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Spelled newbie wrong, grammar and spellling errors galore. plus you rated the story e for everyone, so it’s getting pulled at some point.
I hope this helped you get off at least because it’s real bad. Sorry
thanks for fb anyway :P never knew newbie had a spelling
unless I meant for the poor protag to be called a place in Northern England. that is very insulting these days
Wait... Who is TG?
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TG = Transgender--A story where someone's gender is changed via magic.
Not bad, but there’s room for improvement. You could also try to shoot for at least 2000 words because it seems like all 3 chapters could be combined.
Okay. You have my attention.
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Agree. You can just put the whole transformation scene into one chapter instead of several small parts.
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thanks :) hear you both on the length but I love writing short things so that's gonna be hard for me to change.
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Still, I think it is better if each chapter contain similar word counts. This one is only a quarter of the previous ones.
The base idea was sound but the transformation scene was super short. I couldn't even imagine what kind of pony our protagonist turned into.
Why the rewrite?
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hey, it's just a continuation from the previous chap. not a rewrite.
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a cute pink one :3
maybe I'll pull all the mini chaps into one proper chap later and republish this with a bit more detail to the tf.
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Huh.
I don't know why I thought it was.