The Everfree is a strange place with hazards and geometries that don’t exist anywhere else in Equestria. The Cutie Mark Crusaders aren't afraid though. No sir. Especially not of overly friendly strangers with hidden faces.
Done as a mood, detail, and descriptive exercise for myself. Hints toward the identity of the stranger are woven into the narrative word choices with the hope that the reader figures things out just before the characters do. Let me know if I made the clues either too subtle or too obvious.
This is an entry in the Snippet Series, an anthology of old oneshots I (and my good buddy Str8aura) wrote based around interesting pics I found. New ones will be posted every Thursday for the foreseeable future.
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Great as always, although it's still odd that we both chose to write stories about the CMC roaming the everfree and meeting a stranger around the same time.
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I’m down to the last four Snippets that are yet to be uploaded to Fimfiction. Gonna need to hurry up and type some more, lest I break my two month streak of uploads.
Also...
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I refuse. I need to finish this last snippet, which is NOT about the CMC exploring a forest, but rather the CMC exploring a school.
Interesting. I liked it!
I suspected that Miss was future Sweetie Belle because I couldn’t think of any other unicorns with green eyes, then I figured it out when she said she had a white coat.
Also, this sentence makes cutie marks sound like badges at the local equivalent of Girl Guides:
Makes for a straightaway.
Also, reminds me of a saying. "Two wrongs don't make a right. But three rights do make a left."
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I came to the same conclusion. My first hint was "dumb fabric".
Well, that was a fun little fic.
Ah, fun with the soft places. Maybe it's being a unicorn that makes your mind a bit more able to process this sort of thing. (And not without cost elsewhere...)
Delightful little tale. Thank you for it.
Yeah, guessed it when I had the eye color. I'm not sure if that's 'too soon'.
While I came to the conclusion on who the stranger is much later than I thought I should've in hindsight, I think that having the stranger blurt out "Dumb fabric!" seemed to be too much of a dead giveaway... but, of course, I wasn't thinking about the prospect of time travel just yet. Thus, my expectations have been subverted and it all rounds out to being quite clever!
Overall, a nice little dose of mystery and questioning over here!
Honestly, it took me a few backtracks to finally figure out who "Miss" is because
This exact line was tripping me so hard. I was so confused thinking "who the hell is this yellow unicorn?" At first I just thought that it was Applebloom and that she's just lying about being a unicorn but then I realised "Son of a it was the cloak that was yellow, not the pony."
Then I saw the line describing the color of her eyes and magic ability (or rather, disability) and I instantly knew it was Sweetie Belle. Idk what's going to happen in 15 years in that exact spot, but if anyone knows let me know.
Also I can't seem to figure out how to spoiler a quoted text but to anyone reading this, don't worry. I'm just quoting parts of this story.
I predicted the plot from the title, chapter name and description.