Oh Lyra, you and humans....

Am I the only one who saw the hand on top of the 'u' in 'human' as an "I'm?"

This.Gonna.Be.GOOOOD

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Hmm, interesting story so far. Tracked.

Wonderful. Absolutely wonderful. Fav'd.

Also:

“You’ve show this to four other studios?”

“You’ve shown this to four other studios?”

On your marks, get set, awesome!

I must say it's an interesting idea, a bit cliche but you pull it off well.  I'm interested to see where this goes.  Good luck.

To quote Scoots " I'm liking this idea."

Where's that 'dis gun be good' gif when you need it?

Following with great interest, greatly enjoyed this chapter.

One mistake though, "You’re show, doofus." this should be 'your', not 'you are'.

inb4 awesome

Oh, this is going to be interesting. Awesome and interesting.

"This is NOT a humans in Equestria story"

Then why the fuck did you add an HiE tag?

>>11662681166268

There are still human elements in there. I wasn't sure if I should keep it or not.

>>11662741166274 Only add the Human tag if the story involves a human physically going to Equestria.

>>11662791166279

Fair enough, I'll get rid of it.

This. This turns me on in ways a fic shouldn't.

>>11662791166279

Or presumably if using humanised ponies?

>>11828221182822 It turns you on?

>>11828631182863 Well written fics always turn me on.

>>11662681166268

No, he added a "Human" tag. There is no "HiE" tag. There are humans in the story in some way or another, thusly it should have a Human tag.

new chapter

SG, do you have someone doing spellchecking and editing? If not, please consider enlisting some help on that front. This is a very interesting and original idea that's unfortunately somewhat marred by a hoofful handful dammit, now I'm doing it of easily-avoided errors.

I don't know. The whole HiE thing really is debatable. Technically there are 'humans' in 'Equestria', so i would leave it.

>>11829641182964 ha, and I WANTED THAT POSITION!

i always love to spell/grammar check people's work :)

P.s. BOW DOWN TO ME, MINION!

Desperate Housemares? LOL!

I'm just not sure why this chapter is called "Development Hell" when the show hasn't even entered pre-production, but go on, we enjoy the trip!

Wait. . . the ponies are watching a show about humans and we're watching them watch it?! The next thing to happen would be a show about ponies in the show about humans being watched by ponies being watched by humans! HOW MUCH DO THEY KNOW!? Wait. . . is something watching us right now?!

>>11853061185306

Yo Dawg

>>11853081185308 AAAAAGGGHHHHH!!!!! -Jumps twenty feet straight up and through the roof-

"...with a wise ass smirk..."

I find this line interesting for two reasons:

1. The swear kinda came out of left field. I would consider changing it.

2. Are you from New York, by any chance?

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But seriously... get a proofreader.

That ending warmed my heart.

>>11974331197433

Your comment warmed mine

...

I'm so sorry.

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Seriously adorable fic.

“Hey, you’re only human.”

HAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA

...

Anyway, as good as this fic is, it looks like it's heading for some serious Lyra/Bon shipping, and fast. Maybe it's just me, but it seems a little bit out of place (but it's probably just me).

People reading a story about ponies watching a show about people

MEMECEPTION

>>12454671245467

Yo Dawg

>>12456111245611

Ohoho. Tracking this and reading it sometime I can actually read.

Sarah Wall, Claire Corlett, and Peter New must be three of the people.

This story is good! There are some grammar issues, but that's about all that is wrong. Also I c wat u did in the picture!

>>11853061185306 Go read the infinite alternate universe theory. You can't ever unhear it. Ever.

On another note (the story's note, that is), I think this is good, and your 101 likes straight seem to think so too.

Really enjoying this concept, and the characterizations. It's been a while since I've read anything with a happy/funny Lyra, so this is a breath of fresh air for me.

You gets a fave and a like from me. Onward to the next chapter!

Well, this is shaping up to a be a pretty decent story. Like the pre-reader quote on EQD said, it's a good take on the 'Lyra is obsessed with humans' trope and the humor is pretty good. The comedy isn't all-encompassing, but more like a spice - it gives it a little extra flavor.  My one critique would be the shipping - I was going to say it seems out of place, but I'm not sure it's even that. It's more like it just seems to come out of nowhere. At no point in their interactions did I get the sense of deeper romantic feelings going on, but you're dropping all these rather unsubtle hints. It doesn't quite add up to me.

But aside from that, I found this to be a nice, mellow and rather enjoyable fic!

You know the comments people give sometimes that consist of just the word 'more (sometimes MOAR) and a bunch of exclamation points? Yeah, I think I am starting to understand why they do that. This fic is just so charming and yet, there just isn't enough of it yet. So...more please.

New follower here!

>>11662791166279 Jeez, why'd you have to be a twat about it?

>>13296141329614 Its just what I do.

>>13294811329481

Forgetting the whole "LyraxBonBon is fanon" thing, sometimes relationships...just happen.

GIMME MORE.

I likededed this.

"Bon Bon took one last bite of her muffin" That's the only error I caught.

Hey look, it got on EqD!

Question: Will Fausticorn make a cameo in this story? Since it seems to be a bit of a parody is of Friendship is Magic's development, that would be awesome.

At any rate, great story so far! Not too much yet, but I can see how this got on EQD.

Phenomenal story thus far (I say that to just about every author, but still)

Small grammar, though:

Ditzy poked her head pasted Lyra,

I think should be

Ditzy poked her head pasted Lyra,

This concept is so great I just had to like and fav the moment I saw the synopsis! Now gimme moar!!!

When I saw my name as one of the humans, I nearly fainted.

Oh lord, I want to see how this turns out

This is really shaping up well, I can't wait to see more!

That was a great first start. Hope this continues to pace well ^^ well off to the next part for me!

Personally, I thought the Lyra = Human thing was dead as soon as it sprung up. But this actually makes it good, and original. It's a bit mispelled, but, either way, I think it's awesome.

If I had a nickel for every time there was a story, comic, animation, drawing, or <i>anything</i> made in the brony fandom with one little thing in it that ruins the rest, I'd be as rich as Romney, without all the hard work. I mean seriously, <i>why</i>? It's like a tall glass of warm milk with a little piece of scum in it. It would be as perfect as the show without the stupid F/F shipping, the needless vulgarity, etc. I suppose I should just expect it so I don't get so disappointed.

And the theme song!  She'll need a theme song!  Lessee, just, off the top of my head, totally original melody, use your imagination...

I'm only human, I'm only human

Dah dah dah dahhh…

I'm only human!

I used to wonder what was wrong with me

(I'm only human)

But then you showed our commonality!

Building futures

Living fast

Becoming mature

Learn from the past

Solving problems

Nothing's ever free

But by defeating fear I see

That we're only human

You know we should maybe start our own band!

Perfect.

>>13329431332943

Someone give this man a sandwich!

>>13329561332956

Someone give this man something he wants!

Hmmm, this has potential. A lot of it.

Consider yourself tracked, sir.

are u going to give the humans pets?

bwcause if you are maybe you should do a poll

but that can wait till later

HumanDaily?

That site would be good..... Seriously, this story is epic. I like the way everything is portrayed and I...just...

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>>11853061185306  I am a sapient jellyfish, and I am watching you watching ponies.  

>>13414331341433 . . . -Snaps fingers and multiple mid air glowing green spell circles form- BURN IN HELLFIRE WITCH !!! -Releases sea of green fire-

Get behind ye Satan, you are not thinking as god thinks but as ponies do.>>13414331341433

BTW MOAR!!!!!!!!!!!!

oh crud I put the quotes in the wrong order

>>12454671245467 way to pull an abed

Loving this so far, definitely looking forward to more!

The more I read the story the more I liked it! Keep it up!

Gratz on EQD!

This is shaping up to an interesting story. And seeing the future chapter titles in your last blog post, I can take a guess about the direction this will go from here, and I think I'm going to like it. It's definitely unique, and it benefits from its faster pace. Also a very different take on Bon Bon's character, which is a good thing.

Eagerly awaiting your next update.

Hm. Different. Good advice, too.

'Cuddly Kittens.'

I'd watch that.

Whil overall this is pretty good, there are two things which really annoy me.

1. Derpy. You wrote her all wrong. She's supposed to be clumsy, kind of little kiddish, and she definitely doesn't talk that eloquently.

2. Lyra/Bon-Bon shipping. Why does this ship exist? They aren't together that much in the show, so why?

That aside, I think i would give 3.9 stars.

HER. NAME. IS. DERPY!!!

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I will begrudgingly track this story, because it amuses me

So, does this mean we're all really just a figment of Lyra's imagination?

>>13958041395804

Nah, all but six of us are fan made OC's or background humans.

>>13962241396224 Wait. What does that make me?

>>13980301398030

I think legally you are Lauren Faust now. Or maybe her second cousin or something. I'm not that familiar with alternate dimensional genealogy or Pony/Human inceptual copyright laws...

What I DO know is I can't wait for the next chapter.

>>13985561398556 Well... Lauren and I do have similar hair... red.

>>13985651398565

Then the transformation has already begun...

So the fic isn't dead right? Coming on the one month anniversary of it

>>14716161471616

Check the blog, mate. I've been busy as hell with uni. Good news is I'm almost out.

>>14731691473169

Phew, thanks for the update, and sorry for doubting you. Wishing you as much luck in your college endeavours as me!

>>14766031476603

Appreciated. I'm thankful for everybody being so patient.

All I can say is that it's going to be worth the wait.

Hope the next chapter is long and "worth the wait" as you said

So the moment I open this story, Pandora decides to play Human After All by Daft Punk. I think it's gaining both sentience and a sense of humor...

(Also, can't help but note a bit of irony that the story seems to have delayed at Development Hell )

Anyway, looks neat.

this chapter... WORTH THE WAIT!

A muscular journalist named Clark who has a good heart I smell superman

Hurrah, it updated!  A new chapter for a new year.  

Bon Bon, whenever it comes to a board of esteemed older ponies, they probably are plotting to kill you.  Make room for a dead horse's (human's? If they could find one) head in bed.

Also, your Cone of Silence isn't working!

Woo for updates! Can't wait to see where you take this story.

Whoa that was some comeback by Synergy.

and the title of the next chapter screams trouble.

Good to see this again and nice job!

Dang, playing hardball is going to hurt when they miss a swing.

So. . .

Who wants to go Executive Huntiiiiiiing~♫

Finally!  Yes, keep it up!

I had thought that I HADN'T faved this one, then BLAM! Here it is.