The Mane 6 Leave Starlight in charge while they're off on a Friendship quest, so she does the responsible thing and call's Spike and Trixie to come and watch the world burn
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It's pretty good. You do have more than a few periods missing though.
Missing the c in "Because" in the chapter title.
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fixed
This is nice and all, but all the spelling and grammar mistakes really threw me out of it. I suggest getting it looked at by an editor or something.
i lost it there
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I was hoping someone would
Amusing... It's quite sad that you did not include more... Let us say... Death.
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I'll think about expanding the story to add some
Maybe those 3 are sexually frustrated?
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Good guess, maybe I'll make a few more chapters?
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I think we all know they could use this.
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I'll think about it and decide whether to add it to this story, or just make a different story with it in it
a commotion
change ',' to a period.
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distance
castle
head,
sighed,
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Spike looked out the window, "Wanna watch the Bugbear fuck up the town?" He asked, there was silence for a moment.
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would
window.
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Ok ... I'm stopping there. This fic has random words capitalized that shouldn't be capitalized. Is missing end punctuation on practically every sentence. And there's a ton of misspelled and misused words throughout the entire thing.
The premise is good, and if you can get an editor to make this legible. It'd probably be worth a fav and upvote from me. As is I'm going to downvote it, purely because of the amount of raw errors. With a recommendation that you find someone to fix it up.
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I thank you for your help, I'll fix all these problem's right away, and try to fix a few other's while I'm at it
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Thank you.
Honestly, the biggest two problems are the lack of ending punctuation, and randomly capitalized letters. As is, after fixing those and a bit of editing. This looks, from the long description alone, like it could be an interesting story once it gets polished. And I look forward to reading the cleaned up version ^_^.
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This story is now Incomplete, expect some more chapters, and enjoy the new Tags.
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i'm...not sure whether to be scared...or excited
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My advice? Be both
Those 3 have just turned on the "I don't care" and the YOLO. I must admit, this is a unique idea. A similar story with Celestia and Luna leaving "all the shit" behind would be interesting, too. :)
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I Smell A Good Idea for a sequal
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Be like Nike. Just do it. :)
I could imagine Twilight trying to send letters to Princess Celestia, which she simply doesn't read. Also, she and Luna not notifying any of the Elements of any impending threats, nor hold Day Courts and Night Courts, nor attending diplomatic meetings, because they are just like, "Hello, we are on a vacation!"
I could even imagine not performing their respective duties of lowering the Sun and the Moon, but maybe that would be over the line.
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After I expand this story with the Promise of a New Chapter of two, I'll look into it.
Looking forward to the next chapter
Seeing a lot of bad naughty Glimmy lately.
Love it.
What's next for them watching pornos?
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I dunno, I'll think about it
I agree with Starlight. If someone is stupid enough to do something that will get them killed, let them die. It's just nature taking its course.
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Natural Selection at it's finest
I love this idea!
You got the like button slammed and you just give up on it? Shame.
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Look I'll be real with you, this story was supposed to just have one character, then it got stupidly popular so I made a second chapter, and now I'm just trying to figure out how to properly end it
More chapters, more chapters, more chapters, more chapters, more chapters, more chapters, more chapters, more chapters, more chapters, more chapters, more chapters
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I promise I'll write some chapters for this at some point. I'm just stumped for the next chapter.
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Weeeeeell, I have a few ideas on another chapter. It can even be an ending chapter, finally putting an end to the story as sad as that might be
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I'd love to hear the Ideas
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well if it makes you feel better I finally finished this after nearly a year
With Spike and his closer friend Gabby is concerned........
Maybe a one-shot with the waitress.
Go for it Spike!!!
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any idea on what the Waitress should look like?
9802992 I'm thinking a medium brown coat with a dark red mane and tail with a couple of reddish orange stripes. Her eyes should be a reddish brown.
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Cutie Mark?
9803019 A steaming loaf of bread.
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Love it
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alright, I'm not the best artist so I'm probably gonna have to use a base. (so beware of that fact I guess)
yes 😎
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Yess
9803070 I'm thinking Pegasus as the base.
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Alright I'll see what I can do