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  • 133w, 2h
    The Endtimes Are Upon Us!

    So, we've come to the end. Near Death Experience was an immense pleasure to write. I've been completely overwhelmed by the piles of wonderful feedback I've gotten. I'm grateful for every single comment, even the negative ones. :) I even got a few pieces of fanart! You know you've made it when people like your story well enough to make art for it. That's the coolest feeling in the world.

    Near Death was very much a collaborative effort between my boyfriend and me. The fic's really special to us. Since we're in a long distance relationship, the bits about not being able to touch the person you love were a little bit poignant for us.

    We're already planning more fics, so I hope all the people who enjoyed Near Death will like our new ideas as well. :)

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  • 134w, 2d
    Got a question?

    http://askpalehoof.tumblr.com/

    Go on. He won't hurt ya! :D

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  • 134w, 4d
    So...

    As you may or may not know, I like to draw a little bit! You can see the link to my deviantART account over there on the sidebar.

    I was thinking of maybe starting an "Ask Pale Hoof" tumblr once Near Death wraps up. Since Ask Pony tumblrs seem to be very in vogue these days. Would anyone be interested in that?

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  • 136w, 4d
    Got my first thumbs down on Near Death.

    Not sure if legitimately did not like or if just trolling because I had no thumbs down.

    Not that I'm complaining, of course. After all, people are absolutely allowed to have their opinions!

    But at the same time, I find it kind of weird that a person clicked thumbs down and didn't comment on why. I'm definitely cool with criticism. And I understand that some people just don't like my story. That's fine. But if you're gonna thumbs-down, I'd really love to know why. Especially if it's something I can improve.

    This is why I don't really like ratings systems. Just saying "I like it" or "I don't like it" is not very helpful for a writer. It's helpful to hear what's working and what isn't.

    Anyway, yeah. I guess it boils down to this: if you're going to negatively rate my fic, please tell me why. That's not too much to ask, is it? I'm not fishing for comments -- I just want to know.

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  • 137w, 3d
    Holy cow!

    How did Near Death Experience get over 100 people tracking it? I'd feel lucky just to have 10 readers. This little story's really turned into something. XD

    I'd like to take a moment to thank my editor/co-writer and darling boyfriend, without whom Near Death would certainly not have existed. Pale Hoof, believe it or not, is his original character. He thought of with Pale Hoof's characterization and came up with some of his best lines during our brainstorming sessions. I always run every new chapter by him. So if you're a Pale Hoof fan, I suggest sending this awesome guy a "thank you": http://www.fimfiction.net/user/Noahjam325

    Thanks to everyone for all the positive feedback and encouragement.

    Love,

    Hadles

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Pinwheel is a simple earth pony. She lives in a little cottage outside Sweet Apple Acres, she makes pinwheels for a living, and she has plenty of friends. But one day, when she goes flying with her good pegasus pal Dizzy, she takes a fall and lands in the dark crossroads between life and death! If that's not bad enough, the Grim Reaper is forcing her to bargain for her life! And what will she do when that bargain takes a somewhat more...personal turn?

First Published
6th Feb 2012
Last Modified
6th Apr 2012
#1 · 141w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 17 ·

Pretty Sweet.

#2 · 141w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 17 ·

OH MY GOD. IT'S FINALLY HERE.

#3 · 141w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 17 ·

Sweet, I love this story.

#4 · 141w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 17 ·

Finally, what took you so long, jk. This has always been one of my favorite fics. I can't wait to see what happens next. i mean it's not like you can kill Death. I have a feeling Pale Hoof is gonna become mortal, based on the fan art, but hell I've been wrong before.

Peace Out.

#5 · 141w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 17 ·

>>191282 I see a tiny hole in your logic, if he becomes mortal there would be no death.

#6 · 141w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 4 ·

Wow I REALLY like this. Not great on grammer but as far as I could see you had no grammatical or spelling issues and over all a great story. Keep it up.

#7 · 141w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 17 ·

>>192890

Thank you for your comment! I would like to ask what you mean by "not great on grammar." Do you mean my sentence structure isn't varied enough? Or did you spot punctuation errors? I'd really like to know so I can fix it!

#8 · 141w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 17 ·

This is really good so far! I hope to see the next chapter come out real so!

#9 · 141w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 17 ·

@Hadles

Oh sorry my bad I ment "I" was not good at grammar.

#10 · 141w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 17 ·

>>192315

In many cultures there has always been more than one Grim Reaper especially if you look up western mythology, there are even some tales of a multiple reaper myth in Celtic folklore. If he's not death anymore I can see a new persona of death chosen as a replacement. Plus it would be funny/awkward to see Pale Hoof deal with things that don't die at his touche.

#11 · 141w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 17 ·

>>194230

Thanks for clarifying!

If you do find errors in the future, however, feel free to point them out. Mistakes sometimes slip past me and my pre-reader, so it's great when people help point them out.

#12 · 141w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 17 ·

@Hadles

No problem and I'll keep an eye out.

#13 · 141w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 7 ·

Oh my god. Could he think of a better way to die then oh I dont know... pukeing up your esophagus? Over all really good chapter and a little creepy on what his idea of romantic is, well he will lern I guess.

#14 · 141w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 8 ·

Poor fella all he wants is a little love, I can completly sympathise with him. Well execpt him being the god of death and me being a nerdy teenager.

#15 · 141w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 10 ·

Now aint that something. Really good on grammer and I could not find any spelling errors and over all very nice. Keep up the good work.

#16 · 141w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 16 ·

@Hadles

Well good chapter but I noticed a spelling error

"I DO NOT NEED TO PROVE MYSELF TO HERE."

Change "HERE" to "HER"

#17 · 141w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 16 ·

>>194961

Fixed! Thanks for the heads up!

#18 · 141w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 17 ·

Okay, just started but I have to say this, your Death speaks in caps AND italics, isn't that a little overboard?

#19 · 141w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 17 ·

>>195906

It changes to just all caps later on, if you keep reading.

#20 · 141w, 2d ago · 1 · · Chapter 13 ·

:facehoof: I was wondering who he was going to end up killing, sigh. The speech about how Diamond and Silver were going to die alone and unloved was badass man, nice work.

#21 · 141w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 17 ·

>>196211 My first comment was meant to be in a joking tone, don't sweat it. I like the way you separate his void and mortal plane voices with it.

So I was thinking about it, and it's similar to dating Rogue, except you'd have a little more leeway with her. Oh, and the cliffhanger...you bastard.

#22 · 140w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 18 ·

Dunn. Dunn...DUNNNNN

I can't wait for the next chapter, believe it or not you fic was he first Friendship is Magic fan fic that I actually ever read, I really hope that ending is amazing.

Also Twilight doesn't believe is ghost yet Death has been living in her town and he has also resurrected several things. Plus her own gods are tangible on a daily basis. Just saiyan.

Peace Out.

#23 · 140w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 18 ·

>>214218

Hey, thanks! Glad you're enjoying the fic.

As for Twilight, she also said "I don't believe in curses" and "I don't believe in Pinkie Pie's Pinkie Sense", so saying "I don't believe in ghosts" is still in character, I think!

Also, points for posting Jelly Pony. Best pony ever!

#24 · 140w, 5d ago · · · Chapter 18 ·

>>214383

I was just referring to the fact that all this supernatural stuff is happening and yet Twilight is unbelieving. It's be like you not believing in molten rock men from the center of the Earth and one just happens to be your room mate.

I just call him the jelly pervert.

#25 · 140w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 18 ·

This is definitely up there in my favorite fics!

Pale Hoof as a character is fascinating, and Pinwheel's bravery in the face of death is something I admire.

I demand more! :pinkiehappy:

#26 · 139w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 19 ·

Wow that was a twist im really wondering how the next chapter will go. Dang you have me by the throat dang these cliff hangers :pinkiegasp:

#27 · 139w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 19 ·

Well that was both a combination of awesome and depressing. I don't know if i should shed manly tears or beg for the next chapter. I oddly like the pairing of Pinwheel and Pale Hoof, and let's face it she is more awesome than the love child of Kenshiro and Sonny Chiba because she can talk down and yell at death. I like that he's all like *ROAR* FUCK YOU CELESTIA, but his love interest shows up and he's all meep and offering her godhood and all "yes dear".  I hope it works out for those crazy kids. i like a happy ending.  

#28 · 139w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 19 ·

You have me on the edge of my seat! :derpyderp2:

#29 · 139w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 19 ·

Easily the best pony story I have ever read.

#30 · 139w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 19 ·

>>244936

Thanks, baby. :heart:

You helped inspire it.

#31 · 139w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 19 ·

Things are getting serious! Please continue...:moustache:

#32 · 139w, 3d ago · · · Chapter 19 ·

It's pretty funny when gods try to fight death. They usually never win.:eeyup:

#33 · 139w, 2d ago · · · Chapter 19 ·

@Hadles

Wow...just wow. This was freakin amazing, one of the best things I've read in a long while.I can not wait to see what happens next.

#34 · 138w, 1d ago · · · Interlude ·

You feel really bad for Death at the end of this chapter. I love the back story of him once being a wide-eyed young colt to becoming a true god and his detachment from his old life and animosity towards Celestia. Speaking of Celestia she starts yelling at Pale Hoof and forgets that her immortality can be taken away by him.  I will say this I really miss the humor and lightheartedness of some of the earlier chapters.

peace out.

#35 · 138w, 1d ago · · · Interlude ·

This is amazing. I loved this chapter. Please keep the updates coming. :pinkiehappy:

#36 · 138w, 1d ago · · · Interlude ·

Wow that was an interesting chapter i am already wishing i could read the next chapter great work /)

#37 · 138w, 1d ago · · · Interlude ·

I read this all in one night, now i must sleep thank you for the amazing read. longest story ive read on thins site.

#38 · 137w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 21 ·

Oh that ain't no hobo!

#39 · 137w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 21 ·

woman you are facing death himself and you call him a hobo

you monster!!

#40 · 137w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 21 ·

This is like a better version of the movie Meet Joe Black. I love how Pale Hoof had a hard time controlling the volume of his voice. This is my favorite personification of Death. He's unsure of himself, stubborn, emotionally distant and yet when he meets a certain female it twist turns his life upside down. I find this story extremely heartwarming, grim, sad, funny and endearing. I mean we laughed, we felt d'awww, we threw up, and we were thrilled whilst reading this fic.

Months ago this was literally the very first fan fic I had ever read and now I'm a little bummed out that it is almost over; I know it sounds weird to grow attached to a story.

Peace Out and I can't wait for your next fic.

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#41 · 137w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 21 ·

this won't end well

#42 · 137w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 21 ·

>>291911

No worries, friend. We've still got a little ways to go before we reach our conclusion.

And there may or may not be a sequel in the works.:raritywink: So don't feel too sad just yet!

#43 · 137w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 21 ·

>>292507

If it's any consolation, I'd like to put on my best Cockney accent and say "Thanks for the ride gov'na, it's been one hell of a journey."

When it's over, I shall post this gif and give you the full review, that covers most of this fic.

  

Peace Out.

  

#44 · 137w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 21 ·

>>292507

A sequel will most definitely be appreciated.

#45 · 137w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 21 ·

>>292801

Well, I'll keep everyone here posted. My editor and I have to work out the details first, but we're definitely considering writing a sequel. :pinkiehappy:

#46 · 137w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 21 ·

So what, is Pale Hoof giving up being death to become a hobo?

#47 · 137w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 5 ·

While nothing about them suggested unkindness, there was no way to predict how they'd react to an unusually tall pony with a skull for a face. There was no way to predict how anyone would react, really.

That says it all, really.  :pinkiehappy:  This is a great story, I'm really enjoying it so far!  

#48 · 137w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 21 ·

i get it, no face no real atachment so; when that not work the "keep it real and sincere" deal. Oh mr death you are going to the right path (hoofs up¡¡¡)

#49 · 137w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 9 ·

Oh my gosh.  This chapter.  Morbidly hilarious!  I think my favorite part was "IT'S FINE. EVERYPONY WILL GET USED TO IT."

#50 · 137w, 4d ago · · · Chapter 10 ·

I have to admit, when I read the synopsis I was not terribly interested, and eventually I concede to reading the first chapter. I figured I was going to go to bed in about 15 minutes, so it couldn't do any harm. :facehoof:

Two hours later, I finish part one. I'm horribly amused, thank you for the story!

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