A girl who loves nothing but gold. A dragon who kidnaps her by accident. A misunderstanding that's more trouble than it's worth. An opportunity to escape. Just as long as no one tries to rescue her.
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................................ I................ actually lost some respect for AJ. I honestly did.
I have a feeling spike will fight her for real then rarity will see what's in the bag
I tried to give this a go, but the characters here are seriously off-putting. It's not just that they're largely two-dimensional punchlines, they're also generally unpleasant to read about. This version of Applejack is kind of awful, and reading this chapter actually made me feel a little bit sick.
Spike is the only character I was at all interested in, but as the "harem" grows, I have a feeling I'm only going to be spending more and more time reading about characters I hate. For me, it's just not worth it at this point.
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Ok one this is not the Applejack you know. this is a amazon version of Applejack, she was raised this way, she was raised to be a brutal amazon warrior.
There was no farm she grew up on raised with good old fashion values, this was a AppleJack raised to be a brutal warrior who does what she has to do.
Even if she doesn't like it, though maybe whatever in that bag could change things.
9298024
1. I already know this isn't canon AJ. I'm not that dumb.
2. This Applejack was raised as such but she also clearly hates being a warrior and is throwing a tantrum she met a pacifist which is a asshole thing to do.
3. It doesn't matter if that's the case it's a matter of first impressions matter and this was a bad real first impression.
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Read my comment I made, applies to this as well, plus there that book in the bag. Maybe there more to AppleJack the Amazon then you think.
Hopefully be revealed next chapter, whatever it is scares her to death is someone were to read it or see it.
I like that AJ feel like a Amazon. At least from what we have seen. of course if she was a REAL Amazon she would have killed him and found his unwanting to fight to be a weakness and a insult to her. Hell if she was a real Amazon she might have killed Rarity for siding with Spike lol. I still am hoping AJ doesn't fall for Spike in this. I like her as her own thing in all of this. If any romance I would want to see more is more Spike x Rarity moments. I also can't help but think AJ didn't give herself enough credit, she thinks Spike would have taken her out easy if he had been trying. IF she had prep to fight a dragon like I felt she did, and it was clear she does enough damage per blow to stagger him she could have done some real pain if/before he would take her out. I think seeing what will happen now will be a big change to events from here. There was some CLEAR foreshadowing in this chapter but maybe it wont be as in your face as it seems at the moment.
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She throwing a Tantrum as she was raised to be a warrior and has be that, Mares are the strongest and most powerful, she feels Spike throw that in her face or spat at it but not taking her seriously.
the whole fight to the death bit and all, but at least she listen to Rarity and accepted killing Spike like that be wasteful.
So some hope for her.
Yeah It not much of a excuse but honestly, not every Amazon will be like Wonder Woman.
9298034
No but she could've acted less like a spoiled brat. At least to me she came across as such and I can't stand characters like that.
9298036
True, thou wonder if it more to convince herself of her people's ways then anyone else, I wouldn't be surprised it was drilled in her head like Diamond tiara was taught by her mother Spoiled Rich .
Only ti was Granny Smith.
Plus there the book in her bag...maybe it from her other family like her brother and Father?
Or maybe it's a book on farming or so....or could be a cheesy Romance novel?
9298039
You don't get it. AJ has been spoiled and kinda ruined for me. I really don't care for her right now and hope she kinda vanishes after this arc.
9298041
Ok fine.
Do what you do and I do what I do...and that enjoy reading this story with AJ in it.
9298044
I never said I'd leave did I? I just don't like this AJ.
9298051
Ummm never accuse you of leaving i said i enjoy this story even with this form of AJ in it.
you don't want to enjoy it fine by me. not going to twist your arm,
it should be pointed out the actually mythical amazons would have applejack executed if the details got out, she didn't fight honorably she beat on someone and then still lost and proceeded to attack when her opponent chose to leave, thats not a victory thats by all the Greek myths a dishonorable action.
but as said more and more you seem to just be doing this to torture spike, he's lost the right to set rules in his house, attained to life endangering dependents, has to deal with a mare who's sanity is questionable at best both spending his gold and fucking it, and oh yes now he has a psychopath come in to try and force a fight, at this point i'm just praying the next mane 6 member to appear beats the living shit out of the others for being legitimately awful people.
9297954
Yeah. Throwing a tantrum because you didn't get a fair fight sounds like something Rainbow Dash would've done. Not with her characterisation in this story, but in general. It sounds like an RD thing, no an AJ thing.
9298058
Oh but it's a GUY so her 'Amazons' will spare her.
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Agreed.
Yeah that was my reaction as well
Ohhh, she wants to be able to make the choice to not fight... she's jealous
Are you asking him or yourself ?
I kinda feel like AJ dosen't know how to say "No" to Granny or the Amazon way... that frustrates her, and when she learned about Spike choosing not to fight really got to her since its what she wants to be able to do.
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contrary to the feminazi interpretation of the myth, the amazons neither hated men or killed them on principle of being men, they where women who chose to be warriors to prove themselves equal to men so as to honor the goddesses. there are several counts of peaceful interactions with the amazons including Heracles meeting with hippolyta which went amazingly well until hera interfered, true to mythology amazons would look at applejacks actions as cowardly disgraceful and highly dishonorable.
9298075
Oh I know and agree big time. Just saying these fake Amazons would still give her a pass because it's a guy.
Jesus Christ. Now a punching bag. The big fella deserves a break honestly. So spike is gonna suffer with all of the mane six? I hope not.
Rarity is probably going to resist this engagement. She only likes treasure and maybe dragons as her feelings for Spike claw into her head. Applejack is basically an Amazon yearning for combat and kills, but throws a tantrum when she was told that the dragon is a pacifist. She's also a drone in the ways of the Amazons and would not defy her granny's wishes. She also has a secret that she keeps to herself and if they were to discover her secret, there would be more to her than meets the eye. But to Spike, the ghost of his past began to haunt him during that brief fight...is there anyone good from his past? A voice of reason to speak to him, a voice that speaks to him like a mother if the ghosts try to haunt him again?
Spike may have been an experiment to a bunch of cruel ponies. But what if a certain few spoke to him after the disaster, with worry and care. Even though he's a pacifist, even a dragon that hates combat can unleash the True Dragon with you.
I foresee a very pissed, very angry, VERY DEADLY Spike snapping into action next chapter.
Great chapter!
9298029
Honestly, I kind of don't care at this point.
My issue with this story is with the characters (plural), and Applejack is just latest to put me off. Unless the character writing in-general immediately takes a serious step-up, on-top of "fixing" Applejack's characterization (because seriously, she's just a cliche archetype with Applejack's affectations stamped on top), I'll be getting less out of this story than I'm putting in.
Lets see, while this went a bit further than I thought, I'm not too surprized....more I'm surprized that Spike wasn't killed, my guess is that the 'beast' that Twi's parents stuck in him is about to rear its head, and now all 3 princesses will need to run for their lives....that, or AJ does drag Rarity back, and this story ends....but I think this is about where I get off the train, next 'Mane 6' member that shows up I fully expect to kill spike, then revive him somehow....which will prolly be Twi to finish what her parents started
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Before you jump off, let me ask you a question:
Is it that you don't like Spike being defeated/attacked at all, or do you feel like it is done to a degree that is off putting?
Morbidly curious if Spike can actually die. If it has to be pointed out he is fighting a mortal that would imply true death is impossible for him.
9298194
The only thing i have a tiny problwm woth is the fact that applejack thought she was going to be raped. I mean how many times has she been raped to think that and not only exspect it, but to do so willingly?
Other than that, good chapter and i look forward to more of your work.
Can something good ever happen to spike in this… I know you probably have plans to turn it all around at some point; and I want to see the next chapter free of the influence of this comment… but dang spike sure is getting the short end of the stick a lot. This chapter he just stood there like a punching bag. I'm trying to see the silver lining really hard… hopefully he won't have to be hurt this severely in a unarmed fight again; that would just be sad.
Hoping to see what's in the bag... Soon
Also
Why does it seem like spike has no combat training…
If he was raised to be a weapon it would make a lot of sense that he would have combat training. It doesn't have to be at the the best level but recognizing and figuring out attack patterns seems like pretty basic stuff… and he takes forever to even think about looking for her attack pattern…
Why?
(Edited: removed the size from the letters [made me seem way too aggressive when I was just thinking that loudly when the epiphany hit]… also reworded a bit so it seemed to express my thought better…)
9298267
Gee, maybe because as a pacifist he doesn't spend a lot of time thinking about stuff like that? And also the fact that so far the majority of his fights were won with intimidation rather than actual combat?
What the hell, AJ?
Very.
AJ, he's a DRAGON. What clothes would fit him to begin with?
You are psychotic.
What?
She's right.
Oh boy.
What's so important I wonder?
TOO BAD!
How very interesting.
I want Spike to go insane right now, like full on demonic batshit insane. I want him to kick Applejack through a wall. Why? Because she took his treasure, you don't take a dragon's treasure.
Round 1: Apple Jack wins.
Night Light's giving me a strong Jon Irenicus vibe.
Do something Spike!!!!
FFB, all I can say at this is: ....
I have been looking for this all week--and this is what shows up??? This must have to be one of those "the darkest is just before the dawn" stories, because from jump it seems like Spike's life is just getting darker and more hopeless with each new character (exception of Coco--she's cute and funny, I would love to hear from her again). I know there is that payoff at some point, but man, you are really making us--and Spike--earn that happy conclusion...ok, 'happy' probably wouldn't be the proper term...but still....!!
Good chapter can't wait for the next one
Spikey you saved me! But you didn't kill her did you?
That bitch landed in the lake that away;
Damned dragon beat me... I don't believe it!
was it his power?
nope
his skills as a worrier ?
nope
his personality ?
nope!
well what is it? spit it out!
He done threw me in that lake there and I can't swim....
and I pulled you out!
yes master.....
crap now I have 3 crazy broads
Hi, Cup cakes?
I'm lost,,,, can you let me in? NOW!
What now?
you tell me!
MORE HOT MEAT !
I've seen enough anime to know where this is going. Our protagonist lying on the ground seemingly defeated has flashback to some traumatic memory or his inner darkside awakens gets a surge of power and rekts their opponent shit.
Good chapter though 👍
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I think overall off putting. Canon Spike gets this enough. It be nice to see the tables turned.
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My friend in the Amazon Legend if an Amazon is defeated and not killed usually that means she has to become the victors wife it's literally stated in the ancient legends to conquer and Amazon is to become pretty much a God among men and you can also blame Spike's wording for the ideal Applejack got into her head. So yeah for an Amazon there's only two options in defeat after battle was Death or breeding.
I'm gonna have to concur with all the negative thoughts on this chapter, honestly it's starting to come off as nothing but another Spike abuse story where the author tries to justify it by throwing psychotic floozys at him as if raunchy sex is the cure for them being horrible cunts that have nearly killed him a hundred times.
Likely to jump ship if this keeps up. I've already read my 300 spike abuse stories for one lifetime
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That would make sense...except he was raised from birth to be a weapon. You don't just forget that kinda influence.
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No, but if you don't like it you may repress it.
9298294
He migjt not be trying to hurt people thats why he acts like that