Greetings from Venezuela, I don't expect to do much here, I just got a few stories in my head and wanted write them here, I hope you like them. I take Commissions and can get Ko-Fi donations.
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This story is a sequel to The Legend of the Hanged Pony
After finishing school in Canterlot, a group of students decides to go into Equestria's other coast, far from Princess Celestia and her gaze, to have a nice vacation on the beach. Little did they know that they would find some of Equestria's most dangerous ponies, this is the story of a pair of stallions who met a very nice mare.
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I have a suggestion: Add information about the actual myths and legends that these stories are based off of.
So while I do have two complaints about this story, let me just say that I did enjoy it.
My first complaint is that there is a lot of telling us (the readers) what happened but not so much showing. As they say when it comes to writing it is better to show, don't tell.
My last complaint is that there does seem to be some grammar issues, the most common being that on is used in place of in and at, on more than a few occasions.
Still I did enjoy the story and I hope my feedback will encourage you to improve your writing skills.
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Thanks, the "in" and "on" issue is one I still struggle with (since I live in Latin America) so thanks for pointing it out. I'm also struggling a lot with the pacing when writing lately so I'll try to take it into account the next time.
Thanks for the feedback, I hope you enjoy my other stories (if you happen to read then) and feel free to tell me your opinion on them.
A monster story, It seems familiar somehow. I think there are certain European themes that would be similar, though I'm willing to bet this is a mixture of the Spanish and native influences in Venezuela blending. Anyway, thanks for sharing it and have a thumbs up.
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Well, La Fiera is a Venezuelan ghost BUT I wouldn't be surprised if we had some Spanish influence down the line. Thanks.