INTERESTED TO SE WHERE THIS GOES

good chapter.

Not to sound critical, but at the end

“Yes, can you please show Mr.Drago around the school?” When Twilight heard that name all she could say was “S-spike?” Spike then turned around and when he saw Twilight he just grinned. “Twilight it has been a while seince we had seen eachother.”

you might have forgotten that they met already,

One of the people of the group looked familiar but he couldn’t figure out the persons name.

So I think u might have needed to put like spike having an epiphany remembering twilight's name. Unless u did it on purpose.

Just curious here but are Starlight Glimmer, the Young Six, Tempest Shadow, and Skystar gonna be in this story?

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No spoilers

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Sorry bout that, i fixed it up a little bit. I hope you enjoy the rest of the chapters

Mrs.?

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Thanks for pointing that out to me i will fix that right away

Okay, I see potential. However, moving from one thing to the next like that leaves readers a tad lost. Try going into length about the town or have a bit more of a dialogue before moving Spike ahead. Show us a few things to make us understand this Spike a little better. Also try and be a bit descriptive with the setting.

Another note flashbacks are a tad awkward if done wrong, instead have space out the point when there is a flashback and instead of telling us it's a flashback point it out by going on about the ages or something similar. Also a tiny bit of mystery helps too.

Im not the best at this but I hope this helps. I'd like to see this become something interesting.

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Alright I’ll keep that in thought, thanks for the feedback

This was a awesome start.