So far, i think this will become a power fantasy in liquid form, that was then frozen, and then sculpted into whatever you wanted it to be... I love it.
There are few things I like to do in my free time and these are those things, read, play Fallout four, and watch My Little Pony Friendship Is Magic, and right now I'm playing Fallout.
Ehhhhh..... kinda put off by this. No one except a legitimate and total psychopath would make their first action when in a new world, to brutally murder someone. No matter who it is they're killing, the fact that their very first thought was brutal murder, and the fact he seemingly enjoyed it too, that's not just a red flag, it's fuckin crimson.
Been trying to find more stories to read in order to pass the time, but unfortunately this ain't one of em, sorry mate.
11264769 I am actually rewriting this chunk of the new empire series on and off, also , the dude thinks its a dream currently. Its not well expressed in this version of it, cuz I wasn't a very good writer back then, but I am re-writing it as I said :D
Ok, reading the author's note. these most of the mlp characters are semi-anthro? Basically they're mostly normal ponies only they're able to stand up on thier hind legs and walk like a normal human or whatever.
11851051 ponies can walk on all 4, or their hind legs. They find all 4 more comfortable, royal guards are trained to walk upright comfortably so they can use their firearms
You dont instantly die from being stabbed in the stomach.
Other then that error so far so good! Xd
So far, i think this will become a power fantasy in liquid form, that was then frozen, and then sculpted into whatever you wanted it to be... I love it.
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Your comment confuses me,but thank you
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maybe he meant the heart, but you dont instantly die with any injury except bombs
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Nope,he struck her spine and a few vital organs
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Quite the opposite. It’s slow.
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Lol your responding to a comment that is over a year old XD
That sword reminds me of an Warhammer 40k chainsword
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It's a assaultron blade from the automatron dlc
The pacing of this chapter is a little fast but still we will see where this goes
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I wrote this while half asleep, most of the time
omg that sounds like me
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noice lol
5/10 Average story so far. It's interesting but this could definitely use an editing pass.
Ehhhhh..... kinda put off by this. No one except a legitimate and total psychopath would make their first action when in a new world, to brutally murder someone. No matter who it is they're killing, the fact that their very first thought was brutal murder, and the fact he seemingly enjoyed it too, that's not just a red flag, it's fuckin crimson.
Been trying to find more stories to read in order to pass the time, but unfortunately this ain't one of em, sorry mate.
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I am actually rewriting this chunk of the new empire series on and off, also , the dude thinks its a dream currently. Its not well expressed in this version of it, cuz I wasn't a very good writer back then, but I am re-writing it as I said :D
Yeah, nah, this ain't for me.
Best of luck for future readers tho.
Ok, reading the author's note. these most of the mlp characters are semi-anthro? Basically they're mostly normal ponies only they're able to stand up on thier hind legs and walk like a normal human or whatever.
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ponies can walk on all 4, or their hind legs. They find all 4 more comfortable, royal guards are trained to walk upright comfortably so they can use their firearms