Nice story, let's see where it goes...

Dragonforce based story? That's new.

Haven't really read the chapter yet but if you don't mind me asking, what have you done with your enter key? If it doesn't appear soon, I'm calling the cyber police.

Well it's a good idea overall, this is my first fanfic in a [very/i] long while i've read with OC's as a major character. I tend to avoid them out of biasness and the last time it did not end well, or start well, or have a particulary good middle section. Infact i read it and i was rather to it so with all that asiade let's look at this from the begining and see how well it fits together. The answer, SLOW DOWN.

You write suberply and everything flows wonderfully together. You are also one of the only people i have ever met who seem to know how to phrase dialouge like in a book on the internet so props off to you for that. I'd like a bit more of a description of the Ambassador and of Chip themselves but my biggest complaint is that you have so much happening at once in this chapter and it all goes by very quickly. I did enjoy reading it and will be continuing to do so as later chapters appear.  

THIS ISH IS GETTING TRACKED SO FUCKING HARD!!!

you know its good when its 5.0 in 7 rstings

goodjob sir

A role reversal? A dragon rearing a pony foal? I love the concept and the execution seems sound so far. I'll keep an eye open for opportunities to quote Dragonforce, by the way :p

>>6543265432

I do intend to slow the pace down, right down. The initial hectic few scenes are to get things rolling. The board is set up, the opening moves of all players are standard and well known... but for one.

Wow i like how this is going so far

and now all it needs is carpet bombing and more cow bell and it will become complete

Love it. was a little worried going into it. just because i'm a little wary of OC stories. but this was definitelyworth it.

lovethe dragon. i won't say the 'chess' thing is overdone nowadays, but i will say there are too many charaacters who use it, and frankly, don't do it well. this is definitely NOT the case here. X3. love it, and i love just his characterization. the back and forth between cold/calculating and warm/caring (or at least thats what i see it as) was executed well.

definitely gonna track this. X3

>>6671966719

It's very easy to overdo the whole "trololo it's all a game of chess" - I really don't wish to rub the analogy in anypony's face so you won't hear too much about it. I would rather treat it as the ambassador himself treats it - he knows scheming plans are afoot, but he doesn't quite know what, therefore he does his best to prepare by sheltering his new charge the best way he sees fit.

Liking it thus far, will be tracking this one for sure

Please Sir, Can I have some more?

love it

Another excellent chapter, the skydiving bit was hilariously awesome

Pardon me, but is there really a need to call him a dragon?

Yeah yeah, your story and all, but he is technically an Earth Pony. Even the blind could

see that. Other than that, I look forward to the next chapter.

Awesome!

This ish just got funny

>>6731867318

i think that's just the actual dragon being a troll to everyone else, that or draconic pride are my guesses. I just treat it like pinkie pie and roll with it.

the hideous spectre of ‘bedmane’

this is a interesting story, not sure if i've read one before where a dragon was raising someone of a different species before... not that i remember at least

Interesting idea with the multi-race school. I guess when you live in the boundary-lands of Equestria you get used to it.

Also, I agree with ForlanceAbice, it seems weird to call him a dragon, but I'm sure you have your reasons.

Guess i'll leave a comment on this one too. X3

first. The title. MY FAVORITE DRAGONFORCE SONG EVER.

anyway, love it. definitely was worth tracking. gonna say i like the whole, Sharptooth referring to Chip as a 'dragon.' i'm not gonna try to give reasons for it, its your story. but i like it. it makes Sharptooth a little deeper in character.

second(third?) best line of the whole story, "he licked his muzzle clean and devoured the rest in a bloodthirsty orgy of gastronomical destruction" jsut saying.

looking forward to more.

>>6732267322

Look, everyone knows that is an earth pony, but when a huge flying armored fire breathing killing machine with diplomatic immunity shows up with a kid in tow and tells you they are his kid, and thus a dragon, you generally don't belabor the point with him.

That said, I do like this premise, and the execution thus far. Seeing more of this will brighten my day.

I tried to click on chapter 3...Then I literally yelled out FUK Thanks for writing such a good chapter!

Welp, one more thing added to my tracked list...

love it

>>6764767647 spam

Not bad, hhowever I didnt feel the dragonforce song as a title as it didn't rly fit the story, but then again that's just me.

Makes me wanna make a story about a gambling pony who finds love, but never put him in a casnio and call the first chapter "Ace of Spades"

Toy Story references, you just have to love them.

Wow!

I love the idea, and the execution - and the "calling Chip a dragon" thing is really excellent - not just for Sharptooth's character, but for Chip's as he grows up. Can't wait to see more.

The ponies approve.

And Chip discovers the game "Kerplunk".

Mind you, without Tess and the Foley's transporters it's a limited version of the game.

Ahhhhh Sharpie sounds like Dumbledore to me

>>6833968339

I like being a bit facetious with my titles, so you'll have to stretch for the meaning. It's not at all because I suck at them.

>>6840368403

Semantics, technicalities, contracts, inheritance... Chip lives in a magical world, Sharpie is a powerfully magical creature. He has his reasons.

>>6828068280

Clothing store spam? That's a new one.

>>6752867528

>>6731867318>>6752867528It probably signifies acceptance and belonging.  Simply put, Sharptooth is declaring that he views Chip as not just a member of his family, but as his own son, and not just as an outsider or add-on

This is definitely looking interesting.  I can't wait for more.

I love it Midnight. Can't wait to see what happens.

Get more out soon please.

Track and 5*.

Well then. My only real complaint would be that this moves pretty fast, at least the first chapter does. Mostly, I have no earthly idea why Sharptooth would so willingly and whole-heartedly adopt an orphaned pony just like that. I expect that this will be gone into later, however, so benefit of the doubt and all.

But curses, you went the foal route, and that's instant like. :| I mean, Chip turning around three times before lying down? ADORABLE. And then there was the flying lesson.

"AAAAAAAA"

"Feel it in your wings!"

"AAAAAAAHHHHH!"

Fantastic. Also, Frostpepper is a GREAT name. Also FUK U FUK U FUK U

nuff said

>>6846468464 eh, spam takes many forms though, yeah, don't see that too often

oh well, one less waste of text

also the first spam i've seen on this site

>>6913269132

muwahahaaa, looks like I nyxed your plans to hate it then

...and I almost wish I hadn't used Frostpepper because yeah, great name (for once).

>>6918469184

saw the same thing on another story, same account. I think I need to tell Knighty...

This story is so cute!

>>6918469184

It sucks because I have that  on a blog post (not that anyone reads those) but yoy can't delete comments on a blog post.

*you (meaning I)

But anyways great story, I am really looking forward to reading more.

Confound these dragons, they drive me to feelings.

I do quite love this story and would submit y request for moar posthaste.

That was an awesome chapter, I for one think that treating chip like a dragon is a very interesting concept and will make for a great story.

Lol i was hoping he would start breathing fire XD

Oh Midnight, you and your 'being good at writing', whatever that is.

Another wonderful job.

This story sure stands out from others, can't wait to see where this leads.

Hmmm, dragon as state of mind...  I like.

Excellent work once again! Looking forward to the next chapter!

Why can't at least a few Skyrim dragons be like this? It would be nice to sit down with a conversation with one once in a while instead of having to kill the bastards every 15 minutes!

delightful

>>7066370663  I entirely agree.  I wanted him to blast that dog with fire!

A very VERY good story.

I approve wholeheartedly of Sharp's teaching style, seems pretty Zen

blargblarg blarg blargblarg blargblarg! blarg blargblarg

>>7588875888

lol, I hope that's a good blarg.

>>7588075880

>>7589175891

MY MOTHER IS NOT A PROTESTANT WHORE!

>>7589775897

>>7590275902

Oh sorry I must have read your blarg wrong

s'good, only now realizing you're writing it makes it obvious.

fuck that is why my fic isn't as ice cold as the others

>>7590575905

>>7590675906

indeed

*makes hand movemoments to convey message* you see when the planet exploded...

yes

Win...just pure undiluted win.

fantastic

Reminds me of Ozy and Millie

>>7688476884

This is actually one of my inspirations for the setup, without following the storyline or stealing the characters :3

Awsomeness.

Earth Pony Magic: Among possible other things, the ability to come out of bucking nowhere (of this Pinkie is a Master Earth Pony Mage) and to defy various other laws of physics, such as hovering.  Examples of this can be seen performed by Pinkie often, but can also be seen performed by other Earth Ponies, such as the Earth Ponies that popped into the camera view from its corners during the Winter Wrap-Up song.

Aw, cute. Chip is shaping up into an interesting character.

>>7728777287

I like to think of pegasus magic as primarily elemental - fire, wind, water and in some respects earth (dust storms, maybe earthquakes).

Unicorns control the mystical - manipulation of life, matter and energy, even time and space to some degree. They can of course control the weather to some degree, and make things grow... but it is a conscious effort of will to them.

Earth ponies, however - in my view, they really do have the most powerful magic of all. They control the seasons, they shape the mountains. They grow things, almost anything planted or plantable including rocks. They are immensely strong, could bring down a mountain with a well-placed buck if they were mad. Equestria, in more ways than one, belongs to them. The fact they don't know this is curious - maybe it has been suppressed, maybe that knowledge is just hidden. If you ask me, there are great and powerful earth-pony mages that can turn arrows, eat rocks, cause earthquakes, rain fire and brimstone from volcanos and turn spring to summer to autumn to winter just by moving their hooves. The fact they don't speaks volumes.

In my stories, knowing who you truly are gives you great powers - fulfilling yourself to the best of your abilities elevates you above the common horde not because you are any better intrinsically, but merely because awareness and reality are often part of the same thing.

>>7739177391

thank you.

>>7728777287

...also yes, fourth-wall breaking and the power to slow-fall are special powers that only certain ponies get. I think it manifests most strongly in earth ponies, especially ones like Pinkie Pie. I think it comes with their connection to the world, which is stronger than any other race save alicorn.

Since space and time are related, manipulation of one means manipulation of the other... is it any wonder that the G1 ponies could run up a rainbow without wings, and cross from Earth to the then-Equestria? No, not to me ;)

So relationship between griffons and earth pony dragon's, totally must be done. For the sake of amazingness and because that way I won't eat your pie. by the way did I mention there is pie, or is it cake...can't remember.

P.S. I like Carmine...a lot.

>>7801678016

...the cake is a pie?

(I regret nothing!)

Awesome, loving the story so far. Keep it up

woot! another excellent chapter, looking forward to seeing the fair

God I love this story

Damn it, MidsMids, I registered just so I can comment on your story. >.>

It is awesome. NOW I WANT TO BUG YOU FOR MOAR UPDATES TO THE STORY. D:

I totally blames you for this! xD

And now~ I go sleep!

'twas bitchin'!

HUZZAH FOR TOMFOOLERY!

You don't simply kill 49 dragons and walk OUT of Mordor

one thing to say

...............................LOL  

Excellent

Dragon transformation dragon transformation so what first wing growth, tail change, or maybe fire after all he can already eat gem though precrushed only.

It would be interesting to see some sort of draconic attributes shifted across to chip. I am wondering a bit at the way he seems to like what I am assuming are crushed stones and gems. Still A very entertaining chapter with a bit of d'awww in there too. I laughed hard at the thought of a cross eyed dragon

>>8304683046

>>8307983079

They're just ordinary draconic spices. What's so unusual about a dragon liking them?

>>8314683146

I will keep believing that they are crushed gems!

>>8314683146 Oh, I see what you're doing there.

That bit seems a mite too familiar...

Seriously bro, snagging shit from CHAYTOYANCE?! Of all people?

>>7914479144

It's so delicious and moist, also I'm still alive.

>>8344483444

Yes! Because it's funny, plot-relevant and somewhat in character

If it makes you feel better, I meant it as a silent homage

Gr3at chapter.

Can hardly wait until the next one.

More!

My mind demands more!

Oh Gosh... wasn't expecting that.

>>105513105513

as long as that's a good gosh, then I'm pleased

Well damn, can't wait to see how this plays out. Kudos on another excellent chapter

Hmmmm. I can think of no real reason for Diamond dogs to be invading a Dragon place but whatever. A good read, this is a story that I am quite happy to have read multiple times. Keep up the good work.

>>105589105589

It will be explained, I'm sure. MidsMids is awesome like that. :D

Very good story

Now on with the writing, I wanna know what happens next

>>105589105589

>>105602105602

What, some diamond dogs aren't just allowed to randomly show up inside the soverign dragons' conclave? Surely they do it all the time...

I'm sure those kind dragons will find out from the one they questioned