[HiE] A human wakes, finding he isn't the species he fell asleep as in a place he does not recognise, gear scattered around.
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Huh, so we're not doing the "try and bluff my way through an alien culture" game? Nifty.
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Not that I don't like where this is going, but I think that would have added to the plot. Though, actually justifying his position may have been hard, given he had no idea where he was.
I'm liking this. I'll be tracking this.
I found this story and I already like it. I wonder who jack gets with romantically... at least, I hope it's jack who gets with someone considering there is a romance tag on this story. Keep up the awesome work!
Contacts 50 yards, Hostile.
Contacts 50 yards, Nonhostile.
Contacts hostile, 2 KIA, 1 WIA, Other hostiles retreated.
Making contact with 3 Contacts, Nonhostile.
That cover art is wicked good!
Interesting, i will watch your work with pleasure, it sure contains promise to be amazing
already got this in my tracking. can't wait for more. :)
Tracked and liked.
Nicely written. Good cover art, too. Sadly, idiotic friends lead to demises.
Amazing, love me a good "soldier in equestria with military gear" fic, aren't enough good ones out there that get updates.
Good Luck!
Damn that is a big backlog right there. Going to be looking forward to the future chapters!
This is very good, hard to find a good Soldier in Equestria story that isn't dead or wack, I shall track this and look forward to this
I’m really enjoying this so far, I hope you continue it.
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Already have chapters backed up and ready!
birb boy is hangry.
This. I look forward to this.
This has potential. I look forward to watching it progress.
More please
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:o
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Nice Nice
Slow down, your progression just rushed through plot points with little payoff.
Well Commander, this looks like another great start for one of your awesome stories. But I do agree with some of the others, it is a bit rushed which is causing you to miss plot points. Other then that it's a good start.
Now this raises the question. Why did such a magic pulse led him here? And I wonder how he interacts with the other characters...
Two chapters in and I want more, keep it up. It's really good.
I do not say this often, but...
MOAR.
The only criticism I have has already been said and I’m not one for beating a dead. Looking forward to more.
PLEASE UPDATE!
Also (at the start only) I was confused with the weapons that he was stuck with. But, after some research, I grew to like your choice of weapons and equipment.
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I've got my own storyline written up as of right now.
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Stuff I know things about/maintained
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That’s the advice Issac Asimov always gave: “write about what you know”, but we have to be mindful of our audience—most people won’t recognize what type of weapon something is simply from the stock model number. The majority of people will get the picture if you just say “pistol”, “rifle”, “knife”, “warp drive”, etc.
I know that idea can be frustrating, especially for someone who went through the military where some drill instructor beat the details of your issued gear down to the serial number into your head to the point where you can recite them in your sleep.... But you have to step out of that just a little when presenting to the average layperson.
It’s fine to give them the specs and official model numbers, if you wish, but don’t forget to include the more relevant information that the average person would be more interested in.
That said, I definitely like where this is going.
They should've known something was up the moment he said "Jake"
most if not all Griffon names starts with a G and none have double names.
The hen escalate it and Jack ended it swiftly. I wonder what happend to all the others of his team...
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Ponytown avatar? I love it ♡
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Not really... If your not a reader of fimfiction its not really related. I check with a game buddy that isnt a brony
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Truth can be more adventage here. He needs allys that can supply im. His knownlage is a currency all on its own.
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Exacly. No common sence, no wildlife to substain himself. You take what you can and hope for the best.
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Nice Avatar. Getting in the mood of the story?
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His gun... In the military your lover,protector and most trusted friend is the gun in your posetion
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Recived. Sit rep?
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Positive. Permission to fan gasm all over the comment section ? Because i totaly digvthe style
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I have found 1-2 gems in the past. 1 got deleted for no apparently good reason and the other never was finished Recommendations?
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Damn fine avatar. Equestria at War?
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Unless they are work in progress and we get filled in later (^.^)/)
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Ever read this one?
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Please don’t change the font size like this. There’s never a good reason to do it. Reason being that it screws with the formatting of the paragraph and/or page, and can make it difficult to read.
Only time I personally ever tolerate font size manipulation is when it’s done for comedic effect, most often with Fluttershy to indicate her volume trailing down into inaudible ranges. It’s only ever done once in the story, never again.
Generally in stories, you never want to change the font. There is only two reasons you would ever alter the font. Bold for empasis, and italics, also for emphasis or effects such as thoughts or other
Just because you’re able to do underline, strike through, colour, size, etc etc. doesn’t mean you should. The ones to avoid the most are colour and size, for readability reasons.
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I have read the story to chapter 52-53. Very fine read until than.
I read the origin completly and sequel in work. Magnificent reading experience.
Have these chapters been edited to add in the changes noted in the "Update" chapter? Cause I am not seeing any racism here. Speciesism?
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Yeah, I meant speciesism. Should be a little more precise in that considering the universe
I'm probably going to yeet the update chapter and put it into the Chapter 10 A/N soon anyhow
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i love that picture, it's so pretty yet dangerous because of the Biome,
I think you're missing a second comma after the phrase "by complete chance"
Jack is truly a master of first contact.
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And badass
Good start. Good pacing. No unnecessary backstory which just drags on and on.
I'm hooked already.
shit that's new, RD being the voice of reason?
you have piqued my interest entirely,
every other story I've read, she's mainly the instigator. this is a nice change of pace.
Awesome chapter, quick and efficient dispatching og enemys with gun and words.