Scootaloo has a dream: to surprise Rainbow Dash on her birthaversery by finally learning to fly. Predictably, this doesn't go so well. Ready to resign herself to being an earthbound Pegasus, her last hope comes in the form of Fluttershy.
But what can Fluttershy teach her that everypony else has failed to do? The answer may come from one key thing the two have in common: dyspraxia.
A slice of life fic with secondary romance elements. Rated T for brief discussion of death.
Cover art (and inspiration) provided by John Joseco. Find out his work at: https://www.deviantart.com/johnjoseco
Edit: 07/01/2019 - Story in the feature box with mature content filter turned on! Thanks to all my readers and editors for making this happen!
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hmmmm, yes *sniff* good story
Love this so much
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Glad you did! It's been too long since I wrote something truly heartwarming, and it looks like it worked =D. Thanks for the comment!
Awesome, and provides a possible reason why Scootaloo has trouble
Awww, this was so sweet!
I feel like the relationship between Fluttershy and rainbow Dash could have ben presented earlier, or at least foreshadowed, as well as the fact that Scootaloo lives alone, but you definitely did bettet than i could ever do! I wanna see a sequel now :3
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Much of this fic wasn't planned out in the rigid structure, but I did go back and add the scene between Dash and Pinkie Pie to give the Flutter/Dash elements more grounding. I usually don't write romances that are secondary to the plot, but I suppose it's a learning experience for me :P.
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Maybe i was just focusing on the wrong things, even though, this was still a joy to read!
Will you do a sequel?
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I don't usually plan sequals. I may do at some point, but for now this is just a one shot.
Also, don't sell yourself short with critiques. Your perspective is valid and will help me improve ;). For now, I've got chapters of unfinished fics to work on!
Diamond Tiara is an earth pony though.
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...How the heck did I miss that? I'll fix that immediately, thanks!
Great story.
And I too suffer from dyspraxia, so I know how you feel.
I’m a huge sucker for this trio (Rainbow, Fluttershy, and Scootaloo) pairing stories and your work is one of the best I’ve read of said genre. The emotions all felt real and the setup for why Scootaloo wasn’t able to fly were BRILLIANTLY done. (Even the inclusion of the FlutterDash shipping I found was well done). Excellent fic.
I like the head-cannon on her reason not being able to fly. Everyone likes a shipping and a 'adopt-a-loo' story... but if it wasn't for those two elements... I bet this could be an actual episode, Scoots just needs a alternate way to fly :)
I love scoot-adopt stories, and FutterDash :3 Just gota be realistic if was an episode.
Small edit :/ Noticed you have 'Diamond Tiara' using magic. =x Pretty sure she's an earth pony...
=o Could always be an AU though hehe...
What a wonderful story.
I like a lot of the ideas in this and I enjoyed the Flutterdash family too
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Yeah, a previous comment mentioned that. I need to fix that. My mistake! Thanks for the feedback, though.
I could make it an AU and have her use telekenesis ;). Legit though, ty for the observation =3.
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Sure. I hope I didn't come across as rude. I didn't mean to sound abrupt, or anything, I just sort of jotted it down when I thought about it.
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Nah, it's okay! 'Twas a genuine error on my part. Thanks for the feedback :).
Nice, though the romance aspect feels a trifle rushed.
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It wasn't initially planned to be included at all, so I went back and added a few bits and pieces to try and make it work.
Tis a consequence of it being secondary, really.
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Fair enough. I’m probably biased anyway, I like drawn out love stories for whatever reason.
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Nah, it's a fair critique. I discussed it with my editor piror to publishing; hence why I added the scene between Pinkie and Dash. I've only written one other romantic story that didn't end up in sex, so perhaps I should do more shipping of the SFW variety :P.
This paragraph, well they whole situation that prompts it ruins the story.
This isn't so much a romance as an unrequited attraction using any available method to "get a date". The use of self deprecating language that provokes your crush defending you from you, as well as guilt tripping and working different angles, well, that's pretty textbook gaslighting.
The behavior rainbow is displaying is (in the real world) a warning sign of potential abusers.
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I've personally been 'they chaser' in a situation of unrequited attraction for several years. It made interaction awkward and caused plenty of heartache for myself and my friend. It eventually ended when I matured enough to leave it well alone and eventually got over it.
What rainbow in this story is doing, will only make the situation worse .
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I'm downvoting this story because the dynamic shown between rainbow and flutters belongs in an rgre dominance fic, Not a fluffy heartwarmer
Glad you mentioned this story of yours over on Twitter!
It's refreshing to see a story give a reasonable explanation for Scootaloo's trouble flying. I honestly haven't read any stories that tackle the issue as well as yours did. I imagine your personal experience with dyspraxia helped in describing the issue, but the way you adapted it to the concept of pegasus flight must have taken some work.
While reading the story I did notice that there are some places here and there that could use some minor spelling or grammar tweaks. This one in particular caught my attention:
I believe the word here should be "following" instead of "fallowing."
In any case, thanks for writing this heartwarming story!
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Fixed, thank you for the feedback :).
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Yikes! Thanks for bringing this to my attention. While the next line has Fluttershy scolding Rainbow Dash for thinking like this, this absolutely falls into the camp of "unfortunate implications". I'll chat with my editor to see how I can change the line to remove said implications.
I'm confused... What does that have to do with anything?
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At the time of the edit, if you turned on the mature content filter, it was in the feature box. My first story to do so. That's about it.
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Thank you so much for the glowing review!
This has been in my read-it-later for weeks.
I'm glad I finally took the time! This was very good. I love Scootafly stories.
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This is one of those cases where everything just came together nicely. Partly based on my own experiences with Dyspraxia, plus being such a nerd I learn the technical details of any given subject? It pleases me to a great extent that it all worked out so well =D.
This is a great tale with Fluttershy teaching Scoots how to fly. The Flutterdash and Scootadopt aspects are a added bonus for me though it may have made the story a little crowded and loss a little focus
It’s Pegasi not pegusi.
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That's something I fix in my newer stories.
beautiful!