keep their own copy. Sounds logical if thats all she wants. Both sides get what they want, but im just speculating

>>15699841569984 maybe luna didn't say there 3rd wishes

Another great chapter! I really don't know how things are going to work out. Its hard to know what to make of Eden, either. She's usually benevolent, but kind of tricky as well. Her interests are always at the top of the agenda... Oh, and loved Dash's taste testing Twi's food - it was pretty adorable. Still loving this, and am eagerly awaiting the next chapter - at your convenience, of course.

>>16235631623563

Dash is best loyally paranoid taste testing pony

>>16121021612102

She certainly will be tricky to deal with, but if anypony can, it's probably Twilight, right?

>>16132061613206

Can not confirm or deny anything

>>15447101544710 dash/ling? you ship dash with asians? thats new

This story is just too interesting.

Can't wait for another update.

I am curious.  What is she seeing?  Ohhh I am liking this.  Please more.

Damn cliffhanger

Good story... damn cliffhangers.

GAAHH! DAMN CLIFFHANGERS!!

Great story loving it so far probably gonna die waiting for the next chapters

Duuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuude!!  Epic.  Man Flix and Blaze are ina pickle.  I am liking them a whole lot.

>>17514241751424

I'm glad to hear that I try to make them likable and down-to-earth. OCs are always tricky business

I applaud you simply because.  I can see these two changeling becoming more then just side characters.  Again thanks!

I have no idea what to say to this

>>17518621751862

Is that good or bad?

>>17519971751997 the first

Kill them.