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Biding his time in the ether, King Sombra is summoned by a surprising pony to join him on an epic quest to the Dragon Lands.
King Sombra goes on a trip with Starswirl the Bearded to the Dragon lands. Entry for the Season 10 Bingo Writing Contest (Prompt 79).
A very grateful thank you to totallynotabrony for editing.
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"Gollum" - did you mean "golem", a clay creature? Because Gollum is a character from LOTR.
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Thank you for catching. I’ve made the correction.
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Looks like you missed one instance.
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Thank you again.
I have updated my precious (story)
It's good to see Sombra getting some love.
Starswirl's playing a dangerous game, let's see how this works out for him.
The 't' should be lowercase, and the period after 'mean' should be a comma instead. This basic issue is called formatting said tags, and you can find more about how to correct it in the writing guide here.
Don't use multiple punctuation marks. You only needed one of each of these.
There should be no space after "was" and between the ellipses.
Always have one space after the ellipses.
All of these are peppered throughout your story, but the good news is that each is a beginner mistake that is easy to fix. Your spelling and grammar look fine otherwise.
Okay, now this is just begging for a sequel. You also might want to consider updating the series tags to include the comics and Equestria Girls.