A Simple Passing

Life can be hard and Twilight finds that sometimes just having a friend to talk with can make all the difference for one farm pony.

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Lapison

Lapison #1 · Aug 17th, 2012 · · ·

It's...nice. Easy to understand. Nothing spectacular, but it's heart-twinging.
A small grammatical error in the beginning about having to talk to AB. But that's a nitpick.
One thing that worries me is the fact that Applejack seems to have lost a bit of her hold on reality. If that's what you were gunning for, great. But it seems a bit on the "off your rocker" type, and not the "it hasn't sunk in yet" type.
Still, well written. This deserves a thumbs-up and a few more views.

Diamond Sparkle

Diamond Sparkle #2 · Aug 17th, 2012 · · ·

Poor Applejack.

SuperPinkBrony12

SuperPinkBrony12 #3 · Aug 17th, 2012 · · ·

All in all not bad but it goes from Twilight trying to comfort Applejack after Granny Smith dies to Applejack telling Twilight about her first apple tree and what happened to it.

appletini

appletini #4 · Aug 18th, 2012 · · ·

1103602 Thanks, I was going for a mix of not quite there/passed being affected but not completely yet.

1105625 Yeah, I'm kind of not completely satisfied with how the transition turned out as a whole. I liked it, just it's something I'm sure could've run a bit smoother/ had a little more to it; and I plan to add that once I get to pushing myself.