Aragon
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These are my Patrons with a 10$ tier or higher, and the little stories/shoutouts I write for them in every story. Thanks for the support, y’all.
Over thirty-one thousand words in one go? Oof.
Ah, this and its ilk will definitely do until I get off my rear and figure out how to read the last couple of Discworld books without having to pay for them... and afterwards, because Terry Pratchett is dead so there aren't going to be any more. Point is, it's the same kind of humor and it's a kind of humor I like rather a lot.
Also, yeah, if you ask someone whether they're thinking what you're thinking they never are, although if you're very clever you can figure out what they were thinking and then decide it's as good an idea as any. And if you're very very clever you can do this quickly enough to come up with an appropriate response to their "I think so, but slavery is super icky and also you aren't actually mortal" or whatever in time to make it look like you were on the same wavelength all along. (For the record, the response in that case is "that's okay, not all sources attest to that bit so we can just leave it out")
I've read 8,000 word stories that felt longer than this one. Like the difference between doing 80mph on the highway in a car, or on a motorcycle.
One of the best portrayls of crushes I've seen, ever. A great story about finding it hard to be a good person, but still wanting to try your hardest.
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He's done 90k before. Yes, really.
Dis gun b good
Yeah, definitely getting Discworld vibes here. Hopefully Starlight is clever enough to maneuver Trixie into a Granny Weatherwax position, although it sounds like we're heading more towards Nanny Ogg and that's also fine if a little less E-rated.
(For the record, "Discworld vibes" is one hell of a compliment from anyone who remotely knows what they're talking about)
The best part of this title is that it's an homage to the eponymous Wizard of Oz, and therefore intended to mark her as a blowhard braggart with no skills other than trickery. The even better part is that that's actually a heck of a skill if you're smart enough about applying it like the Wizard was and Trixie isn't.
This is actually saying the same thing twice; in the metaphorical dark, nobody ever finds out you did it so nobody punishes you for it. I'd link TvTropes explaining this but eh.
More often, the writers forget to show it. But that's just the actual show, most writers here either make her actually good at friends or are intellectually honest enough to show that she isn't. Or, in cases like you, somehow both at the same time. You're a national treasure that I'm glad Spain was willing to share with the rest of us, you know that right?
Okay. That was several kinds of adorable so I knew it wouldn't last. You don't kick puppies. You have universes for that.
Not the Valentines Day story we need, but the one we deserve. Thank you Aragon!
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That's nothing compared to that Applejack Cider story that was a singular 60k word chapter. I read the entire thing before the author eventually parsed it out.
Sounds like an Aragon story.
Goddamn you, Aragon; would it kill you to write something every once and a while that didn't require me clearing an entire afternoon to read?
My wife and I have had this date day planned for months, and now it's blown to hell.
I have many things to say, all of which have been said or will be said.
Witchcraft!
But if I were to say something more, even if it's bound to happen anyway, I'd say I really, really liked the characterization between the leads. All of our overpowered unicorns (and I include Trixie in that as well) are delightful, snarky, and quirky. And adorable. Can't forget that one. And also painfully relatable. Why must it be so?!
Thank you for this! Just to spite you, that is.
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I feel this is a fair point, but there's a slight difference.
To Twilight (and I guess to me, since I'm the author here), "in the dark" implies secrecy on top of it all; there are no consequences, yes, but also, nobody knows. Twilight's version takes that away -- she talks about the moment when there are no consequences even if people know what you did, when you can't be touched no matter what. That's when character shines for real, in Twilight's opinion; it's also more similar to Twilight's own (and Trixie's possible future) situation.
(In any case, this wasn't fully explored since, quite frankly, the scene was in danger of dragging, and I felt it was just a point that's not worth exploring too much in-story to be honest. Just felt like it'd be cool to clarify my train of thought there).
I'm looking forward to the rest of this story based solely on the final line.
I love the implication that Trixie is mispronouncing one of these words so they rhyme.
Oh, I get it! They're scammers, but they're scamming reality itself.
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Its called a slant rhyme and its art.
Gosh darn astounding, once again a fantastic piece of character based writing :D Loved every moment of it and have no idea how you wrote this in a single sitting. You sure you aren't secretly a witch? ;P
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Oh my God I love the praise but this took like, six months of writing or so. At one point I could only write one day a week, so the actual time it would've taken me is probably shorter? But this was also like. MASSIVELY edited. Like this was edited so hard. I rewrote entire scenes multiple times till everything clicked.
In a single sitting, this wasn't. I'm sexy but I'm not that sexy yet.
That was great fun!
And don't worry, Aragon. Whatever happens, we'll always have Coney Island.
Your story is amazing.
To repeat myself, Twilight was never this good in the show, but the surrounding narrative insisted that she was supposed to be. Good to see that you're trying out both directions of fixing this issue.
Ah, right in the gut
The "nothing personal, it's just that it's traditional to murder the **** out of you and I ain't gonna mess with tradition" sorts are a deep well of comedy... and horror, when you consider that Leatherface from Texas Chainsaw Massacre is basically that plus a literal mental handicap.
Yeah, those people who think that a ninja dressing in neon orange is fundamentally absurd? Those people have obviously never seen a tiger. Can't blame them really, those things are stupid sneaky.
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Oh thank god, I was genuinely afraid of your eldritch skills there
Six months of juicy work then ;D Editing on point too, nary a spelling or grammatical error!
(and no matter what dude, you are incredibly sexy huehuehue)
Yeah, this is a Twilight who studied headology. (For the last time, a story about witches in this style demands as many Discworld references as I can shoehorn in)
An interesting story, thank you. And I say that as someone who dislikes Starlight/Trixie as a ship, but this was still an entertaining tale for me.
On a minor note:
“Oh. I mean, I don’t know. I guess I’ll just get the room to grow back?” Trixie frowned. “I’m kinda busy healing all the bones in my body first, Starlight. The castle really isn’t my top priority, much as I love the library.”
This should have Twilight as the speaker instead of Trixie.
I am amazed at how hilariously differently we interpret this pair, but you made it work. Kudos.
--Spade
LoveSpite is a beautiful and powerful force, and you've done great work in portraying it so wellRats, you say?
Okay, this is going to be a good one.
Color me impressed that they figured out the miscommunication this early, and it didn't just linger until the end. Now the story takes a new twist, it seems.
The level of deconstruction in here is brilliant.
Some writers feel the need to fix Trixie, to give her a tragic backstory and a redemption arc and shit. I love that you don't, you just make her 200% fucking Trixie. And you really get into everything that makes Trixie Trixie, without making her any less Trixie.
Do you have a thing for garroteing wives?
I'm so down for this.
That was good.
Your way with words reminds me of Pratchett. I'm so enjoying reading this, thank you.
This was very comfy, but with a very strong thematic core and character dynamics. I really enjoyed it, and I really love the interactions between Starlight, Trixie, and Twilight.
Ironically, there's a typo there.
The mud explosion was literal Discord-tier chaos.
So much heart and so much surreal humour.
The funny thing is, Twilight's been using witchcraft this whole time and we didn't notice.
In all seriousness, whether you get published or decide to self-publish original fiction, I will pay for your work. International shipping as well if I have to.
Until then, horse words will suffice.
Even though this is almost totally harmless, I see why witchcraft is considered so mind-numbingly powerful. For the same reasons someone would hate or be terrified of ‘God’ or ‘Destiny.’
Magnificent, from start to finish. Granny Weatherwax would approve methinks.