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Midori_Kuroba
I'm an aspiring writer, with far too many ideas for my own good. I write pony fictions for fun, and if others enjoy them, then that's all I could ask for.
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Don't approve of Spike getting off that.
If it was a different character spanking Rarity yeah but seeing his bully do that to another...no.
Hope Garble gets what coming to him.
This story isn't half-bad though I would tone down the spanking a bit, kinda makes the mares look masochistic.
Also, just a minor detail, instead of Galaxia High, you would call it Galaxia Academy.
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Sometimes you can't help what arouses you. But don't worry, I'm the kind of girl that gets off on making sure no misdeed goes unpunished.
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But for now, I have other stuff to focus on. 
The spanking is kinda my thing, and trust me, I'm tame compared to some people I know. As for the name, it's a good idea, but a little late. Maybe I'll go back sometime and change the name of the story and every instance the school name comes up in it... maybe.
Interesting read I quite like it. But looking at your track record with ten stories under your belt and out of that six have either been but hiatus or canceled it leaves me a bit concerned.
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I kind of expected that. People tend to look at said track record, and I will say this now. A lot of those stories are old and I made a lot of mistakes that made me fall out of love with them for one reason or another, but there are those that like them and it would be wrong to just delete them. I've improved a lot since then, and even now, I sometimes get started on writing a story that I'm so excited about I start posting it before it's ready, and then life happens.
But I can assure you that's not the case this time. This time I have my wonderful boyfriend helping me write this, who himself is an accomplished writer. It helps alleviate a lot of the work, and allows us to combine our ideas. This time I waited until I had more than an idea, I had progress, which is why I decided to show that by posting the first four chapters at once. We already have two more chapters done, I just want to wait before just throwing them all out there as well. But with his help, I've managed to put more time into this story than any other fiction I've done to date.
I don't know if that will completely douse your concern, but I hope it helps.
The way you portray Spike in the first few chapters sorta makes him seem more pathetic and emasculated than the early seasons of FiM. Chapter four helps his character out a lot but like they say "You only get one first impression" and his well... it doesn't do him any favors for readers.
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Why do you think it should be called an academy if you don't mind me asking?
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Well since nearly all the characters are aged up to 18 or over, academies can hold those age groups while a high school does not. At least not that often.
It’s a minor detail And it just sounds appropriate. In any case, it’s up to author if she wants to change or keep it.
Hmm, will AJ's butt be too toned to hurt?
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Huh.. interesting.. I didn't even think of that since the age part varies from country to country and I've seen schools that combine age categories. An academy by it's proper definition has a curriculum in which it specializes such as an academy of the music, academy of art, and so on or is a body of like-minded professionals (hence the specialized curriculum as most of the teachers share fields of related expertise). There are a lot of schools that use the term academy without being an actual academy surprisingly. Interestingly enough from what is provided in the story so far it meets many of the other requirement aside from that main one. If going by a naming sense maybe if the school was founded by nobles or a private sector I could believe the term academy would work following the way they tend to use the term incorrectly to make their facilities sound more impressive or formal but as it seems to be set up by Celestia or her family and I don't think either would name it that without it actually being one. However as you stated it is up to the author and the school could still have a specialization/focal purpose that hasn't been explained yet.
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That is a detailed definition of what an academy is and as you said, Galaxia High could have a specific curriculum that hasn’t been named yet. But as said before, it’s up to the author.
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The way I view it is it gives him room to grow, improve, and become better. Sure, he's nothing grand at first, but this isn't a shonen protagonist. He'll get better with time.
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There is indeed not a specialized and focused purpose of the school. It has a variety of classes for a variety of students. A high school has the general idea of what I'm going for. But as this is a fiction set in an alternate dimension, can kinda make the rules, such as how old those who attend it are and such. Bit of a cheap explanation I know, but Monster Prom used the same logic to get away with their innuendo and orgy ending.
spotted a small mistake
Shouldn't that be (vice)principal Luna?
Aside from that, I really liked this chapter. Especially since I like tabletop stuff, and Derpy tring to start a club like that just had me smiling.
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Well, technically she's still a princess in this world.
And yeah, we plan on having some focus on that club at some point. I mean, we're a couple of tabletop gaming nerds as well.
Also, HI APRION!
Heya. I really liked this story, and more importantly, your writing style. You don't rush things, you let things flow naturally and you work well with established characters. Spike's internal narrative and emotions were well executed and you showed as much as you told, which I always try to do in my own writing as well... sometimes even successfully.
It was a bit confusing with Spike being the same age as the mane six and having a mother that isn't Twilight, but I guess it works. Not a fan of Queen Celestia (instead of princess) because there are already so many changes from canon that you are risking making things a bit too complicated. The story was eventful, as in a lot happening at a time, but it never felt crowded and never suffered from it at all. And as a fellow spankfic author, I think there's never enough spankfics on the site anyway. 
I think it's almost sad that the u/d ratio is so weird, because this fic definitely deserves a better rating. You can thank CarcinoGeneticist for intorducing me to your writing. Hope to read more from you in the future.
Ohh, its a spanking fetish story.
I was like "why the fuck would rarity just be getting spanked on the random by garble?" Then i was like "Who the fuck spanked Pinkie, why is she talking about it like its normal?"
Hey man, if thats ur kink....
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It's why I not only gave the story the "fetish" tag, but put a note at the start of the first chapter explaining that. I'm glad you figured it out, but I did try to warn people who might NOT be into that.
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Didn't expect him to recommend this story to others! We really appreciate your kind words, it's always nice to receive some positive criticism on our writing style. There are a lot of characters in this universe and we'd like to show lots of them attention, but you have to be careful not to do too much at once, otherwise no one gets enough attention. As for the like/dislike ratio, it happens. In fact, I was expecting it. I don't think people pay attention when I point out at the very beginning what kind of story this is, and just dislike it anyways. But the fact that so many people do like it? That's what makes it worth working on.
It's a school full of perverts!!!
We want Disciplinary Council.
That would mean Spike's aunt is really V-Principal Luna!!!
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I mean, you'd expect most people to be pervy in a lewd fiction.
Oh yeah, gonna have to remember to introduce a disciplinary council down the line. Heh.
Don't spoil it in the comments! But yes, Luna is Spike's aunt.
That nice, i like this chapter....So Derpy and Luna pairing possible...wiggles eyebrows?
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I suppose technically at this stage it is "possible", but we'll see how things develop.
Nice that those two are making amends.
Wonder if Fluttershy and Luna could get along swimmingly especially when it comes for there love of pets.
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That would be interesting to watch develop.
have to admit, thats one twist i didn't see coming at first. keep up the good work.
Can't wait to see Tia get hers.
A ferm hand tempered by a gentle touch. That’s how you do it.
Yay, Trixie.
keep up the good work.
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And you know we will! 
I've been looking forward to her inclusion.
Spike taking charge.
You’ve got something to be proud of here, discipline is a pretty big turn off for me, but every other aspect of this is so good that sitting through it isn’t a problem for me.
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Well, it's not always going to be discipline, but I want those "for fun" moments to make sense and have some meaning to them when they happen, you know? At least, at first. After all it's easy to make spanking kinky, and there will probably be plenty of that down the line. All the same, I'm glad the overall story makes it worth it for you, at the very least.
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On a side note, it just dawned on me. By your words, if you're invested enough in the story/characters that you can ignore the form of fetish you don't like, then that means we successfully wrote porn with a plot! Huzzah! X3
Just getting started.
Spike learning how to fight is a start, because he needs to hold his ground and fight for what he holds dear.
There's going to be more 'he/she is right behind me' thing?
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Exactly. It's another way for him to develop and grow as a character. 😊
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Maybe, if we feel it fits a situation? Otherwise it's a bit of an overplayed trope. 🤔
I'm glad Spike training didn't involve him having a big ego and Applejack having to destroying that ego, it gets a bit cliche after a while.
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To be fair he hasn't had an ego leading up to it, so it would be pretty out of character to implement that trope at that point.
Pretty good chapter, thou not sure how to feel about AJ in this story. Don;t get me wrong, just....AJ being trans.......
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Well, it's my story, and I rather like the idea of AJ being trans. I like the story potential it has. I myself am trans and see nothing wrong with it.
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Hmmmm. Well it's AJ really, I read a story where Fluttershy is a Trans, and few other stories. so nothing new to me, just not sure on AJ being the one.
but that just me, still like to see what happens, so good story.
Look forward to more.