THIS STORY IS SO AWESOME! It's inspired me to add more romance to the story I'm doing (Sorry it's not a Human crossover thing I sarted this before I become a brony.) The suspense is killing me and I hope Fluttershy doesn't get hurt. Why would people want to hurt souch a majestic creature like her? If she gets hurt then I'll.....I'll.......I'll....... But anyways lovely story and I'm waiting for next chapter.
IF SHE GETS HURT BY CELESTIA'S WHITNESS I WILL KILL THEM ALL!
1063170You said somthing about fluttershy losing some of her innocence.... It better be not what I'm thinking it will be or there will be ..... Accidents happening to people....
Oh ok, I would've replied faster but I was playing Fighting is Magic. Anyways, I just want Dave to put an end to it all and they can just go to school in peace. I doubt it will never happen but You just said Fluttershy gets harmed. Di-Didn't I-I-I ju-just say that I will ki-. I hope it isn't to a point where she can't do something anymore. You have the type of wwriting skills I want. You make a good description of everything and it really touches my heart, and I hope there is a happy ending. I want to email you this story I'm writing and I want your honest oppinion and give me some ideas. If you don't it's ok I know you want to write the storie and I want you to aswell.
WHY DID I NOT SEE THIS UNTIL NOW? MOAR, I SAY! *flies to America, buys 3 grand's worth of ordinance.* Those fuckers had better not touch Flutters. Rainbow will have a lot of explaining to do.
SCREW THIS! I HAD IT UP TO HERE (show short temper) WITH THESE ASSHOLES! I BESTOW THE POWER OF SUPER SAYIAN TO DAVE! NOW GO KICK THEIR ASSES! Dave turns SSJ1. Does Super Kamehameha. It Super Effective.
Aside from the rage I get from this. This story deserves a 4/5 mustache . It a good story that gives the readers enough rage to break the 4th wall, but it's not an Epic. Also did I mention the small grammar errors.
Pitched this together in 2 hours. Help me correct anything, and enjoy the cliffhangar.
If you feel i should make fluttershy get hurt, i will. I don't want to, but if it appeals to you guys.
DON't
U
FUCKING
HURT
FLUTTERSHY
OR
I
WILL
END YOU
I hope I made my point very clear
1062869 Well.. sadly.. I must say she receives some pain in the next chapter. I had no choice..
Well I have no choice but to break the 4th wall and stop this madness
1062901 Dam son, It won't be that bad. You gotta have feels man.
I hope rainbow is just gonna betray those douche bags.....
1063002 I plan to throw rainbow into the next chapter, but for now she avoids fluttershy and Dave, because she feels extremely guilty.
1063006 phew... I hope they all get the camnden treatment and have one of there fingers broken
1063029 I also forgot to mention fluttershy lost a part of her innocence, and she is now in a state of serious depression. SPOILER ALERT!
THIS STORY IS SO AWESOME! It's inspired me to add more romance to the story I'm doing (Sorry it's not a Human crossover thing I sarted this before I become a brony.) The suspense is killing me and I hope Fluttershy doesn't get hurt. Why would people want to hurt souch a majestic creature like her? If she gets hurt then I'll.....I'll.......I'll....... But anyways lovely story and I'm waiting for next chapter.
IF SHE GETS HURT
BY CELESTIA'S WHITNESS
I
WILL
KILL
THEM
ALL!
Anyways I rate this 5 spikes out of 5
1063090 Haha, Ok. But remember, it does have a sad title... so be prepared for that.
1063083 NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOIOOOOO if they were in London and people found out that they did that, NO MATTER WHO YOU ARE, you're as good as dead.
1063160 Nah, it wont be to bad.
But still for writing a good story so far you deserve this *hands life size swag bannana..... Enjoy
1063202 Thanks, I suppose. Chapter 4 should be out tommorow night.
1063170You said somthing about fluttershy losing some of her innocence....
It better be not what I'm thinking it will be or there will be ..... Accidents happening to people....
1063235 NO IT'S NOT CLOP.
Plus I will make u step on lego
1063290 Lol, ok.
Will we see fluttercruel in the story?
1063314 Fluttershy being hurt? Yes, if thats what your asking. But no, fluttershy wont go on a psycotic rant.. at least not yet.
DUN
DUN
DUN!!!!
1063652 Chapter 4 will involve some scissor blood.
I bet I know which pony is your Favorite..... Pinkie Pie
JK ITS SO OBVIOUS
Oh yeah and chapter 4 will be out by... Roughly
1063704 Tommorow night, maybe earlier, depending on my mood.
i'll be Bracing my self.
>> Zornia
Oh ok, I would've replied faster but I was playing Fighting is Magic. Anyways, I just want Dave to put an end to it all and they can just go to school in peace. I doubt it will never happen but You just said Fluttershy gets harmed. Di-Didn't I-I-I ju-just say that I will ki-. I hope it isn't to a point where she can't do something anymore. You have the type of wwriting skills I want. You make a good description of everything and it really touches my heart, and I hope there is a happy ending. I want to email you this story I'm writing and I want your honest oppinion and give me some ideas. If you don't it's ok I know you want to write the storie and I want you to aswell.
Peace.
MOAR
FOR THE LOVE OF EVERYTHING HOLY GIVE ME MOAR
1064321 Wait for tonight.
1066682Scissor blood....!
Oh god I know what you mean because it happend to me before
I'M COMING FLUTTERSHY!!!!!!!!
*takes out AK47*
WHY DID I NOT SEE THIS UNTIL NOW? MOAR, I SAY!
*flies to America, buys 3 grand's worth of ordinance.*
Those fuckers had better not touch Flutters. Rainbow will have a lot of explaining to do.
1066973 right behind u mate * gets in apache attack helicopter and follows sierra seven *
1067073 I have piloted a Trafalgar-class nuclear submarine, those arseholes stand no chance. "Rainbow, fire ze missiles!"
1067099 sorry I'm busy getting my friendship cannon ready to fire
I'm gonna be off for awhile, working on chapter 4. Have fun waiting.
Finished chapter 4, reply before tonight, and i'll post.
SCREW THIS! I HAD IT UP TO HERE (show short temper) WITH THESE ASSHOLES! I BESTOW THE POWER OF SUPER SAYIAN TO DAVE! NOW GO KICK THEIR ASSES!
Dave turns SSJ1. Does Super Kamehameha. It Super Effective.
Aside from the rage I get from this. This story deserves a 4/5 mustache . It a good story that gives the readers enough rage to break the 4th wall, but it's not an Epic. Also did I mention the small grammar errors.
“You are to Shy.”
i believe it's "too" not "to".
*extends hand/hoof into the air*
HIEL GRAMMER!!!