are all the weapons going to be the same in the picture if so what are all of the names of them and who they belong to. ps: I kinda like the current sword spike has now.
9871806 I still haven’t figured that out. And the sword, it’s gonna have more of an aspect than the picture shows. And concerning the girls, I also don’t know.
9871818 Oh. I just realized it did look like one. Thanks for pointing that out. I’m thinking the sword would have a type of sword art, but also have the ability to hide itself
9959704 Here's an example of how you could expand on just the opening
Today would be the day, he knew it. He'd waited anxiously for the mail to be delivered. He'd pace until he was sure nothing was coming, but he knew that smile. The young man raced outside to meet the mail carrier outside and was met by a big smile. "Good morning Mr. Drago."
"Good morning Derpy. Please tell me I have mail." Spike Drago, that was the name of the excited 17-year-old boy who could barely stand still.
"As a matter of fact, yes I do!" She reached into her bag and pulled out a letter, the seal on it shined brighter than the sun to him. The two swords crossed over a gold seal was the very symbol of the Royal Knight Academy.
Just a tiny thing, but you build up onto the character and his personality easily. Another recommendation would be to keep the spaces made with [hr] to large distances of time or moving from one place to another
I'd like to see this done well and that you take the feedback at all is a big step.
10088063 Hey, thank you for liking this story, I am working on the new chapter, just having a bit of time trying to figure out how the girls are going to talk
I see a little TwiSpike moment is starting early in this chapter. You sir got me hooked.
Might have to change that sword.
9858176
Just trying to do my best with my favorite ships.
9858223
We will see. i don't know what to do yet with spike
Ok you got me, now I want to read more. And nice choice on the pic for the girls.
9865176
Thank you, and I'm glad you're enjoying the story so far
are all the weapons going to be the same in the picture if so what are all of the names of them and who they belong to.
ps: I kinda like the current sword spike has now.
9871806
I still haven’t figured that out. And the sword, it’s gonna have more of an aspect than the picture shows. And concerning the girls, I also don’t know.
9871811
ok the sword kinda reminds me of a keyblade though
9871818
Oh. I just realized it did look like one. Thanks for pointing that out. I’m thinking the sword would have a type of sword art, but also have the ability to hide itself
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ok
9959704
Here's an example of how you could expand on just the opening
Just a tiny thing, but you build up onto the character and his personality easily. Another recommendation would be to keep the spaces made with
[hr]
to large distances of time or moving from one place to anotherI'd like to see this done well and that you take the feedback at all is a big step.
9960583
Thank you for the advice, i will keep that in mind.
Just wanted to give everybody an update that the intro in Chapter 1 has been edited. Thank you 9960583 for the advice
This was a cute chapter Was hope there's more ( no rush).
10088063
Hey, thank you for liking this story, I am working on the new chapter, just having a bit of time trying to figure out how the girls are going to talk
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