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A noble earth-pony family, fallen somewhat on hard times, is killed in a mining accident. They leave behind a single male heir, who is in sore need of a guardian, and of protection. Celestia takes the young pony under her wing and delivers him not to ponies - not earth, unicorn or pegasus - but to a dragon, an ambassador, an old friend of hers.

Playing a game which may just be deadly to the uninformed, the dragon decides that the one path open to him to ensure the safety of his charge and to carry out his sworn duty, is to adopt.

First Published
13th Dec 2011
Last Modified
15th Apr 2012

Nice story, let's see where it goes...

Dragonforce based story? That's new.

Haven't really read the chapter yet but if you don't mind me asking, what have you done with your enter key? If it doesn't appear soon, I'm calling the cyber police.

Well it's a good idea overall, this is my first fanfic in a [very/i] long while i've read with OC's as a major character. I tend to avoid them out of biasness and the last time it did not end well, or start well, or have a particulary good middle section. Infact i read it and i was rather :derpyderp2: to it so with all that asiade let's look at this from the begining and see how well it fits together. The answer, SLOW DOWN.

You write suberply and everything flows wonderfully together. You are also one of the only people i have ever met who seem to know how to phrase dialouge like in a book on the internet so props off to you for that. I'd like a bit more of a description of the Ambassador and of Chip themselves but my biggest complaint is that you have so much happening at once in this chapter and it all goes by very quickly. I did enjoy reading it and will be continuing to do so as later chapters appear.  

THIS ISH IS GETTING TRACKED SO FUCKING HARD!!!

you know its good when its 5.0 in 7 rstings :pinkiegasp:

goodjob sir

A role reversal? A dragon rearing a pony foal? I love the concept and the execution seems sound so far. I'll keep an eye open for opportunities to quote Dragonforce, by the way :p

>>65432

I do intend to slow the pace down, right down. The initial hectic few scenes are to get things rolling. The board is set up, the opening moves of all players are standard and well known... but for one.

Wow i like how this is going so far :pinkiesmile:

and now all it needs is carpet bombing and more cow bell and it will become complete :pinkiehappy:

Love it. was a little worried going into it. just because i'm a little wary of OC stories. but this was definitelyworth it.

lovethe dragon. i won't say the 'chess' thing is overdone nowadays, but i will say there are too many charaacters who use it, and frankly, don't do it well. this is definitely NOT the case here. X3. love it, and i love just his characterization. the back and forth between cold/calculating and warm/caring (or at least thats what i see it as) was executed well.

definitely gonna track this. X3

>>66719

It's very easy to overdo the whole "trololo it's all a game of chess" - I really don't wish to rub the analogy in anypony's face so you won't hear too much about it. I would rather treat it as the ambassador himself treats it - he knows scheming plans are afoot, but he doesn't quite know what, therefore he does his best to prepare by sheltering his new charge the best way he sees fit.

Liking it thus far, will be tracking this one for sure

Please Sir, Can I have some more?:fluttercry::applecry::raritycry:

Another excellent chapter, the skydiving bit was hilariously awesome :twilightsmile:

Pardon me, but is there really a need to call him a dragon?

Yeah yeah, your story and all, but he is technically an Earth Pony. Even the blind could

see that. Other than that, I look forward to the next chapter.

Awesome!

This ish just got funny

>>67318

i think that's just the actual dragon being a troll to everyone else, that or draconic pride are my guesses. I just treat it like pinkie pie and roll with it. :pinkiehappy:

the hideous spectre of ‘bedmane’ :rainbowlaugh:

this is a interesting story, not sure if i've read one before where a dragon was raising someone of a different species before... not that i remember at least

Interesting idea with the multi-race school. I guess when you live in the boundary-lands of Equestria you get used to it.

Also, I agree with ForlanceAbice, it seems weird to call him a dragon, but I'm sure you have your reasons.

Guess i'll leave a comment on this one too. X3

first. The title. MY FAVORITE DRAGONFORCE SONG EVER.

anyway, love it. definitely was worth tracking. gonna say i like the whole, Sharptooth referring to Chip as a 'dragon.' i'm not gonna try to give reasons for it, its your story. but i like it. it makes Sharptooth a little deeper in character.

second(third?) best line of the whole story, "he licked his muzzle clean and devoured the rest in a bloodthirsty orgy of gastronomical destruction" jsut saying.

looking forward to more.

>>67322

Look, everyone knows that is an earth pony, but when a huge flying armored fire breathing killing machine with diplomatic immunity shows up with a kid in tow and tells you they are his kid, and thus a dragon, you generally don't belabor the point with him.

That said, I do like this premise, and the execution thus far. Seeing more of this will brighten my day.

I tried to click on chapter 3...Then I literally yelled out FU:yay:K Thanks for writing such a good chapter!

Welp, one more thing added to my tracked list...

Not bad, hhowever I didnt feel the dragonforce song as a title as it didn't rly fit the story, but then again that's just me.

Makes me wanna make a story about a gambling pony who finds love, but never put him in a casnio and call the first chapter "Ace of Spades":rainbowlaugh:

Toy Story references, you just have to love them.

:pinkiehappy: Wow! :pinkiehappy:

I love the idea, and the execution - and the "calling Chip a dragon" thing is really excellent - not just for Sharptooth's character, but for Chip's as he grows up. Can't wait to see more.

:twilightsmile: :raritystarry: :pinkiesmile: :rainbowlaugh: The ponies approve.

And Chip discovers the game "Kerplunk".

Mind you, without Tess and the Foley's transporters it's a limited version of the game.

Ahhhhh :fluttercry: Sharpie sounds like Dumbledore to me :raritycry:

>>68339

I like being a bit facetious with my titles, so you'll have to stretch for the meaning. It's not at all because I suck at them. :scootangel:

>>68403

Semantics, technicalities, contracts, inheritance... Chip lives in a magical world, Sharpie is a powerfully magical creature. He has his reasons.

>>68280

Clothing store spam? That's a new one.

>>67528

:pinkiehappy:

>>67318>>67528It probably signifies acceptance and belonging.  Simply put, Sharptooth is declaring that he views Chip as not just a member of his family, but as his own son, and not just as an outsider or add-on

This is definitely looking interesting.  I can't wait for more.:pinkiehappy:

I love it Midnight. Can't wait to see what happens.

Get more out soon please.

Track and 5*.

Well then. My only real complaint would be that this moves pretty fast, at least the first chapter does. Mostly, I have no earthly idea why Sharptooth would so willingly and whole-heartedly adopt an orphaned pony just like that. I expect that this will be gone into later, however, so benefit of the doubt and all.

But curses, you went the foal route, and that's instant like. :| I mean, Chip turning around three times before lying down? ADORABLE. And then there was the flying lesson.

"AAAAAAAA"

"Feel it in your wings!"

"AAAAAAAHHHHH!"

Fantastic. Also, Frostpepper is a GREAT name. Also FUK U FUK U FUK U

>>68464 eh, spam takes many forms though, yeah, don't see that too often

oh well, one less waste of text :rainbowdetermined2:

also the first spam i've seen on this site

>>69132

muwahahaaa, looks like I nyxed your plans to hate it then :rainbowlaugh:

...and I almost wish I hadn't used Frostpepper because yeah, great name (for once).

>>69184

saw the same thing on another story, same account. I think I need to tell Knighty...

This story is so cute!

>>69184

It sucks because I have that  on a blog post (not that anyone reads those) but yoy can't delete comments on a blog post.

*you (meaning I)

But anyways great story, I am really looking forward to reading more.

Confound these dragons, they drive me to feelings.

I do quite love this story and would submit y request for moar posthaste.

That was an awesome chapter, I for one think that treating chip like a dragon is a very interesting concept and will make for a great story.

Lol i was hoping he would start breathing fire XD

Oh Midnight, you and your 'being good at writing', whatever that is.

Another wonderful job.

This story sure stands out from others, can't wait to see where this leads.

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