This story is a midquel to Passing On Together telling what happened between chapters 1 and 2. Was for a long time deleted and combined into one story after being edited. Luster Dawn New Days. Read whichever one you want but this is one of the two original stories brought back at the request of another user.
Luster Dawn, daughter of Starlight and Sunburst goes off on her own journey, from the school of magic and back to her hometown of Ponyville where she makes new friends and learns the greatest magic of all like her mentor before. But little does Luster know that an ancient evil is reemerging in Equestria, and it will be up to her to stop it.
Authors Notes: These stories use a theory I developed gathering info through the mlp wiki rather than the widely believed theory that immortality is the ability of alicorns.
If you believe immortality is a gift you are entitled to your opinion, but please be respectful. I'm trying to give people who don't want Twilight to suffer the curse of immortality an alternative. I would not read this if you are someone who firmly believes immortality is a gift.
Lastly, I would recommend reading the first chapter of Passing On Together first then come back here if you want to be chronolgical, or just go to the New Days version if you don't want to skip around. Link at top.
Ah the bane of immortality. That is the reason why gods do not bother to meddle with mortals for the pain is just too unbearable.
I'll keep a lookout on this story. If we know anything, it's that misery often do loves company.
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Thanks. You might like the one it's a midquel to as well. I made it to try and give people that dont want Twilight to outlive her friends an alternative. Even though it looks like that is the case in the finale it's really been left up to us. The writers dont know how long everyone lives including twilight. Hopefully this will be a better after ending.
I liked what I've read so far. I'll be keeping tabs on it as it progresses. ;)
Will the others in the mane 6 become parents as well in later chapters?
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Well Pinkie Pie was the only one we know of to have a child. I am thinking of having Luster defend Lil Cheese from bullies teasing him for looking like a girl at some point. I don't plan on making any other children though. But maybe I should consider that. Maybe show some of Twilight raising Flurry alongside her parents since in Passing On Together I had Cadence and Shining Armor killed.
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Will Flurry heart have a cousin
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Well I plan to stick with what I saw in the show. Twilight wasn't shown to have been married to Flash or anyone, though he did appear in her montage at the end. Maybe I'm being a little too restrictive of myself. I'll have to think about it, maybe not go all by the way the show presented it. It was pretty open to interpretation so I guess I could have a little fun with my favorite ships like Flashlight, Soardash, and what not. Though this is a midquel so I'll need to keep it true to the base story. Thanks for asking, you've given me something to maybe think about.
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Children are cute and lovely, aren't they?
I like it, maybe a bit rushed, should throw in some things about how Luster never went out of the castle or how she just ignored any small bits of friendship talk her parents gave her, give everybody a little more character l, make em a bit more rough around the edge to really get your audience to feel the characters. Whoops, my English teacher is really wearing off on me. P.S “Lust” is a terrible nickname, she is gonna so get bullied for that later in life.
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Okay I'll see what I can do.
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Yeah.
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Oh, it’s no problem really, I know my comment made it look like I hate this but I don’t! I look forward to how this goes, I’m just trying to help a fellow writer with some literary advice
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I didnt take it as hate. Your advice was good I think.
Clever!
Noooo! You maniac! You killed them! You killed them all!!!
Curse thee!
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Hey I didnt like killing them as I said in my notes last chapter, but it was the most likely scenario in my mind since Flurry heart seems to be the new ruler of the Crystal Empire.
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A queen at such a young age? Well... Twilight wasn't that different but she was passed the torch. This feels more like... regicide. I can only imagine what she'll go through. Keep it up. Hope for a new update before new year ^_^
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Thanks. For a sec I thought you suddenly hated it. And dont worry Flurry wont be ruling straight away. She is too young for that. I will hopefully be able to get a new chapter once a week at least.
I never get this pairing with Flash thing. It's clear that Twilight never became friends with his pony version and the human version is obviously going to be ending up with Sunset.
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Well Twilight did blush a bit when she ran into him. But hey, each to their own.
They’re DEAD?!?!?
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Afraid so. It was the only thing that made sense in my mind since Flurry Heart seems to be ruling the Crystal Empire by the end.
shouldn't that be Yona the Yak?
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Thanks.
Nice! There are a few things I need to point out though:
Wasn’t it Discord, disguised as Grogar, that brought back Sombra? Also, why is Sombra willingly bowing to Grogar in contrast to how he downright refused to join Discord’s Legion of Doom? You saw how he acted to the fake Grogar. Also, I don’t understand why Grogar didn’t correct him as to who that fake one really was—unless the Grogar you’re writing is again Discord in disguise.
Now Sombra is slightly hesitant in joining him? I just find this a bit odd that his attitude is suddenly changed from being sincerely thankful to being passive-aggressive.
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I planned on having him tell Sombra later. Though maybe I should have done it now. Sombra was thankful, but he felt a little having to let go of his pride and team up.
Edit. Fixed.
I feel like the students are being a bit too responsible for their supposed age at this point around 10. Tone back a bit and you’ll have more room to let the characters develop, bringing that much more depth to your story. The crystal coronation thing was also extremely short, embellish that! There are so many details you could add to make that scene pop! a lot more than it did. Keep going! I love the ambition! I wish I had that so I could finish some projects of mine
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They're actually teens now. Alright I'll see if I can add more to that scene. Expect an expansion to come with the next chapter
this chapter was perfect and whats in it still brings a tear to my eyes
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Why thank you! I had to rewatch a good amount of the episode to get the scene just right. Next time its on to Ponyville.
This is cool
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Thanks. Good to hear something good about it today, just got a dislike a little bit ago but ah well. Guess I got to get used to it with how popular this Twilight outliving her friends thing is.
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Oh, well I liked it
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Thanks.
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You’re welcome.
I’m liking that the real Grogar is there and not a Discord trick again
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Me too.
Very good chapter. Just one thing:
“I know this is” what? This sentence is incomplete. Nonetheless, good work.
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Thanks. It was gonna say something about it being hard for Luster.
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Gotcha 👍🏼
This is probably how I discovered your story Because I was looking for a young 6 story on Deviant then I saw this I did sort of Skip a couple of chapters but I went back a couple of days ago to read them and I had to say this is pretty good
“We’re not kids!” Smolder retorted. “And we’ve done more than you guards ever have! For someponies who are supposed to be an army, you never really do much. The only time you ever did anything was when Cozy Glow took over the school and you blocked her off!”
Ohh ouch Nice call out on the Royal guard Ever since season one I think around best night ever they were never around when trouble is started 😅
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I know.
I don't even know why people bother to put a dislike, but whatevs.
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Thanks. Yeah this story and the one it's a midquel to go against the Twilight outlives her friends thing. I saw a loophole in the finale, it seemed Twilight was planning to make Luster her Successor.
Boy those legions of doom are waiting for the attack huh I hope luster and the others will find a way to stop them but I guess we'll find out later
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Yeah I hope to get started on the next chapter soon.
Gallop shrugged. “Eh… why not? We could just go as friends. Not like we’d ever fall in love right? I mean, you’re pretty and all but probably not my type.”
“Yeah, I’d say the same,” Luster said, though she felt her heart skip a beat when he called her pretty
I'm sensing some Shipping here between those two 😁 And we're gonna visit to the another's 5 homes This should be very interesting and that means trouble's coming towards now you said cant wait until the next one keep up the good work
Ohh Grogar Is preparing for on the attack of the crystal Empire huh This will be an interesting battle and when the grand galloping gala is going on Something tells me this won't be the best night ever huh 😅 Well I can't wait to see what's going to happen next
Even reading the lyrics tears me up. Gosh, that was such a perfect song for the show to end on.