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Around ten years have passed since the final events of Tamed. A lone Pegasus, Fyreburst, meets with a mysterious contact about the whereabouts of a pony he lost many years ago. In his search, he meets up with a retired celebrity who quickly grows attached to his cause. The two search for answers as fate itself becomes their greatest friend...and their fiercest enemy.

DISCLAIMER: This is a sequel to Tamed so not having read it beforehand may leave some confusion concerning character behavior and plot elements. I would recommend reading the first story before continuing with this one.

Editor: Vertorm

Chapters (8)
Comments ( 110 )

this is getting quite mysterious...please continue

I cannot wait to read this story! I have not even read the first but I know that I will very soon. Keep up the great writing! You have earned another follower in me!

(Joke) Alt. Title: Killing In The Tamed II: Time Marches On For The Electric Boogaloo

I wanted to make a Fame joke, but that was both too easy and hard.

Hi. Your cover pic caught my eye as it is one of my favorite Rainbow Dash pics.
I regret to inform you that your source is incorrect.
The OP of that thread is obviously an art stealing fraud.
Here is the proof:
This is the actual original source for your cover pic: http://myuse.deviantart.com/art/All-the-colours-of-Loyalty-263282921. Neither of the 2 versions of this pic in the thread are posted from DA. And you will see on the artist Myuse's page there is another pic in a similar art style but that is it.
This is the original source for the other pic the OP claims to have drawn: http://lpscandy2003.deviantart.com/art/my-rainbow-dash-drawing-3-293460357 This is a completely different deviant. However, the pic in thread is posted from this DA. However the DA account is for a female, and the MLP Online account is for a male.

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Wow, thank you. I just blindly sourced it from where I found it, but I went ahead and made the changes.

Thanks again for pointing that out. It's a pretty amazing piece of art. I don't want to praise the wrong person.

I just want to say that the first one mindfucked me

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No problem, glad to help, congratulations on your feature.

20 likes and 3 dislikes and you got featured? That has to be a new record! :pinkiegasp:

The truth is... I clicked this story cause of the awesome rainbow dash pic. Lets check out the prequal then!

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Well, hopefully you'll enjoy reading it. If not...then you've found a cool picture of RD. :rainbowwild:

I'm here for the Rainbow Dash story pic, nobody make any sudden movements, this will all go quick, and you can move on with your lives!

Aaah, my brain, need more information to piece together this timeline. I loved the original Tamed, just finished reading it again as a refresher in preparation for this one popping up a few hours ago.
I await more. :twilightsmile:

At first you had my curiosity but now you have my attention.

Am I also correct in assuming the Time Paradox Twilight created in Tamed did something to her previous self before the storm when she found RD?

omg... how in Celestia's mane did I get so damn excited about this? Seriously, I felt chills crawling over me when I read the details at the end.

Okay, now this has me seriously confused.

I'm assuming your universe follows canon up to the events of Tamed, and then deviates... quite wildly.

My problem is that Twilight went back in time to the moment she fell from the cloud, or slightly after, whatever. And then 'died' there, or ceased her own existence, whatever. But that can't have changed events leading up to that happening, if it had, it may not have happened at all and would be reality-altering. The event you described was basically the cutting-off of a timeline so that it could have different events take place, it was not a retro-active thing, meaning it did not affect Twilight's past up to that point

What I'm trying to say is that Twilight should have lived her life up to that day and then effectively died then.

And my question is thus: Why does there appear to be an alternate version of her unless you believe in reincarnation?

Anyway, I'm not expecting any spoilers, I just had to say it because it was making my brain hurt and I wanted to try and wrap my head around it, something I've probably done a horrible job of.

Anyway!.

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I'm glad you are enjoying it this much. I'm as excited about it as you are.

2416853 though I'm a little bit sad still about Twilight from the last story; my curiousity went over 9000 when I heard that bit from Red (ya going to call him Red gonna fight about it? j/k :pinkiehappy:) though I somehow can't help but to think about Scootaloo in some weird way from earlier :rainbowderp: but hey, time can tell all things. :pinkiesmile:

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I'd say you've done a nice job wrapping your head around it.

ahh! it hurts my head! and twilight better come back or i'll never forgive you!

When is the next chapter coming out?

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Very soon. I try to keep it every three days. This was just posted today so it will be a while.

FUCK! this is so confusing but i CAN'T STOP READING!

Honeytiger is so confused Honeytiger is putting all of the confused looking faces!:applejackconfused::applejackunsure::derpyderp1::derpyderp2::rainbowderp::rainbowhuh::twilightoops:

Going to have to disagree with a majority of the people here, the story feels all over the place and I can't stand it; I really don't feel like I'm getting a good grip on whats going on in the text because it keeps jumping from to different places so abruptly and frequently.

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I felt I was being a bit jumpy and incoherent at the start. I seem to start with the notion that a story should begin a bit wild and then calm down and collect itself. I know it's not the most professional or correct way to write it. I was planning to slow it down in the following chapters...now I'll definitely make sure of it.

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I totally understand where you're coming from, I'll probably feel better about the earlier chapters once the later chapters come around and bring more coherence to the story.

Hold up, why did everyone forget about twi? Last I checked she fell if dash's cloud house to her death. Did everyone just ignore the corpse?

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Ah, dammit. :facehoof: Nice catch. I thought I put that in there. It's there now in the first section. I meant to explain that she never found her body. It just slipped my mind.

This story is probably one of the best I've ever read so far. <3

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I wonder if anypony else thinks so...

2455289 Are you kidding? NOPONY can love this story more than me!!! :flutterrage:
*like* *favourite* *watch*

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