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device heretic

Joined December 2011
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Stories (7)

  • Eternal
    Princess Celestia and Twilight Sparkle's bond is tested by miscommunication and guilt.

    159,827 words · 23,578 views · 2,329 likes · 56 dislikes
  • Just Words
    Twilight is adopted; Celestia is unsurprised.
    5,560 words · 17,290 views · 1,973 likes · 57 dislikes
  • And the Temptress Came Unto Her
    Nightmare Moon visits Twilight in the night, and things get biblical.
    11,538 words · 18,136 views · 1,338 likes · 37 dislikes
  • Dictated, Not Read
    Twilight composes a letter about a terrible Hearth's Warming gift.
    3,214 words · 12,687 views · 1,388 likes · 57 dislikes
  • Thunderstruck
    2,951 words · 9,357 views · 813 likes · 34 dislikes
  • Advice
    8,159 words · 7,014 views · 468 likes · 26 dislikes
  • So Be It
    3,097 words · 10,733 views · 656 likes · 57 dislikes

Twilight breaks Celestia's doors.

But then, you'd be mad too, if your stupid brother got drunk and told you that you were adopted...

First Published
16th Aug 2012
Last Modified
16th Aug 2012

Comments ( 330 )

#1 · 105w, 16h ago · 1 · 1 ·

That description.

Edit: All of my money... all of it! TAKE IT!

Damn, Celestia just got owned. Understandable for Twilight Twinkle, and understandable for Celestia, but I think both sides of this equation got blown to smithereens. Well, that DOES tend to happen when mortals and immortals cross paths on a more... intimate level. No one ends up happy.

#2 · 105w, 16h ago · · ·

Why must this be posted right as I'm about to leave the site for possibly the rest of the day whyyy:raritydespair:

Well can't wait to read it.

#3 · 105w, 16h ago · · ·

An excellent tale and an interesting take on the "Twilight is Celestia's daughter" idea

#5 · 105w, 16h ago · · ·

I wasn't sure what to expect...not at all.

But...well done. Just these words. Well done. I can't think of anything else to say.

This is a Good story you've written.

#6 · 105w, 16h ago · · ·

:fluttercry:You're going to make me cry at this rate...

#7 · 105w, 16h ago · · ·

Damn it, Device.

When you said in your last blog post that this one was going to involve the tear ducts, i didn't think you'd actually leave me sniffling by the end.

Though i can see why this was a challenge for you. I mean, you wrote a story about Twilight and Celestia... but it wasn't a Twilestia story. Those things are like, your favorites ever. Must have been hard.

#8 · 105w, 16h ago · · ·

Welp, rocket to the moon and back my friends: This thing's gonna get featured harder than a dog in heat around a werewolf (I don't know why I made that joke).

#9 · 105w, 16h ago · · ·

I think I probably would have stopped reading the instant I even suspected who the mother was in this if it was anybody else writing this story.

And it's a good thing I did finish reading, because it didn't disappoint. Now get back to work on Nocturne. :moustache:

#10 · 105w, 16h ago · · ·

Very well done. :twilightsmile:

#11 · 105w, 16h ago · · ·

Who disliked this story? What's wrong with it? Is it because Twilight is Celestia's daughter? It can't be because of grammar or something like that. Obviously, the only thing it could be is a troll.

#12 · 105w, 16h ago · · ·

>>1098675

1. Sadfics are often just downvoted on principle by some people.

2. I have a large group of people who fucking loathe me, not entirely unwarrantedly.

3. In all fairness, this is a pretty obvious story. I flatter myself to think it's written well though.

#13 · 105w, 16h ago · · ·

>>1098675 Dislike trolls gonna troll

#14 · 105w, 16h ago · · ·

>>1098675 Art thou speaking of me?

#15 · 105w, 16h ago · · ·

...

You know what? I give up. I now realise that it is impossible to come away from one of your fics unaffected. I recommend anyone who reads this and anything else from your pen have pictures of sheer D'aaawwsome to fall back on as soon as they finish.

If you'll excuse me now, I'm going to let my good friends Ben and Jerry help me forget all the feels that this evoked.

#16 · 105w, 16h ago · · ·

It's probably #2.

Poor DH. I've never seen someone have so many people go out of their way to mess with someone else over the internet.

#17 · 105w, 16h ago · · ·

:facehoof: Celestia, this is the mare who discovered a story you'd buried for centuries just in time to be present for its resolution. Who researched a whole species and learned at least one spell specifically for defeating them in the course of an afternoon. Who worked out a method to alter the appetites of an entire swarm of unfamiliar creatures on a whim. Do you really think she's never going to ask about her birth parents?

Finding out she was adopted was a system shock. It changes everything because no one told her, not because it changes anything.

Finding out she's yours (and she will find out) is going to change everything. The fact that you arranged it for the sake of her distance from you, but found a way to be close to her anyway- that you spent years by her side and never told her, not even in secret, not even when she was old enough to decide for herself whether to face the consequences of making it known... not even when she came to you already knowing half the truth, and you came within inches of telling her the rest...

A lifetime of growing up surrounded by Blueblood and his ilk wouldn't have damaged her nearly as much as that's going to.

#18 · 105w, 16h ago · · ·

>>1098711 I didn't even know you existed. But I guess it is the internet so anything is possible.

#19 · 105w, 16h ago · · ·

Oh...

Damn...

Wow...

You hit me right in the feels man, and you did it hard. I'm honestly really sad now.

#20 · 105w, 15h ago · · ·

Well, you've made me feel bad for Celestia... Congrats.

#21 · 105w, 15h ago · · ·

This was so sweet. :heart::raritycry:

I never thought a Twilestia fanfic would turn out like this. :trollestia::twilightblush: ...I LOVE IT!! :derpytongue2:

#22 · 105w, 15h ago · · ·

Congratulations. Many a manly tear has now been shed. :fluttercry:

This story was very simple, a little predictable perhaps, but also very well executed. The moment where Celestia realized just how much she lost with her kneejerk abandonment was where the waterworks began.

#23 · 105w, 15h ago · · ·

:fluttershysad:

#24 · 105w, 15h ago · · ·

Well, definitely wasn't expecting that. Certainly still enjoyable, though.

#25 · 105w, 15h ago · 1 · ·

>>1098718

I'm considering the possibility that the story was written that way on purpose, that it was a meant to show that the "Celestia is Twilight's mother" scenario can be a really bad thing.

#26 · 105w, 15h ago · · ·

I'm confused by 'That you are not yourself also Luna's great-great-great-great-great-great-great-great-granddaughter is irrelevant to the reality of the love you two share.' Is it implying eros?

#27 · 105w, 15h ago · · ·

This is one of those situations where all choices are bad and all options can only mitigate, not prevent harm.  Twilight doesn't need to know who her biological mother is.  She doesn't need to know why she's the most powerful Unicorn in recently recorded history.  She doesn't need to know why she feels such a kinship for the Princesses.  What she needs... is to be happy.

Celestia, as best as she knows how, is trying to achieve that.

#28 · 105w, 15h ago · 1 · ·

>>1098718

>>1098790

DINGDINGDINGDINGDING WE HAVE A WINNER

#29 · 105w, 15h ago · · ·

Before featured! Yeah, its that good. I love this story, best of luck to you

#30 · 105w, 15h ago · · ·

>>1098801

YES! WHAT DO I WIN?

#32 · 105w, 15h ago · · ·

>>1098801

Huh. I thought you covered that pretty well in Eternal, to tell the truth.

#33 · 105w, 15h ago · · ·

So sweet... :pinkiesad2: I love it!

This reminded me how few good 'Celestia is Twilight's mother' fics, we have.:fluttercry:

#34 · 105w, 15h ago · · ·

Celestia is secretly Twilight's mom, check. Only a couple more possible relationships to go!

"Dear Mom" really struck me. And the whole thing is very believable.

#35 · 105w, 15h ago · · ·

>>1098820

Eh, that'll do.

Anyway, I think you did a pretty good job with this. I can't really call it the best of your work, but I was able to detect all the feels you fit inside it.

#36 · 105w, 15h ago · · ·

This may just be the best thing I've read all damn month.

#37 · 105w, 15h ago · · ·

This is gonna make Twilight's suppressed attraction to Celestia even more awkward for the girl...

#38 · 105w, 15h ago · · ·

Hmmm... It's never just "happily ever after" with you, Mr. Heretic. Always a catch or a qualifier. Thumbs up, of course.

#39 · 105w, 15h ago · · ·

Honestly, there should be a lot more stories like this. They are heart touching and complex enough that you have to use your brain while reading, Even if the "Twilight is actually Celestia's daughter" part was somewhat obvious sooner or later the rest isnt.

Twilight of course WANTS to know who her biological parents are, a lot would want to. Dont know if Celestia's attempt to make her reconsider that will work, given twilights studious nature. Maybe she wont want to find out right away but she will want to know eventually.

#40 · 105w, 15h ago · · ·

Eh ma gurd.

Awesome.

#41 · 105w, 15h ago · 1 · ·

And then Twilight settles down with someone, gets pregnant, genetically lucks out and gives birth to a winged unicorn. Angry questioning all around. :twilightoops:

I kind'a hate but also kind'a love that the big secret didn't come out. I'm not sure how to put how betrayed she'd feel into words without it being an understatement, especially if it's late in her life and it's apparent that Celestia intended her to remain ignorant of it throughout her entire life. I'd like to think that Shining Armor would come out and tell her someday, though. Preferably with some tact, i.e. not while drunk.

#42 · 105w, 15h ago · · ·

I honestly never expected this kind of story from you.

Not your best work, but certainly better than most of the other people who try to write it.

#43 · 105w, 15h ago · · ·

Make a sequel I want  to see more

#44 · 105w, 15h ago · · ·

This was quite good.

#46 · 105w, 15h ago · 1 · ·

Device Heretic

-vs-

Your Feels

Flawless victory.

>>1098823

I'm given to understand that he took it on himself to see if the idea (which he...well you've all read Eternal[1]) can be made into a good story. It so transpires that it can.

[1] If you haven't, what on Earth are you doing here? Go read Eternal. Go on. I'll wait. Make sure to pack tissues and, possibly, an alcoholic drink of considerable potency. Chocolate also works well.

>>1098870

I refer the honourable gentleman to the comment I made some hours ago. :twilightsmile:

That is a bad place to be in.

#47 · 105w, 15h ago · · ·

MY FEELS

#48 · 105w, 15h ago · · ·

>>1098870

Maybe that's why she tried to keep the secret hidden :pinkiehappy:

#49 · 105w, 15h ago · · ·

Well, Its been a while since I read a tragedy story that good. Very good DH, very good. Your stories never fail to bring some emotion to me, but they still have to bring to the ultimate expression of sadness. But I still have yet to read Eternal and several of your stories, so we shall see if you have the honor of finally completely breaking my emotional barriers.

#50 · 105w, 15h ago · · ·

Man, I was so hoping for a happy ending.

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