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Rainbow Dash follows a sky-splitting star to the ground, carrying a single magic-slinging occupant.
With no way to communicate with the alien, they both must rely on bonds stronger than words if they're to cooperate with a misfit band of UFO hunters and avoid the wrath of a ruthless, paranoid pegasus general.
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Hey, it's the story I've been talking about for the past month!
For every chapter, I'll also be posting some art drawn by the very talented Chris the Blue, who also drew the cover art. This time I'll be posting the art of two of the characters in this story.
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General Stalwart Watcher
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Far Out
Art by Chris the Blue
Here at last, eh? I'll put it on the top of my read list.
Is the human base on Samus Aran?
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No one in particular, though it's entirely possible I was unconsciously coding Samus when writing her.
Ice cream, Mandrake. Children's ice cream..
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I thought she was to a degree inspired by a warlock from Destiney
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I should clarify that the human is literally magical; she isn't just using Sufficiently Advanced Technology. That's why she has a spellbook.
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Starcrash (aka The Visitor)
Real name: unknown
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Starcrash (unmasked)
Art by Chris the Blue
Is there some history between the general and the unknown?
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Nope, he's just paranoid of aliens in general.
Loving the story so far. From what I can tell this is mostly a Rainbow Dash story so the M6 isn’t going to be in?
It would be nice to not have them because I like to see more stories of M6 on their own having adventures which isn’t much from what I can find.
I like the artwork, though it would be awesome to see more artwork for scenes in the story.
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Yeah, none of the M6 are really going to show up, except maybe by casual mention. I actually thought about commissioning Chris for a pic or two for the story, but I figured they'd get in the way more than anything.
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Awesome, I don’t think pictures would get in the way. Just having the important scenes similar to how the Godzilla crossover handles it can work. But that’s up to you
This Pegasus General needs a takedown. A hard one.
I'd ask how Dash came to that conclusion, but then we met the general. Now I'm just wondering how Celestia feels about this less-than-welcoming attitude towards visitors from another world.
In any case, definitely off to a promising start. I look forward to seeing where the story goes from here.
... and I'm going to get to find out quite soon, since I missed that the second chapter's out. Whoops.
The thing about plausible deniability is that it raises the question of just what you're plausibly denying. Of course, asking General Watcher something like that won't likely end well for the questioner.
In any case... yeah, a certain line from Ant-Man comes to mind: "Why don't you call the
Avengersprincesses?" Of course, the ufologists don't know that Watcher's acting on his own initiative and thus may assume that this goes all the way to the top. Dash may not be able to disabuse them of that notion.With or without the simple solution, this still looks like it's going to be a very fun read... though I can see myself getting very frustrated with General Watcher. His parents should've named him Confirmation Bias...
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Fun fact: General Watcher's prototype name was Tin Pot.
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Truth Seeker
Art by Chris the Blue
I don’t know why but if I was in her shoes, I would be lmao seeing the royal guard ponies, not running for my life.
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will the princesses appear in this story at some point?
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Can't really say either way, as that'd be spoilers.
I really like that we don’t get any dialogue from the visitor because it makes her mysterious and fun to read with no words but in motions and signs.
I love the Celestia response which fits with the show
I hope this story doesn’t end to short but so far it’s been amazing
Interesting start to this. Far Out seems like such a crackpot, but it's odd and mildly suspicious that he was able to be in the right place at the right time to provide a hiding spot. I'm not sure I would trust that his backstory is as Looney Toons as it sounds on a surface level. Plus, if there's more to his story and knowledge of aliens, that might also mean there's more to the General than the standard trope of military guy who wants to violently defend against an unknown alien menace.
The detail that it's an actually magical human is interesting too. That's not the techy human world astronaut I was expecting.
"But she's still the general's boss, isn't she?"
"Yeah, but we need to maintain dramatic tension somehow."
Anti-alicorn fig leaves aside, very nice breather chapter. I quite like the Star Society, though I do have to wonder how Scourge got roped into all of this. Looking forward to more.
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Yeah, she doesn't have any lines throughout the entire story. It might not even be English she's speaking in the few places where she's described as saying something, but nobody can understand her.
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I love language barrier stories though the fun ends when the characters finally start learning each other language.
Awesome choice by the way
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Scourge is from the Dragonlands, and likely left after getting mocked too much for his interest in radios and other nerdy stuff. At some point he ended up in Las Pegasus, and kind of fell into Truth Seeker's little gang.
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Yeah, the human astronaut having actual magic was kind of how this story started, since I thought it was a fairly novel idea.
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In a previous draft they were just wearing plain olive green army uniforms, just for ponies, but I thought that was a little too on-the-nose, so I just changed it to olive green armor.
This is far more help than I would have guessed Far was capable of providing.
Doh, no magic for the alien.
This Star Society has top notch professionalism. No wonder they were able to rescue everyone from the military last chapter. Surely this next mission will go similarly.
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Only Top Minds are accepted into the Star Society.
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Reduviidae (aka Red) and her preferred disguise, Black Sun
Art by Chris the Blue.
Who's do you think you are, Daring Do?
Ahh, I get it.
Well, at least Dash made a pretty good showing for herself.
I would think that Dash would be able to counter the general on reflex alone. He must have gotten lucky.
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He's nearly as fast as her, and she wasn't expecting a general like him to have that kind of speed, hence her mocking him being a desk jockey.
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That's fair
"We have reason to believe the Bearer of Loyalty is guilty of treason."
"Say that again without contradicting yourself."
I have to say, any plan that includes "set a forest on fire as a distraction" doesn't strike me as the best plan.
And as for the end... well, at least they're going to find the base. And as Dash herself noted, she isn't the kind of mare you can just make disappear.
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Bit of a mismatch there
Wait until Sonic in a Equestrian form shows up and gives that General what for!
A Space Mage!
This is how you get into global war: by immediately attacking foreigners! Here's to hoping that general gets court martial for breach of conduct...
Whaaaattt???!!! Forget court martial, this prick needs to be arrested for treason!
But our intrepid visitor also shares blame. You just don't brazenly rush into a lockdown unless you're damn sure you can win, and she should have realized just how many unknowns she was dealing with. Her blunder cost her majorly...
Well, with such a well-thought-out-plan and a top-notch team lead by a Wonderbolt, there can be no way to fail!
Well, this is one reason why you can't have misfits running important ops.
We could buy the general's clairvoyance, but how does Classified get away with being there first thing in the morning?
Hmmmm...
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Scourge the Dragon, Chief Communications Engineer of the Star Society
Art by Chris the Blue
So, story's done. I'll be posting the last chapters and the epilogue in the next few days.
Heh, what kind of crazy nut makes all the buttons alarm buttons? Better question, why would the method to unlock any kind of escape route be placed deep in a cell block? Silly ponies...
Keep going! ;)
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Starcrash alternate/back cover
Art by MrMeow
After a month hiatus, I've come back and finished it off! Final word count: just over 30k.
Story-wise, I'm really happy with how this turned out, since while it's shorter than my actual longest story, Hybrids, I feel like the ending was much less crammed in. Of course, I could be wrong about that, and if I am, let me know.
I'll probably submit this to EqD after more editing, but for now I can just sit back and be happy that it's done.
Will there be a part two? Just curious.