Flying High - Falling Deep

Scootaloo enters the Pegasus Flight Camp ... but what will wait there for her and her new found friend?
Will she pass her test ... or will she fail? And will she fulfill the claims of Cloudsdale?

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#1 · Dec 13th, 2011 · · ·

why can't i stop reading scootabuse

#2 · Dec 18th, 2011 · · ·

Reminds me of Rainbow Factory,sort of. Anyway,good fanfiction

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Anonymous XXX #3 · Dec 26th, 2011 · · ·

why is flight camp always so evil? i dont get it. and what the heck do you think 'muster' means? youve got it completely wrong. you cant stand in front of someone and muster them. all in all, this could use some work. you've got a good plot, even if its extremely remeniscent of rainbow factory. you just need some more characterization and time. maybe focus some more on the flight camp itself. good luck with your future writing endeavors!

Mr Tinkertrain

Mr Tinkertrain #4 · Dec 26th, 2011 · · ·

88424 I see your point. Changed it. But please, if you tell me any vocab mistakes, tell me the correct word for it.

Mr Tinkertrain

Mr Tinkertrain #5 · Dec 27th, 2011 · · ·

88424 Oh, and about the similarity to Rainbow Factory ... It's basically the same, but a slightly different plot.

bcsnakeeyes

bcsnakeeyes #6 · Mar 25th, 2012 · · ·

well at least scoot doesnt die lime in rainbow fctory.thats a great positive.

Mr Tinkertrain

Mr Tinkertrain #7 · Mar 26th, 2012 · · ·

363224 Well ... I just couldn't pull it off to let her die :)

Mr Tinkertrain

Mr Tinkertrain #8 · May 10th, 2012 · · ·

572287 Comparing this "flight camp" to the concentration camps of WWII is wrong ... it is simply wrong. What happened in the concentration camps is much, much worse than this. They make me sick.

I'm sorry if the story sounded like that. It wasn't intended, I promise.

pin_stripe

pin_stripe #9 · May 10th, 2012 · · ·

572610 yeah i kinda typed before i thought. im really sorry, i wasnt thinking. im so very sorry. i took the comment down if that helps any. i cant apologize enough. if i offended, im really sorry. im just sensitive about thse things, but thats my fault. and again im really sorry.