While the glove was cool, it really only worked with racing games an, funnily enough, that one aircraft game that was impossible to land on with the normal control.
9658420 lol why I used it and thought it was pretty funny XD Plus was listening to the Avgn while writing the first chapter while he talked about the power glove and it just kind of wrote it in, before deciding I need to use this later XD
9658420 It also for some reason seems to be useful against dark link at the end of Zelda 2 for since AVNG was able to beat said boss by waving his hand around with his back turned to the tv.
This has been a very interesting read. I love the writing, which makes me all the more torn about how silly the premise was. But we're here now, at the heart of the matter, as it were. Let's see where it goes.
9658860 Heh well I'm glad you like it even if the concept seems Silly X3, i try and do a good job, and there will be more to come with this. The story going to be around 30,000 words
I will say that this is an interesting story. But it needs some work. The grammar and spelling could use improvement.
Take this paragraph for example.
“Well, I guess this makes me your master also Luna,” Spike said his eyes glowing and it seemed like his body was being filled with more energy, his mind-expanding as he groaned his eyes changing color, as they looked different gone was his beautiful emerald green eyes. They had gone on to become gold and silver each eye.
Here’s a few corrections I’ve made.
”Well, I guess this makes me your master too, Luna,” Spike said, his eyes glowing and it seemed like his body was being filled with more energy. His mind expanding as he groaned, his eyes changing color as they looked different. Gone were his beautiful emerald green eyes. They had gone on to become gold and silver in each eye.
9658886 Not the concept, but the way it started. Why the heck did Celestia make such a bet when she seems otherwise against the whole situation? That's what I mean by 'Well, here we are. Let's enjoy the ride', lol. That said, Luna's chapter was adorable, I hope to see more gaming with her.
9659048 Heh yeah, though I was when writing imagining that she was doing this cause she figured she would win, and she wanted to do what she thought was right, heh, and I'll try and have some gamer luna XD It was a fun chapter to write that's for sure Sometimes people do things without thinking heh.
9659018 Yeah, it definitely does seem better heh. I should've given it more of a look over than what i did. I do apologize and will try and do a lot better on the next chapters. and please have an amazing day
Not what I was expecting... I was kinda hoping after winning he'd make her blow him. Since I kinda saw it as his initiation ritual, but that can happen next chapter.
Even if it meant that he didn’t have hot water for later. [...] That was when the water began to get colder, distracting as he looked around some, while it seemed like it was bringing him back into reality.
Maybe he could order Celestia to heat the water for him. I mean, for someone who controlls the very sun that wouldn't he that hard.
Then again… It wasn’t like most of the royal guard would do anything a lot of them seemed to be incompetent about things and probably would think it was frosting. Really the only one that Spike knew who could do his job and whoop some ass had been his big brother Shining Armor.
How would he react? Would he be disgusted? Or rather something like this: "Good job, Spike! If you want to, I can give you hints on how to play with an princess. I have experience with that, you know."
Spike just watched them more, and couldn’t help but imagine what they did on their free time. But he couldn’t help but imagine some of them just fucking each other, or wanting to fuck Celestia. The way their eyes moved watching them pass. He could imagine them looking at the ruler's Plot. he’d had to remember this for later.
What could he be thinking? Hmmm...
Luna stared at it for a second before looking to Spike. Her expression was truly that of an angry, and overprotective sister.
Careful, she can give you nightmares. Literally.
I would become the servant for as long as you desire.
Isn't Celestia's spell limited to one year? Then Luna is making an big risk, considering how long dragons can live.
Luna should probably have at least asked how long Celestia would be under Spikes control before betting away her own freedom indefinitely. Man would she have been embarrased if it was just for a week.
Then again, she did seem confident that she wouldn't lose so probably didn't consider things too hard.
While the glove was cool, it really only worked with racing games an, funnily enough, that one aircraft game that was impossible to land on with the normal control.
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lol why I used it and thought it was pretty funny XD Plus was listening to the Avgn while writing the first chapter while he talked about the power glove and it just kind of wrote it in, before deciding I need to use this later XD
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Also the game was top gun
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Was pretty sure it was that, though Hot Shots was also going through my head.
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It also for some reason seems to be useful against dark link at the end of Zelda 2 for since AVNG was able to beat said boss by waving his hand around with his back turned to the tv.
This has been a very interesting read. I love the writing, which makes me all the more torn about how silly the premise was. But we're here now, at the heart of the matter, as it were. Let's see where it goes.
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Heh well I'm glad you like it even if the concept seems Silly X3, i try and do a good job, and there will be more to come with this. The story going to be around 30,000 words
I may not be a Mario fan, but I respect it/him, unlike a sorten block game. And Luna had chose poorly.
I will say that this is an interesting story. But it needs some work. The grammar and spelling could use improvement.
Take this paragraph for example.
Here’s a few corrections I’ve made.
See where you can improve?
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Not the concept, but the way it started. Why the heck did Celestia make such a bet when she seems otherwise against the whole situation? That's what I mean by 'Well, here we are. Let's enjoy the ride', lol. That said, Luna's chapter was adorable, I hope to see more gaming with her.
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Heh yeah, though I was when writing imagining that she was doing this cause she figured she would win, and she wanted to do what she thought was right, heh, and I'll try and have some gamer luna XD It was a fun chapter to write that's for sure Sometimes people do things without thinking heh.
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Yeah, it definitely does seem better heh. I should've given it more of a look over than what i did. I do apologize and will try and do a lot better on the next chapters. and please have an amazing day
What kind of things do you plan to do to them?
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You'll see, hehe it's definetly going to be fun
Kinda clichè the path you've chosen to go down, not to say I'm uninterested by this chain of events. Can't wait to see the next few chapters.
Reference detected.
Error luna that did not know that Spike is a Speedrun
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Thanks for letting me know ill fix those
Not what I was expecting... I was kinda hoping after winning he'd make her blow him. Since I kinda saw it as his initiation ritual, but that can happen next chapter.
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trust me I have a good plan for luna XD it won't be disapointing
Maybe he could order Celestia to heat the water for him.
I mean, for someone who controlls the very sun that wouldn't he that hard.
How would he react?
Would he be disgusted? Or rather something like this:
"Good job, Spike! If you want to, I can give you hints on how to play with an princess. I have experience with that, you know."
What could he be thinking? Hmmm...
Careful, she can give you nightmares. Literally.
Isn't Celestia's spell limited to one year? Then Luna is making an big risk, considering how long dragons can live.
I like this story, and this chapter was fun to read.
I have this odd feeling of someone dipping their mismatched claws into the whole affair... ;]
Luna should probably have at least asked how long Celestia would be under Spikes control before betting away her own freedom indefinitely. Man would she have been embarrased if it was just for a week.
Then again, she did seem confident that she wouldn't lose so probably didn't consider things too hard.